It seems like marriage is just a way station where one still gallivants around then goes home to the spouse who is now vulnerable to STDs that their exploring other half may have acquired. The husband is a engineer in the story but he that doesn't mean, he thinks things completely thru.
This guy has no blood in his veins. It worked out different than the subtitle suggested. Which was possibly on the menu after she drove off in her car.
If you are unhappy with cuckish behaviour than do not read this one!
Luckly I saw where this was going before I read too much of the story,
I see by the comments, I was right. I don't fault the writers, there is a spot for any kind of story on Lit, I do wish they would write a disclaimer or put them in fetish. Anything so as not to waste our time.
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Anonymous01/05/12
Editor?
I think he pulled a fast one. If not, he's less competent than you are.
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Anonymous01/05/12
Editor & stupid comments.
The basic story was just OK. Editor was useless and should have corrected many issues. I can't understand comments about 'wimp husbands'. If you feel that way, don't read the story in the first place. There are certain sections on Lit that do nothing for me - so I don't go there. I therefore don't comment or criticise. BTW, try being married to one person for 40 years and not changing your ideas on sex in all that time....then you can criticise. Happy New Year.
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Anonymous01/05/12
Open
Your story is fine. You do need to weed out repetitive paragraphs, etc. My one question is, What purpose does the last paragraph serve? Do you mean that you think she is still cheating with the same crowd, or that she is keeping her options open and may cheat soon, or what? Also, would a real husband just OK his wife doing that much cheating without doing anything?
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Anonymous01/05/12
Stupid, really, really stupid.
Is it possible to make two characters as stupid as these two are? A stupid slut and a stupid wimp, keep trying MrPen one day you might right a story readers will like.
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Anonymous01/05/12
two stupid fuck sticks
his degree is in 98.6 possibly he may be able to ask about fries with that happy meal her degree is in whore 109 they deserve to swim in the same slime pit as the rest of the occupy crowd as for the loft is a packing crate from India for used bunji condoms. yea we got their number it is 0 4 steps below PATHETIC.
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Anonymous01/05/12
Dumb
He is one stupid ass and a cuck--she is a skanky whore.
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Anonymous01/05/12
sucked
writing sucked. Story sucked. Author sucks. Where is stangstar this thursday? leaving us to drown in cucky crap
I've read shitty writing on this site, but this was way beyond shitty. This was un-fucking-readable.
Are you a fucking third grade dropout? Fire your piece of shit editor and then stop writing. This is so far beyond bad... it's indescribable.
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Anonymous01/07/12
Look, the premise of the story is off kilter.
You have two types of readers here. One would have preferred the guy not give her permission and then cut her head off if she did it anyway. The other, much larger group, would have preferred it if she and her husband really enjoyed it and they made it a regular Thursday night even with er bringing the guys up there while he watched her have her fun.
I liked the story but the writing is atrocious. Bad grammar everywhere. If you need, I can edit the stories for you, but I must warn you, I don't like any gay stuff in the stories. No hubby doing clean up duties either. That stuff just grosses me out. Let me know it you want me to do the editing in the future. I'll send you a private feedback message with my email address.
Don't worry about the negative feedback as far as the storyline goes. We have a few people using multiple accounts who go out of their way to read stories they know they won't like, and then give them 1 star, and leave a nasty message. I will give you advice on how to deal with that in the feedback. But don't worry about it. People don't read these stories for the comments. They read them for the story. We've also learned not to pay attention to the ratings either since we know there is a small group that read it just so they can vote it down. So we don't use the ratings to determine whether the story is worth reading.
This guy is another limp dick getting ready to lose his wife!
What an ifiot! The guy makes allowances for this bitch to go out and have her fun that she has to have without him and she breaks every rule he set up! She is a fucking whore and divorce is on the way! What a stinking whore bringing a guy back to his house to fuck him!!! Skank ass whore!!!
A lot of questions, but the main ones are: Did he love his wife? Or did he have ice instead of blood in the veins? because he didn't took any pleasure from her cheating, as if he didn't care!!! 2*
English
anothing willing cuckold
It's just so sexy knowing and watching your wife get fucked.......NOT Just another WACC story
Pretty Stupid Cuck
Put a disclaimer on this shit, like the other wimp writer before you did.
PRIDE MAY GOETH
but stupidity is way in the lead. TK U MLJ LV NV
haven't found
a good story yet, this morning. Damn!
Why Do People Like This Get Married ?
It seems like marriage is just a way station where one still gallivants around then goes home to the spouse who is now vulnerable to STDs that their exploring other half may have acquired. The husband is a engineer in the story but he that doesn't mean, he thinks things completely thru.
Really?
This guy has no blood in his veins. It worked out different than the subtitle suggested. Which was possibly on the menu after she drove off in her car.
If you are unhappy with cuckish behaviour than do not read this one!
Don't thank your editor
He did a terrible job.
Luckly I saw where this was going before I read too much of the story,
I see by the comments, I was right. I don't fault the writers, there is a spot for any kind of story on Lit, I do wish they would write a disclaimer or put them in fetish. Anything so as not to waste our time.
Editor?
I think he pulled a fast one. If not, he's less competent than you are.
Editor & stupid comments.
The basic story was just OK. Editor was useless and should have corrected many issues. I can't understand comments about 'wimp husbands'. If you feel that way, don't read the story in the first place. There are certain sections on Lit that do nothing for me - so I don't go there. I therefore don't comment or criticise. BTW, try being married to one person for 40 years and not changing your ideas on sex in all that time....then you can criticise. Happy New Year.
Open
Your story is fine. You do need to weed out repetitive paragraphs, etc. My one question is, What purpose does the last paragraph serve? Do you mean that you think she is still cheating with the same crowd, or that she is keeping her options open and may cheat soon, or what? Also, would a real husband just OK his wife doing that much cheating without doing anything?
Stupid, really, really stupid.
Is it possible to make two characters as stupid as these two are? A stupid slut and a stupid wimp, keep trying MrPen one day you might right a story readers will like.
two stupid fuck sticks
his degree is in 98.6 possibly he may be able to ask about fries with that happy meal her degree is in whore 109 they deserve to swim in the same slime pit as the rest of the occupy crowd as for the loft is a packing crate from India for used bunji condoms. yea we got their number it is 0 4 steps below PATHETIC.
Dumb
He is one stupid ass and a cuck--she is a skanky whore.
sucked
writing sucked. Story sucked. Author sucks. Where is stangstar this thursday? leaving us to drown in cucky crap
Wow
Seems like"anonymous" is in a pissy mood today.
good one
i liked it ,of course i would like to try him, love to see if he is better than bbc
they are really freadky
write another one , i was wet when she was
Really
You find this shit erotic, how come I never met any of you little cucks and your hot sluts when I was single, perhaps because you don't exist?
Bad!!!!!
This was awful. Better luck next time. Thank for the effort.
well bozo, try harder next time
Not good.
He's a future willing cuck and she is a future whore. This makes it a lousy story.
good job ignore all the wankers whinging about cucks you might want to add more action though
quotation marks
missing in some of the dialog.
Unreadable!
Fire your editor. I usually don't make a big deal out of punctuation but in this case I must.
Was this written by a fucking third grader?
I've read shitty writing on this site, but this was way beyond shitty. This was un-fucking-readable.
Are you a fucking third grade dropout? Fire your piece of shit editor and then stop writing. This is so far beyond bad... it's indescribable.
Look, the premise of the story is off kilter.
You have two types of readers here. One would have preferred the guy not give her permission and then cut her head off if she did it anyway. The other, much larger group, would have preferred it if she and her husband really enjoyed it and they made it a regular Thursday night even with er bringing the guys up there while he watched her have her fun.
I liked the story but the writing is atrocious. Bad grammar everywhere. If you need, I can edit the stories for you, but I must warn you, I don't like any gay stuff in the stories. No hubby doing clean up duties either. That stuff just grosses me out. Let me know it you want me to do the editing in the future. I'll send you a private feedback message with my email address.
Don't worry about the negative feedback as far as the storyline goes. We have a few people using multiple accounts who go out of their way to read stories they know they won't like, and then give them 1 star, and leave a nasty message. I will give you advice on how to deal with that in the feedback. But don't worry about it. People don't read these stories for the comments. They read them for the story. We've also learned not to pay attention to the ratings either since we know there is a small group that read it just so they can vote it down. So we don't use the ratings to determine whether the story is worth reading.
The bad grammar
just proves this is a real writer with a --ahem - real -life incident ! Validation !
This guy is another limp dick getting ready to lose his wife!
What an ifiot! The guy makes allowances for this bitch to go out and have her fun that she has to have without him and she breaks every rule he set up! She is a fucking whore and divorce is on the way! What a stinking whore bringing a guy back to his house to fuck him!!! Skank ass whore!!!
Whatever Makes You Happy
Is a ridiculous excuse and totally without thought.
He has no sense of pride and self worth to let her just "do what makes herself happy".
A lot of questions....
A lot of questions, but the main ones are: Did he love his wife? Or did he have ice instead of blood in the veins? because he didn't took any pleasure from her cheating, as if he didn't care!!! 2*
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