Just a Date

THIS COULD BE THE START OF SOMETHING BIG

champagne cocktails and tea for two. TK U MLJ LV NV

He shoulda

told his bro his fiance (slut) was gangbanged, by the football team and him. I am sure that Bob would never married the whore. I'm surprised he didn't get a clue when he fucked her gaping tunnel after she had those black horsecocks. Ungh! I am sure you wrote her like that on purpose. Maybe he'll catch her cheating in your next story. Lol. Other than that, not bad.

Good

That was an enjoyable read, But, there is always a but, I thought it was almost a monolog. I would have liked a bit more dialog and less narative. Another but, thank you for your work. I did enjoy it and appreciate the time you spent to do it. Thanks. Jim

Tear Jerker

and Delicious. It lacks tension for me but I was waiting for some problem to show up so that they would split and get back together. Yes I know that would be the old formula and that this is DG's plot! Thanks DG

Wonderful!

I really liked this story. I am so glad to have read it and am so glad that you wrote it.

Tears Again!

My tears! This is a lovely story,so appropriate for this time of year.Thank you,DGH.

That Was Nice

Truly a Cinderella-esque fairy tale.

DGH did it again - another great romantic story

Excellent twist at the end - I didn't see that one coming. After all the great stories DGH has written through the years, it is amazing that he can keep coming up with new ones. Well done - made my day!

Most of the story was all right however ....

withholding the information from his brother that Tracey his future wife was in a gangbang is messed up . Sorry but that is disloyal to faimly . He should tell the brother & then the onus is on Tracey to convince bro , she is not a slut anymore .

Good Story

Yet, I agree with LordSlamDawgg he needed to tell his brother about Tracy's past. C'mon Tracy was interracially gang banged, and highly promiscuous. Dan had a moral and family obligation to tell Bob, poor Tracy be damned. If Tracy was so worried about her past then she should've have been smart enough to think before doing. Wait until Bob sees the video in a few years of his slut wife getting banged by the football team. With the technology I'm sure someone videoed it. Dan was ate up inside when he saw the girl he was falling in love with wantonly getting gang banged and he refused to be the next person in line, and he ended it. Imagine how his brother would feel.... "God no! He must never know. He gets jealous when he sees other men even talk to me. He's doing better and I know I can make him happy." How can he truly be happy with a slut.

DG Hear

The reason Dan didn't tell his brother about Tracy is he knew his brother wasn't any better. He slept with every woman he could and told Dan about it. Does that make him any better than Tracy? I think not.

It's a choice he had to make and I believe it was the right one. Both his Brother and Tracy were unatached adults at the time.
Thank you for reading my story and taking the time to comment.
With respect
DG

Okay DGH

Respectfully, if you think that, then both relationships are shams. This is not a random girl it is his brothers wife he slept with. At the very least Laura should be informed he was intimate with Tracy. The potential for damage by not being upfront is high. One slip and two marriages destroyed. I am surprised you don't see that. Tracy made a poor choice, and both her and Dan need to come clean before someone discovers the truth. Especially Dan with Laura. Both Bob and Dan had active sex lives, Bob flaunted it Dan didn't. Your logic about Bob doesn't hold water. That is simply damage control on your part.
I think you put the "i slept with my brothers fiance" in to attract readers, but didn't handle it well. I also believe, and I am sure others too will agree you blew it. You could have had them sit down and share and made it more compelling, you failed.
Honestly my friend, shame on them for their secrets. Until they come clean both marriages will suffer, and innocent people would get hurt. DGH you are better than that, make this a true romance, not a sham.

Wow!

I never thought I would agree with dawg, but yeah she should've come clean. More so Dan with Laura. Wow! When I reread the first page after reading his comment, it changed my opinion from a romance to holy shit! That is fucked up, I got pissed @ Dan and Tracey for not being honest. This would have been a true romance with Dan telling Laura, Tracey, that is between her and Bob yet I could see Laura encouraging her to be honest. Yep, damage control.

Just a

date, just a gang bang , not gonna tell ya, just a horse cock not gonna tell you. I fucked my sister in law, just not gonna tell you. Just an omission, just a lack of honesty, just a lack of faith, just a bunch of crap.

It was a sweet story

nice one, but sorry I kinda agree with some of the comments on telling about there history. Still, it was good.

Those guys

Those guys (previous two) find fault with everything. Just read and enjoy the story for what it is. Good ending.

To all those ...

... who say that 'they' should come clean about previous relationships - all that would achieve would be to make sure that instead of two people letting the past stay in the past you would have four very upset people and two totally ruined relationships.
Telling the truth is good.
Telling the truth un-necessarily can be very, very bad!
A closed mouth gathers no feet!

Chekov's gun should have gone off with a (gang) bang

DGH hung the first Chekov's gun on the wall with Dan's initial statement that he slept with his brother's fiancee and the second one when he witnessed her participating in a gangbang. Then neither gun goes off during the story, which DGH explains away offstage as a plague on both Bob and Tracy's houses. What about Laura? When these guns go off, how will she handle it? Please resolve this in Part 2 (or Parts 2 and 3) - your myriad fans really want to know. In any case, thanks for writing another great story.

Yeah

Fuck honesty, it was only his sister in law. Keeping secrets, yep, so what. Pinheads

Unfortunately

Traceys gangbang, and her relationship with Dan has fueled an inferno. The lack of openness detracted sadly from a nice love story between Laura and Dan. You set this off with the statement about him sleeping with his brothers future wife and Dans witness to her gang bang losing his respect for her. If he didn't care he would have joined in. Then you simply ignore it and rather cavalierly dismiss it. Bad form sir, bad form. Laura and to a lesser exyent Bob deserve to know the truth from Dan and Tracy, before someone else with sinister motives beats them to it.

Sadly

Laura and her child will be the losers in this. My goodness DG, you should have seen it coming. That flippant comment you made proved it. Too bad I almost gave it 5 stars.

Good one

yet you hurt it with the opening statement, the interracial gang bang, and the secrets. You led us on, then nothing. I was waiting for Bob and Laura to find out, as the romance built. I was sure you were going to expose it before the wedding then boom Tracy's preggers Dan and Laura engaged, the end. WTF? It would have been better if Dan and Tracy just knew each other. Instead you flesh out their relationship, her sluttiness then drop it like a hot potato. Why bother in the first place? Why?

DG this could have been much better.

you detracted from the story with Dan and Tracy's past. It wasn't necessary. If it was you would have used it. As it is it is just wasted space. Too bad.

The first page

is worth -5 stars, the second page 5 stars, third page 5 stars. Total score 1 star. Sad. That stupid side story from college totally unnecessary.

Good story.

It is a good story and well worth 5 stars. Unlike the annonymous naysayers, I can see how the background in the beginning about Tracy tied in to the rest of the story.

Good Story

If I had a brother I would not tell him that I had slept with his future wife. If he was happy that is. On the other hand, being involved in a gangbang is something totally different. I would tell all if I liked him.

Anonymous cheap shot artists just ache my ass!

DG is one of the best writers who has ever posted a story on this site. I have never read one of his stories that he needed to apologize for. I don't always agree with where a certain story may have gone, but I have never felt that anything he has written wasn't done with thought and caring for his readers. This was an excellent Five Star Story (something some of you would probably not recognize under any circumstances)!

Great Date!

DG,

Did it again! Great story and writing.

Thanks for sharing on Lit.


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Another good one

Thanks DG,

Another great romance, let us hope that someday others who post stories, can with consistency aspire to what you accomplish with every one of your stories. Not all of them are the best, but they are head and shoulders above some who have posted lately.

That being said I want to address the fifth grade morons who think that Dan should have told Bob about Tracy's gangbang. So if Bob was with a group of guys who did a gangbang and Dan knew it, should Dan tell Tracy? What a bunch of hypocrites! Of course, they think he should have, because some of men involved were black, right? Such retro thinking.

Mallah

Men do not marry gangbang queens, no matter what they have done themselves. Gangbang broads are good for just that. They are good for double rubbers and a trash bag with a hole in it duct taped around your waist. Then just maybe you won't get none on ya. As the author said they probably deserved each other. From the mans attitude it may have been a little payback on the brother.

You can bash

Anon's all you want, any author has the right to shut it down. But this author didn't, why? Weed out the idiots, what you have left are valid constructive comments, and a common theme: Honesty in relationships. Both Tracy and Dan are being dishonest with themselves, and their significant others. Dan had her in a relationship, and fell in love. She was highly promiscuous, and literally went out with a bang. He didn't like it was hurt ended it, and dumped her.
Now he finds her in the arms of his brother, soon to be his sister in law. Dan lets her know subtly that she hurt him a lot. She cries, don't tell your brother he'll dump me, I love him, I can make him happy. Dan says okay, and they live happily ever after.
Definitely not. Those that think otherwise are delusional. It will come out, it always does. Both Bob and Laura will find out, and when they do it won't be pretty. Dan and Tracy need to come clean, and do it asap. Laura and her little girl need to be treated with love and respect. Dan is doing neither. Bob although sexually active in college too, deserves to know about Dan and Tracy. The gang bang is for Tracy to tell or not. To be a romance it requires honesty. Honesty is a two way street. Sadly with this story it is one way. You can bash anon's all you want, the truth is without honesty by both parties there is no romance.
The only hypocrites are the ones who won't say anything, but want everyone else to tell them about their significant others history. That is retro thinking. This is a flawed but good story. The author is enjoying the controversy. I doubt he will write a second chapter. I believe he should. Nevertheless he is getting highly charged and great feedback for a new story.
Oh, by the way, anyone can post anonymously. Even those with names. Did you think that many of these "obnoxious" anon's are in reality authors who don't want their own creations exposed to unjust criticism because they didn't like the promiscuity, pre-incest, gang bang, interracial, or lack of honesty? But wanted to let this author know it didn't appeal to them and point out flaws in character progession and logic. Myself included.
Since you fancy named people are so proud of your names, how many stories have you written, mallah, oldwayne, southernpassion53? I can tell you, zero, zip, nada. In case you are wondering only one named individual who commented wrote a story, over 200. With the majority highly received. His name, DGHear, the author! Can the same be said for the "named" anon bashers who have nothing to lose, and fawn, gushing at this and other authors work, right oldwayne?
This story is a little flawed, and it is being pointed out a lot. Not bashing the author, pointing out a major story arc flaw. If the author didn't think the comments were worthy he wouldn't have responded. Regardless it is His choice, His story, His way.

rh...

Rh what a load of horseshit.

Admit it, this is nothing but being a two faced ass saying the two are mutually exclusive. We don't know if it was only the one time for Tracy or many of them. The thing to look out for is Bob, while engaged he is still hitting on good looking women. Is Tracy flirting with any men? That we know of while engaged? Are you going to actually say that only a woman should be tagged because of her sexual history? Such forward thinking. Never mind fifth grade, that is a first grade moronic assumption. With all due respect to first graders.

anon,

Anon,

You are another hiding your name moron. I don't need to write a story to understand the writing of others. Or go along with or read how utterly stupid idiots such as yourself and others are. You suffer under the most worst of what humanity is today with your idea of what to or what not to say. Or when to say it. The idea that a woman who has a varied sex life in college on par with a man and she is the one who has to pay for it is something from the dark ages. Do you still walk around with your knuckles dragging on the ground along with your moral compass? Grow Up! If what she did comes out, then she will deal with it, just as Bob will have to, by thinking about what he did, and has done, and will do. For gods sake he hit on Laura while engaged!!! Dan then will have to address how he will handle telling Bob about his past with Tracy. The only Dan has to do that I agree with is that Dan should tell Laura about Tracy, other than that it's best left alone.

Geeeez

The point isn't Tracy's gang bang or because she fucked a black guy, all three were very active and Bob is kind of a scumbag himself. The point is LAURA, not Bob who needs to know about Dan and Tracy. She deserves it. Why? C'mon figure it out. Sooner or later it will be exposed. Tracy may fess up, then Bob punches or shoots Dan. Big Buck could see Tracy and she may want a rematch, get caught and spills her guts. Tracy yells "Oh Dan" when Bob is fucking her. Maybe there are pictures. Like I said it isn't the gang bang it's the possible repercussions. Poor Laura if Dan doesn't tell her, and it comes out. If he truly unconditionally does love her be honest and talk with her. She would understand I think. What Tracy and Bob do is their business.

Right Or Wrong

Thats the way it is. A womans reputation will follow her around. I do agree that it will eventually come out, someone will say hey, aren't you the broad at the gangbang in college. All kinds of scenarios could happen in that area. Most men do not want to marry the village bike. One bang would be one too many for most men. I don't think it was a secret that she was easy. Double standard? Yep, thats the way it is. Girls who fuck a lot in school will have to move from that area to avoid it. Women with such a rep. are used and thrown away. Happens everyday. As for the brother.... How big is he and are you going to have to kill him with a bat when you tell him etc. etc.

I never once

mentioned that Dan should tell about the gang bang, his relationship with Tracy yes not the GB. My words, "The gang bang is for Tracy to tell or not." Then you make fun of my moral compass and call me a stupid idiot? We agree with each other! We also agree that Dan needs to come clean with Laura. If that is dragging my knuckles then I am proud of my scrapes. You do a fairly good job bashing me on two points we agree on! Why? I will also agree about Bob, his morality is shoddy, wanting to shag Laura. Still his brother should come clean with him about Tracy. So that's two and a half out of three we agree on. Who is the moron now? What did we disagree on, oh yeah I don't have a name. Call me Ishmael if it pleases you.
You have probably read my stories and hopefully enjoyed them. They are similar to this one. I unfortunately have to respond as anonymous to authors publicly because of bashers like you. Guess I need to go back to the dark ages and simply respond privately. Sorry, I upset you mallah so much by agreeing with you, that you had to bash me for it. I remain Anonymous. Oh wait, signed Ishmael. I have a name hallelujah.

Agree with author

DG, you are correct in your comment to posters about Tracy and not telling. Brother Bob slept around a lot and bragged about it to his Brother, so he knew what college life was all about and presumably what all the cheer leaders did. If it comes out later, so what, he made his choices in life and maybe he does know and doesn't care? I really don't understand why so many who post on here expect all wives to be pure as the driven snow, when given the morals and customs of the last twenty years that is not very likely.

In a way, Laura is written as almost virginal even though she has been married and has a daughter. Since she married her high school sweetheart it is almost assumed that she was a virgin when she married and since she is again assumed to have not cheated she is a "pure" woman. The author goes to great lengths to explain her as not dating anyone since her husbands death, so again she is the "perfect wife" choice for the stories major character who worries about what kind of woman he wants to marry. The author has contrasted Brother Bob's choice of a wife with Laura and makes sure she is even more beautiful than Tracy. It is a classic romance story, with the geeky brother being the winner. If the story was continued our hero would end up running the company with Bob and the Sister working for him.

Haha

Way to go Ishmael, Moby. Lol

Sidney 43

Be Real. We men like to fuck pretty sexy chicks, but when it comes to taking a wife , we prefer pure women. Thats how we men are.you may call us what you want.

When looking for a girl friend always look for the sexy one, when looking for a wife look for a trustworthy one.

No real man would marry tracy who has someone else's cum dripping her cunt.

Anon you are bang on. I would fuck hard tracy but would marry laura. Tom

Great Read!!!!!

That's the only thing that counts if you enjoyed the story. If not write your own!!!! Thanks for sharing.

Frankly, I thought the story was a bit boring. The narrator is too good to be true; so is his true love Laura; so is Laura's cute daughter and her loving Mom and Dad and even the narrator's sister. And all that agonizing!!! Should he ask her out, shouldn't he ask her out, should she accept, shouldn't she accept, for Heaven's sake.

And I couldn't give a damn about Tracey and her gangbang(s) and the brother, and the narrator was quite right to shut up about what he knew and let his brother and Tracey sort out whatever they wanted to sort out between themselves. It was none of the narrator's business to tell tales on Tracey.

Good Story

Enjoyed the story and there is lots of potential for stories about them in the future.

5*****

I loved it just the way you wrote it. Your expaination to all the commentators with their hair on fire about "telling" was right on.

Thank you for writing.

tom anon

Another thought

I received an email through the site wondering why I did not comment on the other aspect that had been discussed a lot about this story. That of course is whether Dan should tell Laura about his former relationship with Tracy. I am of the opinion that he should not unless Tracy wants to discuss his former sex life. The danger to their relationship is minor so long as he treats Tracy as just a Sister in Law and pretty much ignores her, which is made easier since they live a few states apart. If it eventually comes out that he had a sexual relationship with Tracy in the past, it is fairly easy to explain that he was smitten with her until he found she was having sex with other men and was not exclusive. He can simply say he refused to see her again and since they were two years apart it was unlikely their romance would have survived in any case. Laura is not going to expect Dan to have been celibate, as after all he is accepting her as a widow and one with a child which many men would not do, which is another aspect of making Dan a better person than his Brother Bob.

This is an unspoken aspect of Laura's personality as I see it. Laura places sex as something very enjoyable, but belonging strictly within a committed relationship. The author makes sure that we understand she only had sex with Dan after she was pretty sure he was the one to replace her dead sweetheart and be a father to her daughter. It is highly likely that she would think positively of Dan actions in refusing to see Tracy again after he found out she was promiscuous. In fact if it comes out that Dan saw Tracy being gang banged and he walked away, Laura would likely see this as a confirmation of her evaluation of Dan as the right man to marry. She would also probably see his promise not to reveal Tracy's past as noble and not as a negative, because that is the way her character is written in my opinion.

A lot of comments

First off what's between Bob and Tracy is between Bob and Tracy. I believe Dan should tell Laura about Tracy. It will head off future problems in the event of a possible slip of the tongue. It is the honest and respectful tact. She will understand because he is upfront. Good story Thank you.

Great romance story

I saw 1 typo, but who is counting.
Keep up the good work

5 stars

1. It is good as every DGHear's story.
2. The past is past so he does not have to tell anything about Tracy to Laura.
3. I do not think he should tell his brother anything about Tracy's past. He do not know anything about Tracy life after her graduation, she was slut or she was a ordinary woman with some boyfriend. If he thought something wrong about Tracy's life after her graduation he SHOULD HAVE TOLD HIS BROTHER. Only in this case......

I am sorry

I am sorry If he knew something wrong about Tracy's life after her graduation he SHOULD HAVE TOLD HIS BROTHER. Only in this case......

Voting against my own story, again!!!

What happened between Dan and Tracey happend long before Bob came along and was their business not his. The past has passed, you can't change it.

I found the story very good. It was thoroughly enjoyable, good enough to rate 5 stars from a fellow competitor.

Well done! I hope to see more of Dan and Laura's story soon.

Chiara