His mother has lost his respect. The fabric of their relationship has been tarnished forever. He now sees what kind of slut bitch his mother really is. I would maintain a distant non sexual relationship with her long enough to finish school or join the military. I would have her deposit my dad's social security check directly into my checking account and get a job so that I would gain some economic independence. Once I left, she would never hear from me again. She could take her money and shove it up her whoring ass. I hope there is another part to this story where the son does exactly that. It's not the incest that bothers me. It's the mother's fucked up attitude that has me so irritated.
Exactly the type of short, well written erotica I enjoy. The ending opened the way to a sequel which I hope will be forthcoming soon.
Cool it Hawkeye, it's only fiction!
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Anonymous12/27/11
Love it, but maybe you could switch it up
I love the story! But I wish you would have let Sid move out the house, and then his mother is sad and shocked that he actually left. She tries to find out where he's and finds out that he's doing great for himself and is very successful at any job you want to give him and married. Then she continually tries to reach put to him and he constantly rejects because he is still hurt, but she stays persistent. She decides she's jealous and eventually she takes him. She gives up her life and comes to live with him as his wife and lover. The ex-wife becomes their servant.
by
Anonymous12/27/11
I liked it but...
I wouldn't have stopped there. Just when you got my interest you ended it. If you wrote more with detail and build up about the following with this part (not as a second part) I might have given you 5 stars. Or if you pay me 50 or 500 as well.
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Anonymous12/27/11
diction
It seems to me that you think of the mother favorably. She seems sympathetic to me. I like her. So if you feel that way banish words like "smirk" and "snicker" from your vocabulary if you are describing people you like. Look up the words. Get a dictionary if you don't have one. Don't use words that contradict the good feelings you seem to want us to have about her.
by
Anonymous12/28/11
an excellent story!
This a fine story of son and mother messing around. Mom takes dick all the time, so why shouldn't she take her own boy's fine young prick in her mouth and eventually up her cunt? Boys always love to blow their balls in their mommy, and nowadays more and more boys are doing what comes naturally.
by
Anonymous12/28/11
A better story
For a counterpoint story about a whore mother I recommend "Anna's Love" by author Starlight.
At least the ending will make you feel better.
by
Anonymous12/28/11
good story
This has potential. The beginning is great and I like the confrontation, but the transition to the blowjob is a little fast, something like this, should develop over days not minutes. It doesn't seem believable, within the universe of the story, that the mom would take on the son just like that, an act that she has to know will change their relationship in a major way. Good story though. I'd like to read more about these two characters. Very sexy set up with lots of potential.
I'm think the author was going for a fun loving
carefree point of view for the mother here, but
didn't succeed in telling it right.
If maybe she had a little to much to drink, or
she came home from having a really, really bad
night with customers that were total dicks etc etc.
Then it would explain her response to the
situation. Returning severe disrespect with disrespect.
If however the author did intend to describe her
as it came out and this is how she always is.
Then the story title needs to be changed to
"No Class over paid Sociopathic Gold Digging Heartless Bitch."
In which case a previous commenter is absolutely
right and this good hearted son need's to get as
far away from this toxic psycho slut asap.
English
Hot
Please keep the story going.
Sick
This story turned my stomach...
Very good
I liked it... short, but hot in it's own way. Love confident, mature women and his mom was all that... proud of her skills. Nicely done
Very Short
I would like to see a follow up story about what happened when he finally got his nerve up ....
Respect?
His mother has lost his respect. The fabric of their relationship has been tarnished forever. He now sees what kind of slut bitch his mother really is. I would maintain a distant non sexual relationship with her long enough to finish school or join the military. I would have her deposit my dad's social security check directly into my checking account and get a job so that I would gain some economic independence. Once I left, she would never hear from me again. She could take her money and shove it up her whoring ass. I hope there is another part to this story where the son does exactly that. It's not the incest that bothers me. It's the mother's fucked up attitude that has me so irritated.
Well done!
Exactly the type of short, well written erotica I enjoy. The ending opened the way to a sequel which I hope will be forthcoming soon.
Cool it Hawkeye, it's only fiction!
Love it, but maybe you could switch it up
I love the story! But I wish you would have let Sid move out the house, and then his mother is sad and shocked that he actually left. She tries to find out where he's and finds out that he's doing great for himself and is very successful at any job you want to give him and married. Then she continually tries to reach put to him and he constantly rejects because he is still hurt, but she stays persistent. She decides she's jealous and eventually she takes him. She gives up her life and comes to live with him as his wife and lover. The ex-wife becomes their servant.
I liked it but...
I wouldn't have stopped there. Just when you got my interest you ended it. If you wrote more with detail and build up about the following with this part (not as a second part) I might have given you 5 stars. Or if you pay me 50 or 500 as well.
diction
It seems to me that you think of the mother favorably. She seems sympathetic to me. I like her. So if you feel that way banish words like "smirk" and "snicker" from your vocabulary if you are describing people you like. Look up the words. Get a dictionary if you don't have one. Don't use words that contradict the good feelings you seem to want us to have about her.
an excellent story!
This a fine story of son and mother messing around. Mom takes dick all the time, so why shouldn't she take her own boy's fine young prick in her mouth and eventually up her cunt? Boys always love to blow their balls in their mommy, and nowadays more and more boys are doing what comes naturally.
A better story
For a counterpoint story about a whore mother I recommend "Anna's Love" by author Starlight.
At least the ending will make you feel better.
good story
This has potential. The beginning is great and I like the confrontation, but the transition to the blowjob is a little fast, something like this, should develop over days not minutes. It doesn't seem believable, within the universe of the story, that the mom would take on the son just like that, an act that she has to know will change their relationship in a major way. Good story though. I'd like to read more about these two characters. Very sexy set up with lots of potential.
I'm think the author was going for a fun loving
carefree point of view for the mother here, but
didn't succeed in telling it right.
If maybe she had a little to much to drink, or
she came home from having a really, really bad
night with customers that were total dicks etc etc.
Then it would explain her response to the
situation. Returning severe disrespect with disrespect.
If however the author did intend to describe her
as it came out and this is how she always is.
Then the story title needs to be changed to
"No Class over paid Sociopathic Gold Digging Heartless Bitch."
In which case a previous commenter is absolutely
right and this good hearted son need's to get as
far away from this toxic psycho slut asap.
Nice Start
I would like to hear the rest of the story it sounds interesting. Thanks for the time and effort.
Need More Chapters
The story has great potential and it needs more chapters. Great job!!!
great story
Good work - well written, nice build up. Any chance of more?
Fucking dumpster wimp
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