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Nice start...
... can't wait for the rest of the story.
ShrkDivr
Go on
I very much liked it, It was so short though. I hope you can go more in depth with there budding boyfriend/girlfriend romance.
Good start...
... but it felt more like a first paragraph than a full submission.
The story has the bones to go further, but, as a reader, I would relish a more fleshed out introduction for the introduction to a story.
I have high hopes for this story!
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