Congrats on your first ever story to Lit. I thought the story had merit. Now having said that the language was rather hard to read. The street talk to be exact. I'm not that familiar with it and sometimes had to stop and reread what was being said.
I still think the bones of the story itself were good. I will look for the next chapter and give this story a chance. I wish to congratulate you again on your first story and wish you luck!
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Anonymous11/15/11
Good
This was a really good start. Can't wait to read more.
some mistakes in word usage( its imposing , not opposing) but other wise great story, hope to see more soon
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Anonymous11/16/11
ok
so i was wondering if the ibonics is needed or you just think like that. plus nonhuman category needs nonhuman aspects.so far all i have read is a bad thug story.
English
Congrats
Congrats on your first ever story to Lit. I thought the story had merit. Now having said that the language was rather hard to read. The street talk to be exact. I'm not that familiar with it and sometimes had to stop and reread what was being said.
I still think the bones of the story itself were good. I will look for the next chapter and give this story a chance. I wish to congratulate you again on your first story and wish you luck!
Good
This was a really good start. Can't wait to read more.
good start
some mistakes in word usage( its imposing , not opposing) but other wise great story, hope to see more soon
ok
so i was wondering if the ibonics is needed or you just think like that. plus nonhuman category needs nonhuman aspects.so far all i have read is a bad thug story.
really no follow up??
It was really good. Want to hear more of the story how does a princess get caught up with this crew. Please finish!!!!!!
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