Wonderful story between older mother and son. Not hot, but good with a lot of potential. Like the mother reading Shoe Slayer's bio, discovering her son is not only the writer, but a cross dresser as well and sending her son home with her bra. As a son who loved his mother and wore her outfits to be close to her, I can relate to this.
An alright story, but a bit on the fetish side for a storyline.
I so wanted him to fuck his mom and fill her old pussy with his cum, and keep it filled for a long time.
Thanks for the read.
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Anonymous11/18/11
could be more hot
should more hot thing between mother and son. well story. but i think there r more sex and love need between mother son. mother naked body should displayed.
I'm soo happy for you honey. This is a good one and it is very well received, congrats. My favorite category will always be "incest romance". Your stories will only get better as you write more.
Hugs & Kisses , Percilla
So it might be just me but i had a hard time following some of the story due to punctuation and sentence structure. The overall story is good and thought out but towards the middle and end I just couldn't help but read a few sentences twice or three times then go back and change the wording around to have it make sense. I'd have a few others proof read it before posting a sequal.
But again good story past what i was getting stuck on
I ran across it while looking to see what else you had written. (I have read and commented on another of your submissions.) While I don't care for the fetish parts, I realize it's a matter of personal taste. When I discount that, I liked the story.
Having been an electronics instructor for a good many years I can't seem to resist correcting "papers." Since I do appreciate the comments others made on my stories I'm going to make a few suggestions. #1 You have a little problem with punctuation, but nothing a good book wouldn't cure. #2 Watch the run-on sentences and awkward speech patterns. Ex. from story: Come in the kitchen as I am baking, want some coffee? Think about this: "Come on in the kitchen, I'm baking. "Want some coffee?" or maybe "Let's talk in the kitchen while I finish my baking? You want coffee?" Anyway, when you read your work aloud and find it doesn't roll off the tongue you probably should revise it.
If this helps Ok. If you ignore it that's OK also. You've written a lot more stories than I have, so GOOD WRITING!
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Anonymous12/04/15
I really like a mom who's naughty!
I don't know how his mom figured things out, but who looks a gift horse in the mouth? I'm glad John's mom got so turned on, and incredibly horny reading his stories! I'm sure he incorporated some of his own desires in his writing. Now they can fuck until the cows come home!
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Wonderful story between older mother and son. Not hot, but good with a lot of potential. Like the mother reading Shoe Slayer's bio, discovering her son is not only the writer, but a cross dresser as well and sending her son home with her bra. As a son who loved his mother and wore her outfits to be close to her, I can relate to this.
An alright story, but a bit on the fetish side for a storyline.
I so wanted him to fuck his mom and fill her old pussy with his cum, and keep it filled for a long time.
Thanks for the read.
could be more hot
should more hot thing between mother and son. well story. but i think there r more sex and love need between mother son. mother naked body should displayed.
Great Honey
I'm soo happy for you honey. This is a good one and it is very well received, congrats. My favorite category will always be "incest romance". Your stories will only get better as you write more.
Hugs & Kisses , Percilla
Might be just me
So it might be just me but i had a hard time following some of the story due to punctuation and sentence structure. The overall story is good and thought out but towards the middle and end I just couldn't help but read a few sentences twice or three times then go back and change the wording around to have it make sense. I'd have a few others proof read it before posting a sequal.
But again good story past what i was getting stuck on
GOOD STORY
I ran across it while looking to see what else you had written. (I have read and commented on another of your submissions.) While I don't care for the fetish parts, I realize it's a matter of personal taste. When I discount that, I liked the story.
Having been an electronics instructor for a good many years I can't seem to resist correcting "papers." Since I do appreciate the comments others made on my stories I'm going to make a few suggestions. #1 You have a little problem with punctuation, but nothing a good book wouldn't cure. #2 Watch the run-on sentences and awkward speech patterns. Ex. from story: Come in the kitchen as I am baking, want some coffee? Think about this: "Come on in the kitchen, I'm baking. "Want some coffee?" or maybe "Let's talk in the kitchen while I finish my baking? You want coffee?" Anyway, when you read your work aloud and find it doesn't roll off the tongue you probably should revise it.
If this helps Ok. If you ignore it that's OK also. You've written a lot more stories than I have, so GOOD WRITING!
I really like a mom who's naughty!
I don't know how his mom figured things out, but who looks a gift horse in the mouth? I'm glad John's mom got so turned on, and incredibly horny reading his stories! I'm sure he incorporated some of his own desires in his writing. Now they can fuck until the cows come home!
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