All Comments on 'What the FUCK'

a thousand stars* - cucked by a ghost is briliant, the resident WBC will spurt voluminously at this tale, well done

you get a 5 from me, funny as hell - get used to those vultures baby

whats the title of StangStar06 tale

Very clever ! Let's see if the haters are angry at her for being unfaithful with a ghost ! Way better than 90% of this genre, so write some more.

Where the fuck is the story? This was a cute idea and it could have been an awesome tale but you barely wrote it. I've seen your name as editor on a lot of stories by different people here but it hasn't given you any of their skills as a writer. Willing to give you a break as a first timer but come on there's more to a story than a good idea. One of the commenters said that this was funny. How, it seemed more sad to me. I gave you a 4 to be fair

Ghost fuckers are fractions of our imaginations powered by like movies but to me it is the thought that count,the wife cheats and should be thrown to the kerb.She is still in love with a memory.Time for the marriage to go for s holiday

I'm sorry, maybe you should stick to editing, though this could have done with some.

there may not be a StangStar Ending. He did write one and it really is funny as Hell. I emailed him about the ending this morning, he may not post it though if you guys want to read it you'd better email him before he gets sick of sending it out. because i get the feeling that something about this pissed him off

Real good story; nice to see something a little different. However you left a lot out that would better explain why she ever married Pete. Her love for him is very unconvincing, and just because she cheated - and yes it was cheating - but because she carried this torch for Howie for alll those years. Just because Howie can't come back now doesn't resolve things. If Howie could come back again she'd likely cheat again. The part about her guilt was too brief, and no where does she explain her supposed love for Pete. Pete should move on; she's not worth his love. Keep writing, I think you've got some great talent.

By the ghost?

but, sort of lacking in emotional reaction. My first reaction would be to get out of there and divorce her because she is cheating whether it be with a woman, a dog or a ghost! Now to find the endings.. Where oh where has the ending gone........

But don't believe for a minute that you are not a very good writer. Look forward to future postings of your own.

There is so much more you could have done with this

story. That said for a first try it was not bad.

The big joke could be you should have let StangStar06

edit it for you. Writing like many things takes time

and practice.

You could have had more information about all your

characters. But again with practice you would get

better at fleshing things out.

Thanks for the effort.

How silly can a person get a story i think not just plain foolishness.

How about the name of the follow-up story as I can't seem to find anything related to this story on StangStar06 listing.

LibertyBell

This wasn't, however, so much of a story as a outline .The living people were as ghostly as the marriage interloping specter. ''Flesh out'' your characters & err ' plot' - this could actually be good.

This being Literotica maybe start with her first BJ to her 'first true love ' & future phantasm .Good luck & I'd like to thank you for your editing poweress that has enabled my favorite authors to be that much more productive.

You started with a great idea, and a truly unique premise. It's your story, you finish it! And maybe I'll give you one or two more stars. This story was little more than an outline, and now we have to email another author for the ending? I know this is an amateur web site, but I think you're pushing the boundary's a little too much. Does it really matter why she cheated? Cheating is cheating, regardless of who (or what) she cheated with. Besides, fucking dead people is disgusting, and illegal in most states. What if at Christmas she decides to do Santa or Jesus? Or would she do Jesus at Easter in a threesome with the bunny? Then there's Pearl Harbor day, where Uncle Sam just lays there while she blows him to hell. I mean everybody loves their country, Jesus and Santa Clause, Right? Would it be so wrong to deny them sex also? By over looking this first indiscretion, he is giving tacit approval, and opening the door for future licentious behavior.

Good storyline, but wrong category. It belongs to Sci-fi fantasy, but that category the Author does not ask for SS06.

@ Dear zed0 This category's stories deal with alive characters. The ghost and others belongs 2 others categories as Sci-Fi & Fantasy or the NotHuman. This story only a joke for SS06, because SS06 does not write Sci-Fi & Fantasy or NonHuman. SS06 has some stories in the Romance category.

My one of favorit storyline the "Outlander" in the first chapter the Author put the Sci-Fy & Fantasy besides the main charecter's cheating wife.

She'd probably end up pregnant with the ghosts' baby.

One; this is a Sci-Fi story. Two; she still broke her wedding vows by being unfaithfull. So with two points a against you I give it 1 star.

P.S. Get an editor.

P.S.S. There is no follow up by SS06.

it could REALY STUPID STORIES

@ Harry You are wrong. There are 2 categories in Lit the Sci-Fi @ Fiction and NotHuman. This story belongs to them. This Author wanted to prank SS06 only.

...I don't get the joke, but I don't really care for StarStang06 stories so maybe there's some inside thing there I missed. If it's a story, I still don't get it.

OK, bald headed old fat guys can coach world class 14 year old girl gymnasts to the Olympics, though they can't do gymnastics themselves. So no question editors can "coach" or edit writers, though they can't really write all that well themselves. I get that, and maybe this proves it.

You'd probably get better at writing stories if you would write more, but it is really hard work if you don't like it all that much and Lord knows Literotica writers really need editors. Maybe especially stang since he is such a prolific writer he obviously doesn't spare much time for the real work of editing.

A LIQUID PLUMBER DOUCHE

the ped0! zed0 the ped0 to the rescue, a one night stand with the ghost of the love of her life leads to... what was he on about? Jesus, Santa, leaping to more incoherent conclusions than that drunkard Harry.

FFR, pedophiles should not take hallucinogenic drugs.

I did not write an ending on purpose as this was to be a joint effort with me and StangStar06 who I edit for. He wrote a brilliant ending but for personal reasons, it appears that he has decided not to submit it. I will be pulling this story off the site as soon as I figure out how to do it. I really wanted to try and write and I thought the concept was unique and would work. I have been proven wrong. Thanks for taking the time to read the story. I really appreciate it. I know realize why new authors do not submit in this category often. hugs to all anyways, Kate

There should be a catagory for "Really stupid comments". You would ne a star

Don't stop writting. This was very clever and did leave some possible endings. i am disappointed that I will not be able to read Stangs ending and I like his style and perspective. RC

The text could have used a bit of massaging and I suppose that proves how hard it is to edit your own writings. That said, the story line is interesting and innovative and I did like it, but would have liked it to be a little longer. It almost seemed you were in a hurry to finish it even without an ending.

Keep writing, don't sell yourself short.

don't stop writing! There was lots of good stuff in your story too!

is that the way you wrote it, the wife may love her husband but not only is he married to an adulteress, but to a necrophiliac! Talk about your "dead fucks"!

That is asking too much out of any man! :)

This category (Loving Wives) deals with alive caracters. The stories with Ghost belong to Sci-Fi & Fantsy or NotHuman. Look at NoHuman- Aliens, ghosts, androids, and more. The story is good , but it is IN WRONG CATEGORY. This story is a prank for SS06.

If I were SS06 I would write something and I put the NonHuman category.

You should finish your own story!

and now I can understand why. But what the fuck, I guess you're having fun in Literotica and you're polite and productive. Good for you. Practise may make perfect...

we started this out as a chance to do something fun, for Halloween and look what happened. Kate wrote her story and I liked it. I liked it so much that I wrote an ending for it. Yep I did write an ending. I hoped that it would be a surprise but she mentioned it in her forward. Kate's story was posted in only a few hours. As a lot of you who write to me telling me how you've submitted lots of stories that never see print or are rejected know, submissions here are supposed to take 72 hours or so they claim. I know writers who simply don't post here any more because they can't get a straight answer why their stories didn't make it. Whether you know it or not I have probably had more stories rejected by literotica than anyone. That's the reason that we sometimes only post on that other web site. As a matter of fact there's a guy who wants me to do an e-book containing only my rejected stories. So yep, after it sat waiting for a very long time I pulled my ending. I was never angry at Kate or any of you. And as has been stated I did personally email the story to anyone who wanted it. Another thing about this that bothers me is the thing about categories. Kate's story includes a wife who cheated on her husband. To me that makes it loving wives. Does it really matter what category a story fits in? What should really matter is whether or not the story entertains you. If you like it then it was good. If not read a different story.

My last thing is that some of the comments were just plain nasty. I've seen this about a lot of stories here. I've even felt it a lot myself. There's a difference between a person offering real criticism about an effort and someone who is just being rude. Try to pretend for a second that you were writing the story, it takes a lot of guts to even put one out. Anybody can throw a rock but it takes some skill to fix the window.SS06

Shame that there's no ending to this on this site, a great shame and disappointing too. It's an interesting concept. I do feel that you should have written your own ending, it's your story, you have to own it (though you did warn us, so fair enough!). That's why I don't like multiple endings also, it's a writer's cop-out! I guess a possible pregnancy after the event would have a huge bearing on the outcome, but as you didn't write it, I'll never know! As for the 'nasty' comments? If you post anything in 'LW' you'll get them, that's why I won't anymore. There are too many readers who lack the intelligence to seperate fact from fiction whilst also lacking the mental capacity for self-censorship (How hard is it to hit the back browser when you're not enjoying a story?). Their comments say more about them than they do about the writer though, which is probably why they're always 'Anonymous'. We're amateur writers on here, but what they call 'feedback' doesn't even make them amateur critics. Ignore them. I'd love to see your ending to this, not anyone else's. As I said, shame.

@ Dear StangStar06 I surrender you, because of the wrong category. All right to read fantasy stories from the XXII century or other other Galaxy with starships etc in the Loving Wives category. For me it is not a problem sirreadsalot10 excellent storyline the "Outlander" is put from the Sci-Fi & Fantasy to the Loving Wives. The Author wrote me there is a sequel plan to bring the main characters Jack and Ava back to the Earth, where the cheating wife and Jack and his lover Ava could encounter. Good concept, but I would not suggest it him to put the Loving Wife.

Any story that is entered in a themed contest is posted within 24 hrs *or less* if a certain phrase is used in the notes box when the story is submitted. And this story was entered in the Halloween Contest... thus the quick posting.

Go look at the Halloween Contest thread-or any themed contest thread-and you will see the authors' entered in the contest talk about fast posting.

Entering a theme contest and posting a regular story are two completely different things and post differently.

Hang in there Kate.

StangStar06 has decided to post his ending after all. Look for it in about 4 days. thanks

For a new author, this is a good story. a good plot, very different and intriguing and above all short. Anything more would just be padding. The two main characters are as developed as they need to be. Howie and the fortune teller while important to the plot, don't need that much development. A good first effort, congratulations. BTW maybe I'll try a finishing story but I can't claim to be as good as sso6

Very original storyline, and this story has tweak my interest for the ending.

Thanks for the read

and did not like it. You wrote a beautiful story, and I think you should finish it. SS06's was just wrong. They deserved better. You feel the characters, you know them. Give them the proper ending.

You have a lot of Imagination. I read SS06s Stories always but You definately have Imagination. I have not found alot on NonHuman stories on here i like but I liked this one.

It seems to me that you have done a fine job. I liked it and now will go read the SS06 ending. Thank you for this fine story.

How could you consider yourself an editor? You have got to be kidding me, what trash!

SS06 stories are full of unedited errors and this one of your's looks to have been written by a 6th grader.

You quit him a while back and now you're back. He'd be better off without you.

Let me encourage you.....jump!

1 star.

You have a good imagination and did well. There are some nasty commenters on this site that will blast you no matter what. This is the real reason so many quit writing and why so many of us will not!

Having read some of the stories you have edited, I know your command of the English language is far beyond that of most of us on this board. We, the reading community, would love to see you let go of your insecurities and write what comes into your head. You are gifted and do not realize it.

As for the ending, I kind of agree to write your own. I also understand the joint effort that was going on. I thought it was a great idea. I however, disagree, with the comments of editors can’t write. Forgive me for stepping out of line here – go fuck yourself. SS06 is correct, it take a big set of balls (sorry Kate) courage, to post. Even more so when you get bashers that read a story all the way through but clearly hate it. How more self-destructive is that? I too have read stories on Lit that I just didn’t care for, or saw too many mistakes that make me skip it. I thought the characters were engaging and the flow was good, at least for me it was. I gave you 5 stars just for the simple fact that you had the – intestinal fortitude – to post it. I do agree with some of the other comments, try again but get the hell out of this category. Just some background, I lost my first love to a train wreck. Even though I’m married, I would make love to her if she came back. Nice job Kate!!!

But a crap story. I hope the stanger can fix this. We'll see...

That was an interesting idea and you did a good job with it. Though as you are more comfortable with the editor's red pen, best to stick with what you are more comfortable with!

That was a good story how about a new one

You have put a lot of commenters to shame!!!!

Keep writting

ED

Loved the story, I am curious about what kind of ending you would have given it though I understand the joint effort between SS06 and yourself on this one. Kudos, I would love to see new stories from you. It takes a lot of courage to post. Thanks for the good read.

Melissa

YES! If Pete wanted to fuck his first girlfriend from high school would ashleigh have gone along with it just to satisfy his curiosity? I think not. Then she tells him that it has taken her 10 years to realize that she loved him? And only then because she was disappointed with the "ghost sex". So: "honey, I never loved you, and I just fucked my dead boyfriend, but it wasn't as good as I hoped, so I love you now because I don't want to be alone, and ghosts don't make much money and can't get me pregnant"! Cheating is cheating.

It was much better than a lot of others on this site & you do have talent and imagination. I wish that you'd write your own ending,

Basically everyone is wrong; this was no more than a "manifestation of a dream"; no bodily fluids were exchanged, kind of like a watching a 3D porn flick. There is not one person in this world has has never fantasized about having sex with someone that they are currently involved in a monogamous relationship with.

This actually makes me think of a scene in the movie BRAINSTORM; in which a guy records his brainwaves while he's having sex with a hot blonde, another guy immerses himself in it and has a breakdown. He never touched the woman but had non-stop orgasms until someone else turned off the machine.

I'm going to SS06 and try to find the follow-up

THX;

DKP

The bottom line is she was cheating.

However "noble" her motives were, if they were THAT pure she should have told her husband, or at least done it somewhere other that their marriage bed.

she's nothing but trouble

"I went back to the shop and begged Julie to give me just one night with Howie, no matter what the cost or what it would take."

That says it all. She is a selfish slut who is willing to risk everything to get what she wants. Divorce her asap. What happens next time if she wants someone else?

Howie took one look at me and said "OMG! You're so old! And you gave up your cherry to that grandpa guy? Oh well. It's my only chance at getting laid."

Nine months later she delivered a zombie!?!?

Will Howie's baby be invisable? Maybe they can name it Caspar.

of funny comments there at the end.

To those who say it is a sci fi story, where's the science?

And it's a better story than I could ever write, now to read his ending. To 26thNC I could never have thought of that. LMFAO Signed: BTW

Cheaters caught and?

Don't see how you can go back from this

Let the poor dead kid get his rocks off.

Your imagination and writing skills are far better than you give yourself credit for.

Nice story. Especially for a first attempt!!! I love Stangstars endings. BTB is my "Go to" move!!!

She doesn't have a ghost of a chance to save this marriage.

Good entertaining story - interesting concept. Forget the nasty naysayers- they bring nothing to the story nor do they assist the writer.

Howie is no threat. What is the problem? Is Pete's ego that fragile?

This is an odd variation on the "Magic Pussy" trope...i.e. the wife is healing someone/saving the world/contributing to science by slutting around. The supernatural/necrophiliac element of it is hilarious, so I'll give it a 4 (technically the writing is good, too).

So help me understand how Pete’s ego has anything to do with her cheating? Man, women, ghost, werewolves or vampires. It’s all cheating. I see the simp/cuckold mentality runs rampant on this website.

Howie isn't a threat? Pete's ego?

She cheated on the man. Plain and simple. She had every right to choose to betray her husband. He has every right to leave her over it. How is she gonna make it up to him? She uses excuses, not solutions. Already off to a bad start. She's making demands that he change how her feels, his morality, and accept what has happened to take her back. She's asking a lot of the man she just betrayed, don't you think? She's thinking either about her happiness or Howie's, but her husband is in last place.

What most cheaters fail to realize it is usually IS completely their fault. That their partner has A LOT of hard work to do to reach reconciliation, not them. That trust is ALWAYS going to be an issue moving forward. And last but not least, the cheater usually avoids putting in ANY effort at all to win their spouse back. Because it wasn't just trust that took a hit, the value placed on the cheater took a hit. They are no longer as attractive. Cheating is an ugly thing, it makes the cheater uglier....in their soul.

Basically his wife needs to give the man space, and offer him hall passes, some legal assurances, agree to go to therapy, and maybe stop being a selfish prick. Any of these are a lot better than, "But I love you. We were meant to be. I love only you, please come back to me."

@EPDSR is completely correct: you have skills and imagination, and I wish you would write more.

@lc69hunter is correct, to a point. Howie is not a threat to the marriage. Ashleigh is. She made a premeditated decision to have one night of sex with another man, much as she would have decided to have a one-night fling with an out-of-town friend. The fact that Howie was her first love and a 'ghost' (though clearly able to achieve penetration) is interesting but immaterial. Her decision and the ease with which she arrived at it and executed it make it likely she'll do it again, regardless of her newfound appreciation for Pete. And how much of that appreciation is due to the fact that "my Howie" was a dud in bed?

Hmmmmm well i read all the comments so far n agree with them to some degree all making valid points. Sounds wierd i kno. Ha but the bottom line is in my opinion i think for a first time story u did a great job n would like to see more of ur work. Ive been reading stangs stuff got to his ending n came here 1st. Hope u try again sometime ur story was appreciated n enjoyed.

Interesting, I will indeed read the ending.

This is pretty interesting and original premise. And anyone associating with StangStar can't be a bad author :)

5 stars for a first attempt.

so hilarious, so cheating sluts will use this tactic from now on.

You tried and did good

As she said ghost or something still cheating

Please write more stories.