I can't believe this comment is the only one posted. Surely I'm not the only one who has read this story. You have done a great job and I for one am glad to have read it. Please continue with your writing as I plan to make a note of your name and watch for future submittals.
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Anonymous11/15/11
Confusion ?
Stehanie's husband is Marc. Is her brother also Marc? Or did you just lose control of your characters?
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Anonymous11/16/11
develop
i enjoy your story but it reallly goes fast into the explicit details. try to develop your background a little bit more. especially brother and sister stories need, in my opinion, a little bit more background (for example hidden desire, why they affect each other, why they get this unmoral (at least in most of the countries all over the world incest is forbidden ;)) etc.) to be interesting to read.
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cheating
cheating is never good they should have been divorced first.
HOT! And well written.
I can't believe this comment is the only one posted. Surely I'm not the only one who has read this story. You have done a great job and I for one am glad to have read it. Please continue with your writing as I plan to make a note of your name and watch for future submittals.
Confusion ?
Stehanie's husband is Marc. Is her brother also Marc? Or did you just lose control of your characters?
develop
i enjoy your story but it reallly goes fast into the explicit details. try to develop your background a little bit more. especially brother and sister stories need, in my opinion, a little bit more background (for example hidden desire, why they affect each other, why they get this unmoral (at least in most of the countries all over the world incest is forbidden ;)) etc.) to be interesting to read.
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