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NICE START BUT TOO SHORT
I LIKE IT SO FAR BUT THIS WAS WAY TO SHORT FOR MY TASTE DON'T B ANOTHER ONE HIT WONDER ON THIS SITE CAUSE THERE'S IS ENOUGH OF THOSE ON HER ALREADY
I LIKED IT ALOT. PLEASE UPDATE VERY SOON. BECAUSE CAN ANYONE SAY SEXUAL TENSION....
I like the plot ...
But lose the "cos"
the plot is wonderful , but try writing in the past tense , it would work better and will probably be easier for you .
nice start
but find an editor who will help you out. Your story will flow better and be more enjoyable!
Five!
Love battle of the sexes and since Emelina is a high flying lawyer, am certainly looking forward to see both of them at war with words.
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I hope you write more to this story! I cannot wait to know what else happens!!
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