by crialia
I would love to create a 3D image using POSER for this story.
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Was she doomed to stay impaled on that?
I must protest this being put under nonconsent... She totally wanted it.
You need to add at least another paragraph, or maybe even more. The story is well-written so far, but you haven't done the most difficult thing for a writer - finish it.
I agree with the other three comments: (A) this was surely consentual, even though she didn't know what to expect; (B) you need to "finish" the story, so as to let us know what happened after "impalment"; and (C) we need to know what effect this activity had upon Jo
You couldn't have picked a more perfect place to end the story! Very hot. Obviously, Jo is going to die in the trailer. I mean the story emphasizes the unlikelihood of her being found in there, how hot it is and how in ancient times the mistress or master of the servant girls would leave them impaled on the statue as long as she desired. Sometimes it is better to end the story on a high note and not spell out every last thing to the reader. That is one of the most erotic stories I have read on here and it was a girl and a statue...wow.
So different than 99% of what gets published in this category; it surprised me and I like that! Beautifully, artfully written, as well. Sure, it may not have been completely "non-consent", but it certainly fits into this category on the basis of "reluctance", due to her futile struggling and slow penetration...
This story is better by far than average. You must write again, and again.
Please
A very strong and imaginative story with a great ending.
Very entertaining story, one of the best we have read in a long time.
Keep writing.
I remembered this story from years ago, but could never find it. Thanks for reposting!!!
that was my favorite story that i have ever read on this site! i wish it were an actual statue i would love to find one somewhere ;)
Awesome does not begin to describe this story. Another chapter would be nice, but its fine ending where it does. I actually had to quit in the middle and pick it up again with some privacy.
Hi. This story appeared verbatim in the hot blood series years ago. Congrats if u were the author all those years ago
I am definitely the author of this story, and I have never heard of the "Hot Blood" series. Cause for concern? Can you provide a link to the specific anthology because googling it only brings up a long list of titles of the anthologies themselves but not their contents. The story was originally posted to MCStories in March 2009 under my pseudonym.
I have read the hot blood series also, its over 20 years old, and I don't remember this story. but I do like all your stories, and was wondering if you are going to write more?