The comment about mommy issues is complete bullshit. The husband's issues are with the actions of his slut wife. He did what he had to do. What would you do if you saw what he he saw? Kiss her ass and pretend that all was well? Some of these commenters need to pull their head out of their ass.
hated your ending. It seems that for some men revenge and punishment is the only thing that counts. To hell with the children, they better learn to hate their mother. What kind of infantile men are they?
Reading the begining I thought that maybe you'd written a realistic epilouge to the first story. However all this was is some ridiculous revenge fantacy. The manager calls her slut and she slaps him then she get's charged and loses her job, not him or them both. Then after losing her job she's paying support. Hell I like a burn the bitch story as much as the next guy but too many of them read like fairy tales.
We ate welcomed to" the other" extreme of the LW spectrum
Well if in LW, cuckolds can simper on & on about how they are in a loving relationship & are in veritable ecstasy while the wife & mother of their children is cattimg about town.
Then I suppose this story has just as much validity where the husband has no angst chucking out his wife. The cops often will tell a woman who has clear cut residence in a house to " move on or else "
Judges also also oftenbgo John Wayne & award custody and award child support to a One- time cheated on husband . Sure !! By the way , let me introduce you to my beautiful wife whoI just took vows with me this weekend - Morgan Fairchil... err Jennifer Anniston.
Yes most of this is highly unlikely. It's sad that is the case. Too many cunts step out, fuck everyone's life up, then sit in their husband's house getting paid for nothing. If kids are involved, then not only did hubby get a hole stomped in his soul, he has to pay the whore extra each month and gets his kids sparingly. Yes raccoon, there is a lot of fantasy here. In a just world there'd be more truth than fiction to this story. Thanks Hue for a very nice story.
The first story was a comedy. This is a nasty revenge story.
I won't say that Sheila didn't deserve it for what she did. It's also true that when problems are happening a lot of good intentioned but clueless people come out of the woodwork. I like how he quickly dealt with his parents cluelessness. The outcome of his wife getting fired gets into the ridiculous. Also, how does she pay alimony and child support without a job? The divorce settlement process seems contrived. Not bad as a whole but the author's eagerness to trash Sheila weakened the story. She was vindictive in getting revenge sex and now he is vindictive.
I liked the first story-it was a clever short story. Kind of silly and unrealistic, etc., but fun and interesting. This one was a revenge fantasy that was a little high on "fantasy." A little part of me says "hurrah! The bitch gets burned." But....the robotic turn of the husband to pure revenge, explained only somewhat by his experience with his mother's infidelity, etc., seems absurd. The guy was clearly a devoted, loving father and husband, so the change in attitude seems strangely abrupt. The story would be more interesting if the husband and wife had a sit-down to discuss what happened. Even if he still insisted on divorce, it would have been interesting to have that conversation. I'm glad you're in the game, HD2.
1. A boss should not call his/her member of the staff such a name "slut", if his*/her employee is a whore at home. It is not his/her business. He/she can laugh at her behind her at home, but he/she should not not call her anything.
2. If she had not lost her job, the court would only have decided on children support to pay for the exhusband. I think this is a little mistake in your story.
3. I read a comments in LW (a beermaker's story) from a buddy in Missouri who had written he got the children custody, because his soon to be exwife was with her lover boy to the nex room where their children had played (he could prove it).
After reading some of your comment I have answers for your comments
For some of you, it's more believable for a husband to be a cuckold pussy. Than it is to believe in a husband with balls. For the rest of you thanks for you comments. And some of you should google Carnell Smith. He paid child support for 12 years for a child that wasn't his. He as got the first paternity fraud law passed in GA. There are a lot of men getting child support because of men like him. And in most cases isn't child support set on a dad with no job so how is this different. Hum she'll be a dead beat mom. All so to the RAAC crowd, how is getting fucked a mistake. Oops I'm sorry my dick just happened to fall in your pussy. If a man did that everyone wants to fry him, it wasn't a mistake. He's a fucking dog.
Well written and enjoyable. The holes have already been pointed to so I won't repeat that.
IT IS A STORY.
It does not have to be based on reality. The good guy won and taught his mother something her selfishness kept her from learning for years.
Keep writing. I will keep reading.
Well written narrative story. However you skipped over many opportunities for some exciting dialogue between the unhappy couple. READERS LOVE DIALOGUE!!
You have to take the story for what it is meant to be. It was a well written short story.
Of course it is hard to argue with the wit and logical well thought out arguments like Harry's.
He always makes some very constructive comments.
Thanks for the story.
I don't think I'll be throwing up any time soon.
Unless maybe I end up reading another review by Harry.
It appears that Huedogg2 has a pattern of bashing other authors because that don't think as he does. He thinks that forgiveness is a weakness and revenge is required. While it may make for interesting fiction, it makes for a very small mind. So I will be a bit kinder than he normally is. The story was ok when you consider it came from a narrow minded fool.
Huedogg - haters will hate - keep up the good work
The issue here is not about writing , it is a transference of their hatred for the subject/plot on to the writing.
There was a story by JPB -"Ari" the character fucks her boss at his place, husband sees it and leaves her - good ending.
Someone (ohio I think) decided to screw up a good one pager and showed how the whore(who fucked for furthering her career/for fun and who couldn't comprehend that being a slut was a deal breaker for a marriage) got back into her wimpy husband's good graces and they lived happily ever after.
The dialogue was bad, the plot was horrific and the human interaction sub plots and scenes were juvenile and unworthy of a high-schooler with no life experience..
BUT - it was revered here as though it was a lost Mark Twain manuscript - BECAUSE in spite of the long and often painful story , it was an RAAC and the husband accepted the whore back into his arms and decided to have a baby with her.
Ignore these wusses whining about good writing and expecting reconciliation and understanding of how a stray dick could fall by accident onto an unsuspecting pussy.
I'm sorry I'm not one of the gay cuckold writers like yourself. Just so you and other know. I believe in forgiving those that deserve it. When some guy's wife is fucking 20 guys and she having some other guys kids and then passing it of on her husband. So like you might find that sexy, I don't and so I write my stories so that the husband keeps his balls un like you juderboy who writes about giving your away. If it offends you don't read it. And Matt M you were right.........lol
Thank you for my saving. Sometime I counterattact the offenders because they could give good opotunity to broadcast my thoughts for example about the revenge stories which I like very much. I glad not only me save fellow commenters.
Sometime my humorous comments caused misunderstandings from sour brainy readers.
Obviously,guys are going love this and women, well, not so much. Even though the results were totally unrealistic, it's nice to believe that the wife would pay a price.
In real lifer his actions would - in fact - make it all much worse on the kids because it became too public - regardless of why she did what she did.
For the boss to harass her at work was simply wrong and he would have been liable - not her again regardless of what was so public - the job must separate that from the work place.
Tremendous conclusion to the original. Like you said at the end, don't assume. She got what was coming to her. His mother being a slut also was a nice touch.
Absolutely fabulous writing. If only our judicial system had you at the hwlm life would be more pleasant.
Responsibility for ones actions seems irrelevant to many people especially the courts in divorces. I can speak from personal experience. Stories like this bring joy to my battered heart. Why? Because Justice and justice are different. Justice is a principle and justice is a process. The uppercase spelling is intentional to show a variation with the same word. When you go through the divorce process you are subjected to laws that are written to protect the guilty. Men are generally if not always completely screwed. That is the process relating to lower case spelling "j u s t i c e". In other words the laws don't regard right from wrong just the man is wrong no matter what. Huedogg shows in this story and most others I've read real "J U S T I C E" It is for this reasoning I tend to enjoy Huedogg's stories because they are an outlet no matter how implausible. Please keep writing Huedogg, simply because you have fans that totally look forward to you writing them. Thank you!
wouldn't have put up with her or her shit. Anyone who will jump to something that overboard without any confirmation deserves to be beaten almost to death, figuratively speaking, in court and her children raised by someone who isn't bat shit crazy. Good job Huedogg.
I liked it! Short and to the point. How a man should really act. She had no excuses, Didn't she ever hear of communication? Any woman (or man) who thinks their mate is cheating and rushes to get payback, revenge, or get even without even talking to said mate, deserves a divorce.
Commenters when a man suspects a woman of cheating-FUCKING KILL THE STUPID BITCH!!! Don't talk to her, you don't need to hear what she has to say. Hell, even if she tells you she's not cheating and presents evidence of it still kill her because all women are lying, cheating cunts. KILL THEM ALL!!!!!!!!
Commenters in a story where a woman suspects her husband of cheating-How dare she jump to conclusions like that!!?? And what kind of idiot gets revenge without sitting down and talking to her first. Women are such lying, irrational cunts. He should probably divorce her, or just save himself the trouble and KILL HER!!!!!!
Hmmm.....it's almost like there's a pattern here, rather than a hatred of a supposedly immoral action it's just a hatred and mistrust of women. But...that would imply Loving Wives is full of bitter, angry little misogynists and shitty writers like Huedogg who cater to that crowd. Nah, couldn't be that.
She was stupid and showed it along all the way...Knowing he was traumatized by his mom cheating his dad and run with the lover, she assumed he cheated and didn't talk with him? 3*
I was left as uncomfortable as Huedogg2 apparently was with the original story which was left hanging and I feel considerably better now about my original time investment.
Nice wrap up reflecting your well established credentials. Thanks,
This was an excellent sequel to the original, although being pure fantasy. In the original it was a total lack of communication which led to its conclusion. Here he finds out the truth and he acted accordingly. The fantasy is her total stupidity. No pictures, no audio and no video. Just an idiotic conversation between her husband and a friend. So she acted. Stupid, huh?
Wait. Hold on. Cheaters are the most stupid people out there. Maybe this could have happened. Hmmm...
English
Worthwhile ending to the 1st story
Good touch to have the extra characters in it to add punch to the story.
Keep writing
Good Read.
Thanks for sharing.
Too Much
This reads like a vengeful fantasy. I can understand his stress, but it was excessive.
The man has mommy issues and is projecting it on the wife.
Good Story!
The comment about mommy issues is complete bullshit. The husband's issues are with the actions of his slut wife. He did what he had to do. What would you do if you saw what he he saw? Kiss her ass and pretend that all was well? Some of these commenters need to pull their head out of their ass.
Bad writing
Just reads like a revenge report. All characters are unlikeable. No emotions.
I lOVE A HAPPY ENDING!!!
You should rewrite all of her stuff! I think she could use the help!
I honestly
hated your ending. It seems that for some men revenge and punishment is the only thing that counts. To hell with the children, they better learn to hate their mother. What kind of infantile men are they?
:)
:) :) :) :)
Another trip to the land of make believe.
Reading the begining I thought that maybe you'd written a realistic epilouge to the first story. However all this was is some ridiculous revenge fantacy. The manager calls her slut and she slaps him then she get's charged and loses her job, not him or them both. Then after losing her job she's paying support. Hell I like a burn the bitch story as much as the next guy but too many of them read like fairy tales.
One of the better close outs
Just can not believe that would happen, but it sounds nice!
We ate welcomed to" the other" extreme of the LW spectrum
Well if in LW, cuckolds can simper on & on about how they are in a loving relationship & are in veritable ecstasy while the wife & mother of their children is cattimg about town.
Then I suppose this story has just as much validity where the husband has no angst chucking out his wife. The cops often will tell a woman who has clear cut residence in a house to " move on or else "
Judges also also oftenbgo John Wayne & award custody and award child support to a One- time cheated on husband . Sure !! By the way , let me introduce you to my beautiful wife whoI just took vows with me this weekend - Morgan Fairchil... err Jennifer Anniston.
loved it!
Yes most of this is highly unlikely. It's sad that is the case. Too many cunts step out, fuck everyone's life up, then sit in their husband's house getting paid for nothing. If kids are involved, then not only did hubby get a hole stomped in his soul, he has to pay the whore extra each month and gets his kids sparingly. Yes raccoon, there is a lot of fantasy here. In a just world there'd be more truth than fiction to this story. Thanks Hue for a very nice story.
Very different
The first story was a comedy. This is a nasty revenge story.
I won't say that Sheila didn't deserve it for what she did. It's also true that when problems are happening a lot of good intentioned but clueless people come out of the woodwork. I like how he quickly dealt with his parents cluelessness. The outcome of his wife getting fired gets into the ridiculous. Also, how does she pay alimony and child support without a job? The divorce settlement process seems contrived. Not bad as a whole but the author's eagerness to trash Sheila weakened the story. She was vindictive in getting revenge sex and now he is vindictive.
The two stories are only loosely related.
Revenge fantasy...I get it
I liked the first story-it was a clever short story. Kind of silly and unrealistic, etc., but fun and interesting. This one was a revenge fantasy that was a little high on "fantasy." A little part of me says "hurrah! The bitch gets burned." But....the robotic turn of the husband to pure revenge, explained only somewhat by his experience with his mother's infidelity, etc., seems absurd. The guy was clearly a devoted, loving father and husband, so the change in attitude seems strangely abrupt. The story would be more interesting if the husband and wife had a sit-down to discuss what happened. Even if he still insisted on divorce, it would have been interesting to have that conversation. I'm glad you're in the game, HD2.
Fun story. 5 stars
Thanks Huedogg for a fun read I wonder if our 'friend' the Anoncuckold is reading this story? You keep writing and we will keep reading.
1. A boss should not call his/her member of the staff such a name "slut", if his*/her employee is a whore at home. It is not his/her business. He/she can laugh at her behind her at home, but he/she should not not call her anything.
2. If she had not lost her job, the court would only have decided on children support to pay for the exhusband. I think this is a little mistake in your story.
3. I read a comments in LW (a beermaker's story) from a buddy in Missouri who had written he got the children custody, because his soon to be exwife was with her lover boy to the nex room where their children had played (he could prove it).
After reading some of your comment I have answers for your comments
For some of you, it's more believable for a husband to be a cuckold pussy. Than it is to believe in a husband with balls. For the rest of you thanks for you comments. And some of you should google Carnell Smith. He paid child support for 12 years for a child that wasn't his. He as got the first paternity fraud law passed in GA. There are a lot of men getting child support because of men like him. And in most cases isn't child support set on a dad with no job so how is this different. Hum she'll be a dead beat mom. All so to the RAAC crowd, how is getting fucked a mistake. Oops I'm sorry my dick just happened to fall in your pussy. If a man did that everyone wants to fry him, it wasn't a mistake. He's a fucking dog.
IF YOU CANT PLEASE EVERYBODY
just please your self. FOR THE STORY,,,INCOMPLETE CLOSURE is none,, TK U MLJ LV NV
#2 FOR DOGG
IF YOU COULD SEE YOUR WAY, THIS STORY IS RIPE FOR A PRE-LOG, EPI-LOG OR SEQUEL. RESPECTFULLY TK U MLJ LV NV
this is beyond bad
it is wretched
It makes me want to VOMIT
STOP WRITING THIS SHIT
Has some holes
Well written and enjoyable. The holes have already been pointed to so I won't repeat that.
IT IS A STORY.
It does not have to be based on reality. The good guy won and taught his mother something her selfishness kept her from learning for years.
Keep writing. I will keep reading.
Good narrative story
Well written narrative story. However you skipped over many opportunities for some exciting dialogue between the unhappy couple. READERS LOVE DIALOGUE!!
I liked it.
You have to take the story for what it is meant to be. It was a well written short story.
Of course it is hard to argue with the wit and logical well thought out arguments like Harry's.
He always makes some very constructive comments.
Thanks for the story.
I don't think I'll be throwing up any time soon.
Unless maybe I end up reading another review by Harry.
the slut got wat she desrved fuked all ways ha ha ha and a mum like that is dead
I guess this is my turn
It appears that Huedogg2 has a pattern of bashing other authors because that don't think as he does. He thinks that forgiveness is a weakness and revenge is required. While it may make for interesting fiction, it makes for a very small mind. So I will be a bit kinder than he normally is. The story was ok when you consider it came from a narrow minded fool.
Huedogg - haters will hate - keep up the good work
The issue here is not about writing , it is a transference of their hatred for the subject/plot on to the writing.
There was a story by JPB -"Ari" the character fucks her boss at his place, husband sees it and leaves her - good ending.
Someone (ohio I think) decided to screw up a good one pager and showed how the whore(who fucked for furthering her career/for fun and who couldn't comprehend that being a slut was a deal breaker for a marriage) got back into her wimpy husband's good graces and they lived happily ever after.
The dialogue was bad, the plot was horrific and the human interaction sub plots and scenes were juvenile and unworthy of a high-schooler with no life experience..
BUT - it was revered here as though it was a lost Mark Twain manuscript - BECAUSE in spite of the long and often painful story , it was an RAAC and the husband accepted the whore back into his arms and decided to have a baby with her.
Ignore these wusses whining about good writing and expecting reconciliation and understanding of how a stray dick could fall by accident onto an unsuspecting pussy.
Hue
Don't sweat juderboys comment. He is a back door man. I don't mean that in a Black Oak Arkansas way either. :)
RandomHardon
finally got his creampie :)
More likely
someone with a name like closetcuckieboy has gotten his!!!!
while I may not be the norm here juderboy
I'm sorry I'm not one of the gay cuckold writers like yourself. Just so you and other know. I believe in forgiving those that deserve it. When some guy's wife is fucking 20 guys and she having some other guys kids and then passing it of on her husband. So like you might find that sexy, I don't and so I write my stories so that the husband keeps his balls un like you juderboy who writes about giving your away. If it offends you don't read it. And Matt M you were right.........lol
Thank you for my saving. Sometime I counterattact the offenders because they could give good opotunity to broadcast my thoughts for example about the revenge stories which I like very much. I glad not only me save fellow commenters.
Sometime my humorous comments caused misunderstandings from sour brainy readers.
you did good
i liked it. a short and sweet story about jumping to conclusions.
A Feel-Good Story
Obviously,guys are going love this and women, well, not so much. Even though the results were totally unrealistic, it's nice to believe that the wife would pay a price.
Spousal and child support! It doesn't get much better than that for a man.
Fabulous story. I just love it when a dirty, filthy whore gets exactly what she so richly deserves. Man, keep writing, you're terrific.
I usually like your stories but not this one ...
Just my opinion but when you take on a sequel of a story you need to keep the same flow/vein of thought, the characters need to be consistent.
In this case it seems like the difference between what you wrote and what Likegoodwine wrote is too stark.
BTW ... unlike some I don't rate stories with a low score just because I don't like the author's approach.
To have a man not get screwed in court is nice -
To pillory her so badly is a fun fantasy maybe -
In real lifer his actions would - in fact - make it all much worse on the kids because it became too public - regardless of why she did what she did.
For the boss to harass her at work was simply wrong and he would have been liable - not her again regardless of what was so public - the job must separate that from the work place.
But to see a guy win one is always nice -
Excellent
Tremendous conclusion to the original. Like you said at the end, don't assume. She got what was coming to her. His mother being a slut also was a nice touch.
Almost good
Rambled a bit and the flow was a bit rocky.
Gave it a 4 just because of the moms scene.
All else was a 3.
Stars're not enough
5 for the story
Sorry, not enough stars for the " assume" part !
Absolutely fabulous writing. If only our judicial system had you at the hwlm life would be more pleasant.
Responsibility for ones actions seems irrelevant to many people especially the courts in divorces. I can speak from personal experience. Stories like this bring joy to my battered heart. Why? Because Justice and justice are different. Justice is a principle and justice is a process. The uppercase spelling is intentional to show a variation with the same word. When you go through the divorce process you are subjected to laws that are written to protect the guilty. Men are generally if not always completely screwed. That is the process relating to lower case spelling "j u s t i c e". In other words the laws don't regard right from wrong just the man is wrong no matter what. Huedogg shows in this story and most others I've read real "J U S T I C E" It is for this reasoning I tend to enjoy Huedogg's stories because they are an outlet no matter how implausible. Please keep writing Huedogg, simply because you have fans that totally look forward to you writing them. Thank you!
Liked it,
wouldn't have put up with her or her shit. Anyone who will jump to something that overboard without any confirmation deserves to be beaten almost to death, figuratively speaking, in court and her children raised by someone who isn't bat shit crazy. Good job Huedogg.
Short And To The Point!
I liked it! Short and to the point. How a man should really act. She had no excuses, Didn't she ever hear of communication? Any woman (or man) who thinks their mate is cheating and rushes to get payback, revenge, or get even without even talking to said mate, deserves a divorce.
This entire section in a nutshell....
Commenters when a man suspects a woman of cheating-FUCKING KILL THE STUPID BITCH!!! Don't talk to her, you don't need to hear what she has to say. Hell, even if she tells you she's not cheating and presents evidence of it still kill her because all women are lying, cheating cunts. KILL THEM ALL!!!!!!!!
Commenters in a story where a woman suspects her husband of cheating-How dare she jump to conclusions like that!!?? And what kind of idiot gets revenge without sitting down and talking to her first. Women are such lying, irrational cunts. He should probably divorce her, or just save himself the trouble and KILL HER!!!!!!
Hmmm.....it's almost like there's a pattern here, rather than a hatred of a supposedly immoral action it's just a hatred and mistrust of women. But...that would imply Loving Wives is full of bitter, angry little misogynists and shitty writers like Huedogg who cater to that crowd. Nah, couldn't be that.
She was stupid...
She was stupid and showed it along all the way...Knowing he was traumatized by his mom cheating his dad and run with the lover, she assumed he cheated and didn't talk with him? 3*
Thank you for closure on "Ch 01" predecessor
I was left as uncomfortable as Huedogg2 apparently was with the original story which was left hanging and I feel considerably better now about my original time investment.
Nice wrap up reflecting your well established credentials. Thanks,
while true the reverse is....
While this is true:
"no matter what you do, you can't make everyone happy"
It is possible to piss everyone off.
Kudos to your editor, this is much more readable.
Read It Again
This was an excellent sequel to the original, although being pure fantasy. In the original it was a total lack of communication which led to its conclusion. Here he finds out the truth and he acted accordingly. The fantasy is her total stupidity. No pictures, no audio and no video. Just an idiotic conversation between her husband and a friend. So she acted. Stupid, huh?
Wait. Hold on. Cheaters are the most stupid people out there. Maybe this could have happened. Hmmm...
Damn
Five Stars
Love It
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