Biggest load of crap I have read in 10 years of Literotica.
Literotica should have a seperate Listing for garbage like this. Let's call it TOAD, Thoughts Of An Idiot.
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Anonymous12/16/11
good possibillities
Not bad. Needs some work but you certainly have a sensual nature and you are able to render it. More practice, please. Pay no attention to that moron's critical remarks. He is too stupid to appreciate your talents.
This is a first story. Can we try some constructive feedback please. I see neither Rocky nor Sam has written a story, not even a first attempt. I encourage this author to continue to write and get better. Constructive criticism NOT the same as your personal attacks. Does writing discouraging rather than encouraging comments make you feel better about your worthless little life?
I can't imagine why I commented in such a crude way. I read the story again and I don't find it bad at all. My apology to the author for such an outright attack. It was wrong period.
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Anonymous12/16/11
Congrats on your first story!
And well done! The power dynamic was most erotic. Again, well done!
i read the story i like the fact that you are using real terms. i have to say that it needs more of a sexual thing. i don't know to much about Indian culture or the way regular every day life people are. if this was a intro story make sure the next chapters give more details. good job to be the first time you write make sure chapter 2 gives more details and hope to read more about this family!!!
Your writing is very erotic and imaginative. Your Master must be very proud and pleased with your creativity. Awesome !!
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Anonymous03/17/15
mschack is right
And it was good to get Rocky's gracious apology. This is a fine story, of a mother's love for her boy's young penis and a son's reverence for that wonderful hairy hole he came out of. I trust that there are millions of boys in India paying tribute to their mother's vagina with their fat brown penis and blowing their heavy loaded brown balls up their own mommy's ever-loving cunt.
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Anonymous10/08/15
well written
made me hot! I am from India, I like my mother. would like to write something on it
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Anonymous09/04/16
S T U P I D
WHERE IS THE STORY? IF THAT IS WHAT THE MEN OF INDIA REQUIRES OF THEIR WIVES, AND THE MOTHER OF THEIR SONS, THEN I SEE WHY THE BRITISH NEEDS TO RETURN TO CONTROL OF THIS ARCHAIC LAND OF MEN WHO DRESS IN WESTERN CLOTHING, BUT FORCE THEIR WOMEN TO DRESS IN BED SHEETS. THIS IS ONE SORRY EXCUSE OF A STORY.
English
Nicely done
Well written, interesting POV. Perhaps there could be more.
WRONG LISTING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Biggest load of crap I have read in 10 years of Literotica.
Literotica should have a seperate Listing for garbage like this. Let's call it TOAD, Thoughts Of An Idiot.
good possibillities
Not bad. Needs some work but you certainly have a sensual nature and you are able to render it. More practice, please. Pay no attention to that moron's critical remarks. He is too stupid to appreciate your talents.
OK ummm
Ur just fucked up in the head and learn American English
Oh come on
This is a first story. Can we try some constructive feedback please. I see neither Rocky nor Sam has written a story, not even a first attempt. I encourage this author to continue to write and get better. Constructive criticism NOT the same as your personal attacks. Does writing discouraging rather than encouraging comments make you feel better about your worthless little life?
Wow I was wrong
I can't imagine why I commented in such a crude way. I read the story again and I don't find it bad at all. My apology to the author for such an outright attack. It was wrong period.
Congrats on your first story!
And well done! The power dynamic was most erotic. Again, well done!
Well Done
Ignore the couple of abusive comments. This was sensual, and much better written than most of the stories on this site.
Thank You
Thank you to everyone who has taken the trouble to vote, given feedback, commented, and most importantly read my story.
Happy New Year!
very interesting
i read the story i like the fact that you are using real terms. i have to say that it needs more of a sexual thing. i don't know to much about Indian culture or the way regular every day life people are. if this was a intro story make sure the next chapters give more details. good job to be the first time you write make sure chapter 2 gives more details and hope to read more about this family!!!
A singluarly
beautiful and finely-written tale. Thank you.
Very creative writting
Your writing is very erotic and imaginative. Your Master must be very proud and pleased with your creativity. Awesome !!
mschack is right
And it was good to get Rocky's gracious apology. This is a fine story, of a mother's love for her boy's young penis and a son's reverence for that wonderful hairy hole he came out of. I trust that there are millions of boys in India paying tribute to their mother's vagina with their fat brown penis and blowing their heavy loaded brown balls up their own mommy's ever-loving cunt.
well written
made me hot! I am from India, I like my mother. would like to write something on it
S T U P I D
WHERE IS THE STORY? IF THAT IS WHAT THE MEN OF INDIA REQUIRES OF THEIR WIVES, AND THE MOTHER OF THEIR SONS, THEN I SEE WHY THE BRITISH NEEDS TO RETURN TO CONTROL OF THIS ARCHAIC LAND OF MEN WHO DRESS IN WESTERN CLOTHING, BUT FORCE THEIR WOMEN TO DRESS IN BED SHEETS. THIS IS ONE SORRY EXCUSE OF A STORY.
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