Sisterhood Ch. 01

good

story was good you have captured my interest please continue with it

Thank you for taking the time to read and comment. :) I appreciate it. I promise it will continue to its natural conclusion.

Captivating!

I don't normally read Lit. stories in this category, but this time I'm genuinely thrilled to have ventured out of my comfort zone. A treacherous setting, a compelling character, a life or death confrontation, and no clothes. I can't wait to get to the good part!

Seriously, I am impressed with your storytelling skills. You have created more tension and intrigue in a page and a half -- while simultaneously building a richly detailed world -- than most others can achieve in twice the space. Your efficiency is enviable. I look forward to the rest of this story.

Intense and Imaginative

This comment relates to the entire story, not just this chapter. The opening is a little slow, and the ending also- but that scene when she's in the chamber enduring her test- that's what I call imaginative and intense. If such a callous and selfish society could long exist, this is an outstanding take on what it might be like to dwell amid the conniving, the backstabbing, and the intrigue. And the fear. It's like a rat's nest, except the rats are really smart and somewhat resemble elves. The only thing that kept me from truly becoming involved was the lack of empathy I felt toward the narrator. Considering the theme, I wouldn't even label this a problem, it's really more of a compliment. Sure, I admire her ingenuity and her ability to think on (and off) her feet, plus it was kind of fun to watch the battle of wits unfold; but in the end, she's just another rat and I didn't really care if she succeeded or failed. The one elf who seems like she might be different is the one who apparently feels at least a fleeting moment of sympathy. I wanted to know more about her. It seems that her feelings might be completely foreign to this culture, or at least forbidden. Would sympathy even be common enough that the narrator could recognize it? That I even wondered about such a minor moment in this story shows what a rich tale it is on so many different levels. Well worth a read.

one of the few very best stories

the beginning of a multi series story. highly descriptive and nuanced first person writing with a great world, main character, sirana, intrigue, humour, intensity and more! i'm very glad to have started reading this :)
you are a talented writer etaski.

Great start

I like this story very much.It reminds me of the world of Drizzt.

I'm well out of my comfort zone !

But vivid power plays and fine writing about the same - that's of universal interest.

Yay!

I'm rereading your story! I like it that much!

I really enjoyed reading this. I don't know much about the drow, but it will be hard to picture them any other way from now on!

A hotter girl version of drizzt

Hope drizzt is in this later but then it would be celebs ):

Very nice

Really took me back to my Forgotten Realms days, Salvatore, etc. You have an awesome understanding of the pre-existing setting and subject material, and do a good job of making it your own as well. I look forward to delving into the rest.

OK , this is good fantasy

I have avoided this category, because I love SF & F! And I really did not expect to find a good mature writer and now I find an excellent one!

Wonderful

I detest this genre.... or I have until today.
Well written, tense, amusing, teasing.
I shall now read all your stories and broaden my horizons.

Easily One of the Best

I'm writing this review for all your chapters. This is simply one of the vest series I've ever read period. I've PURCHASED books that aren't nearly as good. I would group you with the likes of Dr. Wolf, Taltos and kezza67 for putting out consistently great works. Keep it up.

LOVE, LOVE, LOVE IT!!!!

I really screwed up and somehow only gave you 2 stars! Jeeze, I favorite the story and went to give you 5, ah! Please forgive!! I hit 'report this story' tab, and explained the problem and asked that they fix it. Here I was actually hoping to put you past 4.50 on the first chapter (then I saw how many votes you already have and realized it probably wouldn't go that far) so then I go and slap you with a 2! Grrrrr! Please fix Lit Gods (picture this one trying to kick herself in butt)
Now, phenomenal story! I'm a voracious reader of Sci Fi and this story, all of it, but even more so Surfacing, is top 10 in my favorite all time reads! My only complaint is having to wait for more, grumble, grumble, grumble. That said I need to hop thru the rest of the chapters and spread the proper love that I should have when I first read. Just too impatient to keep reading. And too lazy (hangs her head in shame) But picks it back up cause I got stars to pass out, lots of em, in doses of 5!

@pobrat, no worries

Forgiven, don't fret about the mis-tap. :) It happens. You know I'll keep writing this series regardless of the score on the first story (when "Subterrane" wasn't even a gleam in my eye yet, let alone "Sufferance."). Thanks for reading and leaving a nice comment, I'm glad you're enjoying everything. I'm almost finished with the latest chapter, very close!

Wonderful

Absolutly wonderful! Its obvious just from this first chapter, that you strongly have plot in mind, and a direction and conclusion that you plan to head. And to me, it is that, which is most important. I see to many stories on here that have wonderful writing, even great stories, but lack the sense of direction it got from this chapter. I know just from that, that this story would be completed(regardless that I've already seen it has, and you've moved on to sequels XD). I know it's hard to achieve that(I've got 2-3 plot lines I refuse to start/post until I do have a solid conclusion in mind for them) so this isn't a rip on others but more a 'tipping of my hat' to what you've achieved.

However slight it is, now for the negative. I prefer longer stories. At least a full 2 pages on this site, and preferably 3-4. Again I know how hard this is, but I'm the kind of person that will devour through a three to five hundred page book in a 1-3days depending on my other responsibilities. So when I am reading through stories on here, the longer the better as I get to enjoy it longer, especially in most cases when a started series isn't finished, and I'm left with a sense of lacking.

So while I hope your chapters do get longer. I hope more that you will continue to write more. And that you don't just disappear like so many of the other good authors on this website, that leave with out even a word.....Also if you could at least give a horrible conclusion to any unfinished stories for us to rage at XD. I hate cliff hangers when I know there wont eventually be a resolution :P

Well done

But still, the sisters in blood red leather remind me too strongly of someone else's story. The intro lasts a bit long. Maybe start with a real time event? Many years before even a sister knows the colour of her eyes?? How well can you judge a colour from candle light? What would she consider 'real light'? Why would she care about 'real light'?

Wonderful Story

It got me captivated from the beginning,