Awakening of Cael

OK I GUESS SO IS THERE ANOTHER CHAPTER COMMING

IF SO I CAN'T HARDLY WAIT BUT U B LIKE THE OTHERS ON HERE AND STOP AT ONE STOREY AND LEAVE OFF WITH A CLIFHANGER

I may be working on this story

I'm currently busy with my series, Taken by Fire, and this story about Cael was a little side project. If the ratings are good I will continue Cael and Alexa's story. :)

more detail

I think that this could easily be a 5 star story if you fleshed it out a bit more. It seems a little rushed to me. I would have loved to know what she was thinking, what she was feeling. what the area looked like, what exactly happened to her team members, etc.

Details would make it perfect.

Slow down, edit

Dont rush. Read your work again. Try to understand your characters. Make them belivable. And like someone else suggested, flesh it out. More detail, and please slow down. It is promising though.

I would love to read more of this story

I can understand a quick story amongst chapters of another but please continue this story we need more erotic horror stories

Please write another chapter

This is amazing please write another chapter!!!!!!!!!

anonymous

this was brilliant write more!

are you people serious?

This was a poorly thought out story that was stolen from at least 3 different movies I've seen recently, The Mummy, just to name one. The dialogue is unrealistic and cheesy not to mention the numerous grammatical errors. Readable yes, brilliant? Come on now.