:)
Promising start.
Don't make it too easy for them to connect! :)
Like the start, was not sure who was what at first. Have her on top of him!
Great start.
Great start hope to see more :)
Thank you everyone for these nice, encouraging comments. I was really nervous about uploading the story (and still am, to be honest!). But, your kind comments have given me just what I needed to keep going with this story. THANK YOU!
Welcome and can't wait to read your subsequent chapters!!!!
Great start...I am waiting for more :)
Sweet and nice...........and all you have to do to thank your readers is by ensuring that you must complete this beautiful story.
nice start!!! keep going!!
Love it!!!
Good start. Needs editing because the flow isn't that great. Good writing, just needs tweaking.
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Really good start. Look forward to reading more
:)
*****
Promising start.
Great openning !
Don't make it too easy for them to connect! :)
Nice start
Like the start, was not sure who was what at first. Have her on top of him!
Great start.
Cool
Great start hope to see more :)
THANK YOU...
Thank you everyone for these nice, encouraging comments. I was really nervous about uploading the story (and still am, to be honest!).
But, your kind comments have given me just what I needed to keep going with this story.
THANK YOU!
Interesting Start
Welcome and can't wait to read your subsequent chapters!!!!
More Please
Great start...I am waiting for more :)
Five
Sweet and nice...........and all you have to do to thank your readers is by ensuring that you must complete this beautiful story.
nice start!!! keep going!!
Love it!!!
Good start. Needs editing because the flow isn't that great. Good writing, just needs tweaking.
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