spoiled a little by your loquacity; 'peruse' instead of 'surf', and so on. You don't have to write like a dictionary salesman or Times correspondent to tell a good story.
4 stars because of this alone; the story was probably worth five, but I can't give you four and a half.
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A nice story,
spoiled a little by your loquacity; 'peruse' instead of 'surf', and so on. You don't have to write like a dictionary salesman or Times correspondent to tell a good story.
4 stars because of this alone; the story was probably worth five, but I can't give you four and a half.
Thank you for posting.
I wish this would happen to me!
I loved your story! It is one of the greatest fantasies of mine to have a session exactly like that! Now, to find the perfect master for it....
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