The Arrangement Ch. 04-06

Please get an editor. It's still rushed. There needs to be more depth to the characters, it was too quick for Jayden to enter her room and make a move on her like that, we still need to know what time period this is set in. Her father sold his daughter, that's something from the dark ages, do you read the comments your readers have taken the time to leave for you for the first chapter? We all want to know the answers or want to see something that answers our questions and so far there is nothing.

Slow down

Please add more to it. It has real potential and you are rushing through. As a reader we don't feel anything for the story or characters. Get an editor and add some meat to the bones that is this story.

Too rushed!!!

You need to make this less rushed and add a bit more depth to this story albeit it is very good and interesting