I really loved your story, it was well written. This is the first of your stories that I have read and it will not be the last. If the rest of your stories are as good as this one, I will not have to find another author. Thank You ;)
P.S. I am not a fan of the term 'knockers', but that is just my opinion.
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Anonymous12/22/11
I guess as a long description of a night of sex this was okay. However the 'reason' was weak and I waited in vain for a 'twist' at the end.
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Anonymous12/22/11
More?
3765Really a normal husband would not wake up and, with just a few words, walk downstairs and cheat on his wife. You needed to set this up, for example, by telling us what Susan had done for the wife and why he was so willing to go along. Did they have an open marriage, or past dalliances?
"I want you to go downstairs and have sex with Susan,"
I appreciate your efforts. However, I don't believe that would ever happen. Therefore, since I don't wish to read stories that are not plausible, at that point, I stopped reading and gave it a 1* rating.
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Anonymous12/23/11
Excellent
A good, erotic story does not necessarily need a prolonged background discussion.
Getting right to the point was perect for this tale.
Please write more stories. You might even consider a sequal to this one, building on Susan's mission to sell the wife on a threesome.
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Anonymous12/24/11
Sounds hot... and don't listen to the critiques, this sort of thing happens in real life.
I love the way you describe women, I read Susan here and I imagine my girlfriend... who likes it, and if you want to make the boob action even hotter, when I push her tits together to suck both nipples at once. She cums from just having her nipples sucked too. I'd love to see this in one of your stories some time.
English
Very Impressive
I really loved your story, it was well written. This is the first of your stories that I have read and it will not be the last. If the rest of your stories are as good as this one, I will not have to find another author. Thank You ;)
P.S. I am not a fan of the term 'knockers', but that is just my opinion.
I guess as a long description of a night of sex this was okay. However the 'reason' was weak and I waited in vain for a 'twist' at the end.
More?
3765Really a normal husband would not wake up and, with just a few words, walk downstairs and cheat on his wife. You needed to set this up, for example, by telling us what Susan had done for the wife and why he was so willing to go along. Did they have an open marriage, or past dalliances?
"I want you to go downstairs and have sex with Susan,"
I appreciate your efforts. However, I don't believe that would ever happen. Therefore, since I don't wish to read stories that are not plausible, at that point, I stopped reading and gave it a 1* rating.
Excellent
A good, erotic story does not necessarily need a prolonged background discussion.
Getting right to the point was perect for this tale.
Please write more stories. You might even consider a sequal to this one, building on Susan's mission to sell the wife on a threesome.
Sounds hot... and don't listen to the critiques, this sort of thing happens in real life.
I love the way you describe women, I read Susan here and I imagine my girlfriend... who likes it, and if you want to make the boob action even hotter, when I push her tits together to suck both nipples at once. She cums from just having her nipples sucked too. I'd love to see this in one of your stories some time.
Very good
A very good read thank cant wait for more
Great
What a great story, loved the pace and detail, not to much but just enough, well thought out, wish it could get into another chapter.
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