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what a stupid story
Dumb illogical poorly written story about life in a trailer park
Stupid Story, Bad Writing Style
Those people in stories are called characters, because they are supposed to have a character...
my story suck to you because your a WACC male, I would call you a man because
it would insult the rest of us. Look dud, just because you have the IQ of a retarded moose, doesn't mean squat to me. Your just a back woods moron with a lap top. It's hooked to the car battery right now, so I'll be brief. Stop fucking your cousin, leave your sister alone, stop fucking grandpa up the ass and get over yourself.
Well...
I suppose your next missive will be 'How to Win Friends and Influence People.'
Here is the deal...if they say that you are a bad writer re grammar et. al. and you respond by turning around and insulting them...without the proper capitalization or punctuation, I might add...you aren't exactly bolstering your case.
This is NOT the worst story I've seen written on Lit...but that is a very low bar. You can improve, but you need to can the attitude.
If people don't like your stories, that is one thing. That is personal taste and you can't do anything about it. Insult away.
If they say you write incorrectly, that is a quantitative statement. It is provable one way or the other. If they have some facts on their side, then it is incumbent on YOU the writer to correct this, either by study or finding an editor. You are not as bad as they say...but there is a good bit of room for improvement.
I would suggest Strunk and White's Elements of Style. It's free online and a very useful starting point. I page though that occasionally.
FD45, if your going to comment on something I said to Old51
Then follow the journey, I'm not worried if they, you or him don't like my stories. "Oh well" , shit, I get enough hate mail from other morons to care. If you look, the last 4 CLD's hated the story, "Oh Well". Old51 and I were showing our different views of his use of the word "nigger" in his comment on a story. You and I don't agree 90% of the time, but then you don't go from story to story, spouting racial comments. I was just stating how funny it is they he would say it on line but not in front of a so called "Nigger"s Face". That was all FD45, so calm down my friend.
Awesome job, Hue!
Great tale, brother. I was wondering when you're going to finish "Fuck a Tie, Win at all Cost". Loved parts 1 and 2. Looking for Part 3 soon, I hope.
5 HUGE Stars!
Ditto clocas and nwhaler... Five stars
Clocas is correct - finally a "Hildy" story that has legal consequences. Entertaining story - five stars for sure. All is right in the jungle tonight.
Excellent Revenge
Fucking whore. She got what she deserved. The friends got off easy. They're still breathing. Oh well.
Ha
revenge
never understood why revenge was best when it was a "dish best served cold." baloney. think clear and strike while the emotions are hot. thanks
Revenge is sweet in this short tale.
The author swept thru this story in lightening speed not skipping any major points whatsoever. The presentation was extremely emotional on matters of significance and life altering. Betrayal is extremely hard to swallow especially on people you have emotionally invested in. Amanda and Mark are great villains in spite of Amanda being duped she never requested confirmation or affirmation. Mark was the worst of the characters and the revenge was equal to his sins. I enjoyed this story and wish to thank Huedogg2 for a great read.
*Clapping* Nice Job...
Quote -- "I'm sure I'll the normal, I'm heartless, a bastard, and all the rest but in the end it is my story. I don't think all cheaters should be burn alive, but then I also don't think you should sit there and be a doormat."
I agree with you there, each case being different. But if it happened to me, I would divorce her and get some payback from the people who did it.
5 Stars
No matter how often I read this story
I still laugh my ass off.
Vicious
I like very much. Never could stand the stories of the "mistaken revenge fuck" and the skank getting forgiveness. 5*
Is he fucking
the red head AND Karen? He'd better hope neither of them has anger management issues.
Friends
Define the word friend, then look around you.
When in doubt, act!
I like your way of telling stories. Keep it up!
Anger management...
Seems as though he was well in control of his temper. Considering what he could've done they got off easy.
5* story!
humm
guess the wife is the one needing anger management courses
Yes!
Cheaters lose and non-cheaters win, what more can you want. I don't understand how a wife could take the word of someone who wants to screw her and not even discuss it with her husband. Unless she wanted to cheat. Not even 1 lover but 5?
Good job, good story, good conclusion. Wish the conclusion was a little longer, but you are the author. Thanks for the story.
Over the top, and
mostly cute. Fun. The most unbelievable thing I read was someone edited this story. Really? That editor needs to find else to do at least one additional edit/proofread.
Nice
Re-read this fine tale. Excellent revenge.
Well I had to comment on something, eh?
I agree with @NWlifter...
Some of the cheaters got out easy...Only the wife and the false friend got what they deserved...4*
3*
most of the characters act unbelievably stupidly. there are factual errors and some plot holes. badly written. mildly funny.
10* Fun Story
Might not be too realistic but then if I wanted realism I'd read the newspaper.
Fun revenge story.
Hell, Hank didn't need anger management, he managed his anger perfectly! :)
Thanks for the fun.
Morgan DeWolfe
Morgan
of late there is a lot of fiction in the news
just like your comment tO1kmhq5apoPRPwx
the story was better than the stupid assed unbelievable comment you made. I find that its ignorant morons that only like cuckold stories are what's wrong with Literotica. It's because boobs like you, that find it easy to believe a man would take back a whore that fucked half of the UK believable. Good story HD2. I'm a die hard fan of the BTB genre. And as far morons like tO1kmhq5apoPRPwx, I like how you tell them to fuck off.
Ummmm, second read
But, when he came to, she was there with her sister, what ever happened to her? At the least she was an accessory after the fact...... Why wasn't she burned?
@Blowitoutyourass
what you are is a die hard idiot. and you can't even read. I repeat:
most of the characters act unbelievably stupidly. there are factual errors and some plot holes. badly written. mildly funny.
what the fuck has that to do with british cucks? try understanding (even though I don't think you are equipped to) before writing. fucking retard.
YOU CAN ONLY GET SO MUCH REVENGE PAY BACK
the rest will just be over flow. TK U MLJ LV NV
Dumb Cunt!
“I never thought he would have set me up.” – If he hadn’t set you up he wouldn’t have gang banged you!
Succinct powerful BTB
Not very fancy writing but you get your point across and it is fun reading. I can't understand how a person in this case a wife would assume facts without some form of collaboration and discussion with their life partner or spouse. Obviously, there are serious plausibility issues but nonetheless, it was interesting and fun. Thanks for your effort!
justice
This time, they reaped what they sowed. Loved this. I hate cuck stories.
That helps out tremendously on days and weeks like this !!!
Damn Huedogg2 , you sure do know how to make the world feel better !
After the totally fucked up week that it has been in this category , nothing helps more than one of your totally over the top fuck'em up, shoot'em up humdingers !
Thanks Buddy !
5 HUGE * 'S
Hahaha!
Far better than the original!
I thought he managed his anger
very well. You do know that if you hold all that anger and stress in it can cause an ulcer. So happy endings are the best kind. And hopefully all of his friends find new and better friends in prison. Some of those friendships last for a life time, whatever that is. I would bet their farts quit making noise after about 6 months.
Needs an editor
This is a rambling mess, the author desperately needs an editor, to correct basic formatting, typos, sentence structure etc. and to let the author know when and where the narrative and characterization needs some work to make sense.
Not a great story
But it sure as hell was a fun one. I liked the way it was written and thought the writing to be clear. Think this one was on the good side of Karma. I like it when that happens!
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