I usually enjoy this setup where a wife ends up fucking her father-in-law but this time it just didn't ring a bell. At first I couldn't figure out why. The point is, despite the sex it wasn't much of a jerk off story. Just ordinary sex that nowhere seemed to show it actually was taboo-sex.
Also there were no emotions, no feelings, no guilt, just two horny people fucking. I didn't care for them in any way. And in the end I thought: Okay, they fucked ten years without remorse and hubby not finding out. I guess the day her soldier husband and son finds out they are dead and nobody cares since they never cared.
It's their little secret? How did they manage that? Erin says at the beginning that Jack, her husband will only be gone for 3 months, yet once she and his father Dave finally consummate their affair, it continues for the next 14 years, with no one the wiser. Even if Dave moves out once Jack returns home, that's a long time to successfully keep those knowing winks, casual glances and constant caresses in passing from being found out by even the most naive of husbands in the 14 years time when he came to visit for dinner or to play cards or for some reason. And if Erin is going out to meet him, in that length of time, making the excuse that she is going out with the girls is going to get her caught up in a lie at some point, you would expect. I understand "their little secret" for the 3 months while the cat's away, and maybe even another 6 months to a year once Jack returns from his military duty, but keeping up the shenanigans for 14 years, and still going strong, its a bit too much to swallow, and I think you just forgot the premise you based the story on.
As I said, I liked the story enough to give you 3 stars, and since you seem to write pretty decently, I think you could rewrite this and add another page or two, holding off on the ending you have here, bring the husband back into the scene, coming back from his training mission, and finishing the story as a loving wives tale and making him a cuckold to his father. That way you could have Erin and Dave continue on 14 years more with the knowledge of her husband, who stood by and watched/helped the better man. That would make more sense, and also return the forgotten man, Jack, into the story line.
Of course there are other directions the story line could go, as well. This was just an example. Like I said, you have written this story nicely. I just think it could have been better.
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I usually enjoy this setup where a wife ends up fucking her father-in-law but this time it just didn't ring a bell. At first I couldn't figure out why. The point is, despite the sex it wasn't much of a jerk off story. Just ordinary sex that nowhere seemed to show it actually was taboo-sex.
Also there were no emotions, no feelings, no guilt, just two horny people fucking. I didn't care for them in any way. And in the end I thought: Okay, they fucked ten years without remorse and hubby not finding out. I guess the day her soldier husband and son finds out they are dead and nobody cares since they never cared.
I have always liked stories about dad fucking his son's wife.
A good fantasy about a sweet horny young girl fucking a older man who just happens to be her husband's father.
Very nicely written story and the sex was kinky and erotic, what's not to like about this one.
Thanks for the read.
This is not incest
1* for wrong catagory
OK story, liked it well enough, but...
It's their little secret? How did they manage that? Erin says at the beginning that Jack, her husband will only be gone for 3 months, yet once she and his father Dave finally consummate their affair, it continues for the next 14 years, with no one the wiser. Even if Dave moves out once Jack returns home, that's a long time to successfully keep those knowing winks, casual glances and constant caresses in passing from being found out by even the most naive of husbands in the 14 years time when he came to visit for dinner or to play cards or for some reason. And if Erin is going out to meet him, in that length of time, making the excuse that she is going out with the girls is going to get her caught up in a lie at some point, you would expect. I understand "their little secret" for the 3 months while the cat's away, and maybe even another 6 months to a year once Jack returns from his military duty, but keeping up the shenanigans for 14 years, and still going strong, its a bit too much to swallow, and I think you just forgot the premise you based the story on.
As I said, I liked the story enough to give you 3 stars, and since you seem to write pretty decently, I think you could rewrite this and add another page or two, holding off on the ending you have here, bring the husband back into the scene, coming back from his training mission, and finishing the story as a loving wives tale and making him a cuckold to his father. That way you could have Erin and Dave continue on 14 years more with the knowledge of her husband, who stood by and watched/helped the better man. That would make more sense, and also return the forgotten man, Jack, into the story line.
Of course there are other directions the story line could go, as well. This was just an example. Like I said, you have written this story nicely. I just think it could have been better.
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