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Just found this story today and am trying to catch up all at once so I'll leave a better comment then. Going to chapter 2 right now!
I'm in the same boat as MizT. . .
Captivated by what i've read so far - off to read the next chapter!
really intriguing....
off to chapter 2 like the rest!
Great job.
I truly enjoyed this story. The characters were vibrant, and the descriptions were rich.
Dialogue was great. Too often I read stories with bad dialogue or worse: none at all!
Found some run-on sentences, and some other minor technicalities that could be fixed with a touch more editing. There was nothing terrible though.
I'm on my way to read more!
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