A Walk to Remember

Good start

Well written. Keep going.

Keep going

I'd sure like to read more of what happens.

More Please

Go on, I want to know what happens next....

"... and through my leg over his shoulder ..."

threw, not through!!!

PROOF-READ and get someone to edit your submissions!

Thank you for all the comments. I appreciate the feedback. It was my first submission and it was encouraging and invigorating to have people read my story! As for the comment by Anonymous, though the comment has merit and I will definitely do a better job next time, he/she could learn to be a little nicer when making comments.