A great first go, I do get a lot of pleasure from reading emotive script such as yours *smiles* Hope you can share more of your fiction and that some of them turn into reality for you.
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Anonymous12/17/11
Bravo!
A very nice start to a writing 'career' I'd say! Please continue!
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Anonymous12/18/11
good
I enjoyed this. Thanks. Nice vignette... seems believable. Ending is a bit abrupt... how wet was her face after you pulled off ?
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Anonymous12/19/11
Very hot!
I really enjoyed your story -- very creative, sharp, and hot.
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Anonymous12/20/11
Outstanding!
Pretty nice writing foir a first effort! Let's see some more, whether a continuation of this story or another one.
English
Well done
A great first go, I do get a lot of pleasure from reading emotive script such as yours *smiles* Hope you can share more of your fiction and that some of them turn into reality for you.
Bravo!
A very nice start to a writing 'career' I'd say! Please continue!
good
I enjoyed this. Thanks. Nice vignette... seems believable. Ending is a bit abrupt... how wet was her face after you pulled off ?
Very hot!
I really enjoyed your story -- very creative, sharp, and hot.
Outstanding!
Pretty nice writing foir a first effort! Let's see some more, whether a continuation of this story or another one.
Thanks everyone!
I really appreciate the time you took to leave me some feedback, and I do agree that the ending does feel very rushed.
Love from,
mostlyintact
Wonderful
I really enjoyed this. Very hot, I liked how genuine it felt, and the gentle use of humiliation. It's a shame it ended so quickly, though.
Very hot and well written
Excellent job. I really love D/S when it is written well and this was very enjoyable. This is the kind of erotica I wish I could read all the time.
Wonderful
This is lovely, thank you. :-) MMmmmmmm
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