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Difficult to Read
The grammar and spelling were so bad I had to guess what Charlotte was trying to say.
I agree
I agree - I posted this in from Word and didn't double check it. Something got garbled in the translation, I think. Usually the editors catch that and won't pass it through if it's bad like this, but this one snuck through. I don't know if I can edit it or not, but I am going to try.
Charlotte
submitted the fixed version
For any reading this, I have submitted a new copy with the goofy stuff fixed. I don't know how long it takes them to swap them out, but I hope this helps!
Not anything like the trips down the rabbit hole...
I'm glad you worked on correcting all the typos although they aren't up yet; it definitely made for a difficult read. Almost like you used one of the voice dictators and didn't bother to proof it which is a huge no-no! Anyway... maybe you were trying to reach a broader readership since this was in Group Sex and not BDSM, but just like some fantasies are not as good as our minds make them... while I'm sure the reality was freaking great, the translation left too much missing for the reader and therefore did not draw us in. Too much missing. Maybe this is where your stories can take a new twist and include a new perspective... Paul's... since you were too lost in the experience. Just a thought if you want to draw in your readers. --- Swt-n-SassyJ
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