All Comments on 'By the Pool-Liz's First Time'

This has the making of a great story, But you left me hanging.

Although you need an editor to check your writting as there were quite a few mistakes you've also managed to put the same paragraph in there twice.

Otherwise I enjoyed it and can't wait for the next chapter.

I loved the way you articulated your experience. It brought back a lot of memories and feelings for me as well!

I'm waiting on page two!