All Comments on 'The Greatest Pleasure'

If you guys could please leave some helpful comments or constructive criticisms, that'd be great. Thank You!

I really liked it. It was a bit short, you probably could have built up the scene more, been more descriptive. The descriptions (in my opinion) are not needed so much for the physical happenings but the emotional reactions and feelings, especially in something like this which is sexual in a way that is not as obvious as in other works. I liked it, but I have a thing for vampires and blood and biting, so it's easier for something like this to appeal to me.