The basis of the best stories is that the reader has to feel it is in part at least believable, but i am afraid this story just hit every cliche going and was a write by numbers story.
An insult to readers, 12" cock soft???????? that would make it 13" to 15" hard then shoved into a virgin pussy without any foreplay as well as her ass?????? Get real!!!
I usually don't give such a bad review, but this was total trash.
What was he, an elephant? He wouldn't be able to walk normally. You ever try to walk with one grapefruit between your legs, much less two? Think about what you're writing. Try it again, because this was an epic fail. I did like the storyline, though.
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Anonymous03/27/12
not a story
it's not even a stroy you can find this story as a incest video
12 inch cock and it wasn't even hard yet? Grape size balls? Get real! The story plot line was good, but fix those mistakes. Even my boyfriend, who is pretty big, isn't that big.
I go along with the others on believability and where is the story? About 99.97% women would run screaming if ever faced with such a thing as a soft 12" cock with grapefruit size balls. "Fucking hell! He has some sort of disease or isn't human at all!"
RS
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Anonymous04/01/12
Cummed?
"Cummed"?? Try "came"!
"themes"? I believe you mean the river, Thames.
Grapefruit-sized balls?!!!
Fail.
Fail.
Fail
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Anonymous05/23/12
Another dumbass that is spamming the site with retarded stories. What a waste of bandwidth for Lit.
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Anonymous08/17/15
that went 0-100 way too quick. you gotta fuckin ease into incest
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Anonymous10/16/15
I lol incest
When I saw my brother's penis he was masturbating and I got so wet when turned on I went inside his bedroom and got hold of his penis and started rubbing it I put his hand on my pussy and start eating ring me I think I come over his fingers it felt so good and I was yelling don't stop and with that he put me on my back open my legs and put his penis inside me call in to My Virgin you took my cherry away and I loved it and every day since me and my brother make mad passionate love when Mum is out for the day we walk around naked playing with each other having sex oh I hope there's more people like that come and talk to me I have a good night
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Anonymous12/24/15
Amazing
This story got me so wet and horny I had to get my dildo out
English
Unbelievable
The basis of the best stories is that the reader has to feel it is in part at least believable, but i am afraid this story just hit every cliche going and was a write by numbers story.
not bad but you need to work on the story line a little more !!
Gay Fantasy Stereotypes
Have to have a 10" cock and ALWAYS have to fuck an asshole. Otherwise, not bad writing.
"I measured it one night, 12 inches long, and it wasn't even hard!"
and he passes out every time he starts getting a woody. LOL
An insult to readers
An insult to readers, 12" cock soft???????? that would make it 13" to 15" hard then shoved into a virgin pussy without any foreplay as well as her ass?????? Get real!!!
I usually don't give such a bad review, but this was total trash.
grapefruit sized balls?
What was he, an elephant? He wouldn't be able to walk normally. You ever try to walk with one grapefruit between your legs, much less two? Think about what you're writing. Try it again, because this was an epic fail. I did like the storyline, though.
not a story
it's not even a stroy you can find this story as a incest video
Get real!
12 inch cock and it wasn't even hard yet? Grape size balls? Get real! The story plot line was good, but fix those mistakes. Even my boyfriend, who is pretty big, isn't that big.
Ummmmm
I go along with the others on believability and where is the story? About 99.97% women would run screaming if ever faced with such a thing as a soft 12" cock with grapefruit size balls. "Fucking hell! He has some sort of disease or isn't human at all!"
RS
Cummed?
"Cummed"?? Try "came"!
"themes"? I believe you mean the river, Thames.
Grapefruit-sized balls?!!!
Fail.
Fail.
Fail
Another dumbass that is spamming the site with retarded stories. What a waste of bandwidth for Lit.
that went 0-100 way too quick. you gotta fuckin ease into incest
I lol incest
When I saw my brother's penis he was masturbating and I got so wet when turned on I went inside his bedroom and got hold of his penis and started rubbing it I put his hand on my pussy and start eating ring me I think I come over his fingers it felt so good and I was yelling don't stop and with that he put me on my back open my legs and put his penis inside me call in to My Virgin you took my cherry away and I loved it and every day since me and my brother make mad passionate love when Mum is out for the day we walk around naked playing with each other having sex oh I hope there's more people like that come and talk to me I have a good night
Amazing
This story got me so wet and horny I had to get my dildo out
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