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A very good start indeed, please continue writing. Although I think your chapters could be a little longer, like around 2-3 pages. But, very well written and nice plot.. Cheers!
Loved It
I want a PPS !
What a great story!
I thought this was amazing, well worth 5 *s; thank you - and more, please!
absolutely stirling story, as ever
wonderful story.
such delicious horror.
Seriously twisted
like the time/sound vortex of nitrous oxide at the dentist, spiraling in to an echoey space the same but different every time.
Thanks for sharing your spark.
My names Molly too and your story really intrigued me. I found myself becoming one with this piece. I cant wait to read Ch 2 :D
Hate To Disappoint
I'm not sure why they put the "Chapter One" on this one...there's not a sequel. Sorry to anyone who was looking for one.
hi
My name is also Molly, and I just turned 18. Your stories are wonderfully satisfying. I love your work.
what a fantastic idea well told and very well structured, had me being Molly :)
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