All Comments on 'Threads: The Island'

Thanks for this epic tale, good character development, fine narrative and hot sex scenes. The island incest theme works well. You deserve an award. 5 star

stop posting stories over 4 pages unless they are in the novels area. this story should have been 10 chapters not one very few people will read a story 42 pages long we don't have the time . it would be best if you deleted this and reposted it 3-4 pages at a time.

To the first Anon - thanks for your kind words, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

To the second Anon - I thought for a while about if I should split this or not, and I opted not to. I appreciate the points you made about not being over three or four pages, but you can always bookmark the story at the page you're on and come back to it later, if you want to continue reading it. Breaking the story up needs frequent dramatic cliffhangers and openers and I didn't want to re-edit it that way. Authors choice, as it's the readers choice to read it or not. The story is as it is. Thanks for reading however much you did though.

JJ

Thanks but no thanks. I didn't come here to read a Hemingway novel. I doubt many will bother after the first five pages. Good story? I'll never know.....................

Can't disagree with the critics. When I saw the massive amounts of pages, I quit. Unless one is retired and has nothing to do, this won't work for most people.

man, i really liked this story! don't listen to the other folks telling you it's too long! it's fucking awesome. imho you should be writing stories for a living and trust me, it would be more than a decent one. and if you're doing it already - request a payrise ;)

I'd love to read more of this stuff. not so much for the sexual part, but for the rest. don't mistake me, your sex scenes are really good, but for me the storypart did it finally. keep up the good work. I'll be watching your publications!

MORE,Mygoodness

Just want to say thanks for the positive words, folks - really appreciate it, and there's more on the way.

The comments on the length of the story - some people like their tales short and fast, some people like them long and full of twists, with a hundred variations inbetween. I write my stories how I write them. They're not written to appeal to a majority or a niche, or to get votes, or to facillitate an orgasm. I write my stories how I want to write them.

Over the course of today I've been called an "Utter C*nt", a "F*cking Waste of Oxygen" and a few other choice names and phrases because I posted a complete novel in one go, and some people didn't like it.

That's their choice.

How I write my story and how I post it is mine. Please respect that in future when it comes to other authors and their choices too.

JJ

I have to admit reading 42 pages was not what I thought I would spend time doing today, but I have to say it was worth every moment. I am very impressed at the depth of charachter development, plot, and well it was also hot as hell. Will this be a huge hit on this site, I doubt it. But you have made a fan of me and it is now on my favorite story list. Great work.

Loved the depth of the story and it's length also. Nice to be able to sit down and read a story at one sitting. Yes, this begs for a sequel, as way too many threads to follow. In my opinion, this is much better in it's long form than individual chapters, as it allows the story to flow without trying to come up with breaks for chapters. Maybe some of the people have a point about it being in novels area, but could be put in loving couples too. Think too many people are reading for stroke material, rather than content. Keep up the good work and I hope you post a sequel soon.

Fucking brilliant.

I'll be looking for more from you...

One of the best. To those who dont like long stories. Read it a little at a time. No problem. As for me. When I get one this good I dont want to wait. Looking forward to more of your work. You just made yourself one of Lits finest. Thanks JJ. Mike in Missouri

I spent all afternoon and half the night reading this from start to finish. Once i started i was hooked. Keep it up and look forward to the triplets reunion after their couple of weeks separation.

Looking forward to tour further development of the triplets!!

I usually go for shorter stories but this story ranks with the best. Well developed storeyline, good intros to the main charactors and if it was a paperback you would not put it down until you read the last line.

Looking forward to future listings - very well done.. anon47

When i first clicked the story I did not expect to cover it all in one day; however, once I got started I just couldn't stop reading. One of the best stories I have read on this site and I really hope you post a sequel soon. 5 stars for an amazing story and I hope to see much more from you.

so i love incest stories and although thats what i was looking for, and this only has a mild form of inces,t it was fucking awesome. i think that if you made a sequel and changed the incestual part to something a bit less taboo then you could put it into a book and sell it.

Like many of the other comments I did not realise the extent of the story. Having said that I spent the day reading it and could not stop. I did not get much accomplished today. It was a great story, I enjoyed the plot with its twist and turns.

PLEASE don't make it a one time sory ... Damn fine job!

LOved the work. I had to stop to eat and came right back to it.

i have never commented but i was memorized by this story, i have a kick ass book im reading and i stayed up and read this all in one go great job

to those positive comments before. I read it in one go as well. No, sorry, two goes. I fell asleep after p. 38 but resumed reading as soon as I woke up and had a cup of coffee.

One small - very small - caveat, though. What do you teach those muscles, skins and stomach that they become so 'taught'? I'm sure you mean 'taut'.

Thank you for writing and I can't wait for you to pick up the 'Threads'.

This was a good story, should make a General Audiences or at least a PG-13 version for the less XXX crowd. One that would be suitable say for Facebook or something. Just an idea.

I don't normally comment but great story man. I always love long stories with good character development and a drawn-out storyline. I hope you come up with a sequel to Threads...

Just wanted to say thanks for all the kind words and feedback. I'm glad so many people are enjoying the story, and for those of you wondering, yes, there's sequels.

Merry Christmas to you all.

JJ

I just could not put this down. This story has it all. Action, romance, intrigue, humor, and of course sex. There are so many ways to spin the sequels, and I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up the great work.

Killer plot; well written.... I was glued to my seat for the whole 42 pages!

Like most looking for more of a short story, got started and could not stop. Really well written, good charater description and story flowed. Actually stayed up till 5:00 AM reading it. Looking forward to reading more from you

I can't wait to read a sequel to this one. Good story, well written, although I found it a bit too slow in the beginning. It might be a good idea to add more whitespace if you are making a jump in time. Absolutelly one of my favourite stories.

Amazing story and eye for details. Would happily have paid to read this.

Well done!! Bravo!! Started to read and could not stop. Looking forward to the next in this series.

Wow! Fantasy...Intrigue...Danger...and a whole lot more! Great story here! Hope you do more with these characters!

Very well written, while the story theme is not my preference i seen the title and had to read it. Loved the "oh shit" factor. i look forward to seeing the rest of this series.

A find piece you wrote...a very fine one indeed!

I would just like to thank you for a fine story. Ignor those commenters who said that it was too long, had you broke it up into chapters I feel that it may have become disjointed. I personally can't wait for your next submission on this story line. Thank You.

I have to admit that this story is terrible... I hate stories that end. In reality I loved the epic novel, literally if you keep on going and print it and staple it together it can be a masterpiece, but as usual all good things have to end. Thank you for bringing the characters to life, they were very dynamic, ever changing and learning. Tragedy that Kyle and Patricia didn't get together, but I realize that this is the only way for Kyle to get more than one partner, sad though, if he gets Dom training hey maybe he can get Patricia to be his and still have more that one girl, You never know he is only like a billionaire. Thank you for the opportunity to read art. Keep working hard.

One of the best reads here on the site - well done! - look forward to more

While I think you have this in the wrong section, this is one of the best stories I have read on this site. I would call this a novel with sex in it rather than an erotic story. 5/5 and I'll be watching for more of your work.

Obviously this site has lots of great erotic short stories, but I'm occasionally amazed at the quality of work by some of the amateur writers. You stand out as one of the more gifted ones. Great story development and execution. It reminds be a bit of "The Billionaire" series by another author on this site, but is clearly original enough to avoid being any kind of knock off. Who doesn't like the story of a guy who gets rich and gets women? Love the work and keep it up. Anxiously awaiting a sequel.

Too bad about the thing with Patricia though spoiled the story for me..... great read though

Hai JJ

You are in a different League & the site is lucky that you posted here.

About people bikering about too long i can tell you that it is because they could not stop reading and it had taken a toll on their schedule.

The way Wes character is built its amazing and you are really better than the so called NY Times Bestseller tag so many people put out there.

I liked it very much and a very big thanks for putting such a master piece Free of cost in this site.

You can really publish this as its an erotic novel.

Good job & finally as you had informed post the completed sets ASAP.

Took me 3 evenings to read the story. Stayed up till midnite one day reading. Hard to stop. Keep up the good work and I await the next installment. 5 stars all the way.

I am not a critic, I just enjoy good stories, especially mystery stories. Keep up the good work and continue on with further adventures of the triplets. PLEASE!

Fantastic story! One of the best I have read in a while. Liked it so much I logged in a new account to not commet anonymously. Keep doin what you do 1

Interesting plot, attention grabing twists, charectors with some depth, and managed to avoid over detailing the sex. (I prefer some things left to my own imagination)

Wonderful job.

Keep up the good work.

Consider a career in writing.

really enjoyed it and very much looking forward to future chapters.

Yes, thanks for such a good job, and 5 stars.

It is so good that with a few changes and enrichments it could easily become the script for a movie - a serious one, not X rated, I mean.

You promised a sequel with the triplets - thanks in advance for your work

You can groom it for a movie

You should really add more to this story. It was a really great story and it just ended like that you should add more though and have like he falls for both of them

The story was great - I would like to rwad about NY and LA in the next adventure.

Would like to see a threesome with his sister's , or Lakshmi and Patricia in the next chapters.

just started recently reading some of these awesomes stories, but i do have to say that this story was by far the best one i have came across and cant wait for the continuance!

JJ, Terrific job! This is a story that would have been perfect for my kindle. I wasn't able to read it in one sitting, but as you said I just came back to it. I loved the plot, characters, and even the villain. I can't wait for the next chapter.

It is indeed remarkable. You are quite a story teller.

Fantastic read, truly worth the effort!

How's that title for articulate? I'm a budding writer at the age of 58, but I've been a voracious reader for 52 of them. If you're not writing for a living, you're crazy. I constantly read and reread my favorite authors, W.E.B. Griffin, Tom Clancy, Stephen King, James Clavell...the list is endless. I will tell you that you have been added to my lists of rereads. You have a pretty fair command of our vernacular, but it's also easy to tell you're a Brit of some stripe, please excuse me for not knowing for sure. My ignorance of Australians, New Zealanders, Hong Kong yan, and other places where the British accent are native, is sadly limited...I'm betting in this case though, we're dealing with a European. Americans don't chat up anyone, more's the pity, and you have a much better command of the language than we do.

Your story was well plotted, your characters were believeable and well developed. I read it from start to finish in one sitting and wanted more. OUTSTANDING!

Took me 2 days to read it. Left the computer on the entire time so I would not forget the title or loose my place! Absolutely LOVED it!!!!

Amazing story man, took me a day n a half to finish it off.

Great plot n interaction b/w the characters.

Loved the thing b/w kyle n patricia.

Hats off to u man!!

This Dutch guy was smitten with the story, great plots, very detailed set up. Every time I was torn away to do other stuff I just wanted to continue.

Loved it, really the best.

A well written story. HOWEVER, the relationship of interest IS Kyle and his sisters NOT Kyle and secretary. The underlying plot was the strength of the story, NOT Kyle and Patricia.

I loved the story and very well written. I hope you plan to continue following this with, at least, the return after two weeks and, hopefully, a resumption of intimaacy between the siblings.

Great Story

Keep up the good work it took me 2 days to read!! once I started I could not stop!!! It was like a good novel Please keep the story going maybe a threesome of the brother, pat and the two sisters.

Hushpup2

even with out the sex you had me hooked, very good job. keep them comming

The first and only story that I've read here that's just not about sex, it was very captivating and once I started reading it I just couldn't stop.

Well done - great story line, tons of detail created vivid imagery.

When I read the first page, I was hooked. When I got to the bottom and saw it was 42 pages I thought that it was even better to have such a great story to read over a few days.

Well written and looking forward to reading your other work.

was sorry for the story to end.a great read just enough sex to make it fun but a great story line,ty

Frickin awesome story. I spent all day reading it and couldn't walk away it was so riveting. This story should be a screenplay and a movie made! It was awesome, and hope to see the sequel soon.

Looking forward to your next story!

I look forward to the continuation of "Threads"

You have quite a tale going and am going t enjoy your future episodes.

Best regards,

Bill Hobart

caltnlbill@gmail.com

It was good enough to hope you continue writing here and anywhere else.

Very good writing, characters were engaging and interesting would love to see more of them in the future, particularly the kinky Patricia and how she finally finds the lifestyle she desires.

best story i have ever read could not get away till I was done you need to write books and get published this story was fantastic!!

One thing to add, since a previous commenter mentioned the "taught"/"taut" mistake: a nitpick of mine is that you kept saying "discrete" (which means separate) when you meant to say "discreet" (which means circumspect and unobtrusive). It's a pretty jarring mistake and I hope you fix it in future drafts.

This is an amazing story. I signed onto literotica five hours ago looking for some quick wank material and then just got completely sucked into the story. The plot, the characters, and the writing was nearly perfect. I tried to stop reading around p.20 so I could go to sleep but I just needed to know what happened next so I fired up the laptop and kept reading.

Thanks for an amazing story. You rock.

Wow that is great writeing hope you have some more coming our way if you ever publish in book format let us know, all the best with your stories from "DOWN UNDER" and that is not the bed.

This story had everything, extremely descriptive it completely immerses you into the triplets world. I look forward to following their adventures in New York and L.A. You have a winning series on your hand.

Great read. Can't wait to see some further stories on the triplets.

Took two evenings to read the story, so much better to get the story at one time than to get it (maybe) over a matter of months. I have started so many stories that the author did not post the final chapters or took months between chapters then got tired of the project and ended it in an artificial manner. Great Story, hard to classify, too bad literotica does not allow multiple classifications as this was a combination of two or three classifications. Well Done!

I have to admit that I was also initially put off by the length of the story, but now I have read it, I am very glad that you didn't put it in the Novels section, as I never go there. I simply downloaded it to my phone using the new Literotica app for Android and read it in installments over two days. You have written a wonderful story, where the sex is a bonus. I look forward to reading further submissions of yours.

Probably the best story I have read on Lit in the last ten years. If you are not already a published author I would tell you to get writing. Please keep the story line going!

Best i've read on this site in years.

Please let us know when u publish more.

Excellent beginning to an epic! I was quickly drawn into the storyline and had a hard time putting it down (closing it). Especially liked the developing relationship between "I don't want to fall in love" Patricia and the already smitten Kyle. Would like to see more Threads developed - more of Kyle and Patricia and particularly, some stolen nights for Kyle with Kara and/or Katie.......... Perhaps, you should think about writing full-time, if you don't already!

This was the best peice of work i have read, impressive story whilst great links to contemporary people. I look forward to the continuance..

I really enjoyed your story. Hope you are continuing it?

Great story. Couldn't stop reading it. You have terrible taste in cloths. Other than that, I look forward to further installments.

Top notch material. Nuff said.

Without question the best story I have read on this site.

I have never been so drawn in to a story like I have with this and I would very much like to see the continuation of it.

I started reading this and couldn't put it down. I actually found myself skipping over one of the sex scenes because I wanted to find out what happened to the charectors!

My only criticism is how you dealt with the main's relationship with Patricia at the end. I get you needed to free him up to continue the story, but you go from her being jealous to saying they should be casual too abruptly IMO. It felt like toward the end you decided to change Patricia from the romantic lead without going back and addressing the changes in the earlier chapters.

Still, it was a great read and you are an excellent author! I'll be watching to see what else you post.

One other thing. I'm actually glad you decided to post all the chapters at once! I read it in two sittings. I had to remember (gasp) where I was in the story and go there. It didn't feel like rocket science at all...lol.

Regards,

JD

I usually read the stories without signing in and commenting but this story man was great & it wont be a good thing if I just leave it like that. Looking forwad to seeing more of the story...

great read some of the best i have read on the net, it should not finish here i think maybe some more soon would be good

legendary................................................

That's one great epic story. Awesome writing and a fantastic story. Thanks a lot for your effort and keep up the great work! ^__^

I can't wait to read the next chapter! GREAT STORY!

I saw the number of pages and passed it up the other day. Went back when I had time and broke into two readings. Length is good at times and it doesn't matter if this was broken in 100 chapters. People spend the amount of time reading they choose. I'm not going to argue where the story is located, I really liked it. I can't help feeling the author and I write in similar styles; although JammyJimmy has better command than I do. One of these days I will submit something that is long and for more than a quick thrill. Good job JJ

RS

great story, loved the length and content, would like to hear more of this family!!

Wow, excellent story. Enjoyed the Hollywood actresses and the "coitus" bit with Big Bang Theory. Looking forward for more, cheers!

Well done, I enjoyed the fact that this was not a story designed so one could "spank their monkey" to, but read like a well written novel. It held my interest and I looked forward to reading more.

Wow! This was just an amazing read! At 42 pages, I thought I might skip it but after too many words to count and 9 hours, I'm glad I stuck it out.

Congrats on writing this and I look forward to reading about LA, NY, and all the other places that Kyle, Kara, and Katie get to.

Dave

When I first saw the story posted and started reading, I thought "The first page is a little slow for my liking," then I saw how many pages it was and looking at the time just bookmarked it, figuring I would come back and read it. A few days latter I started reading again and eventually added another bookmark, I am not really a fan of novels but the story kept me locked to my chair for a couple of hours at a time adding a new bookmark when needed.

As I was reading, I thought about the time it would take to write it and I also thought about it as a book or film. This story shows an amazing amount of time and effort went into it by a truly talented author. There were very few typos or mistakes considering the number of pages and that impressed me also as it is one of the things that bugs me the most.

There were only a few quirks that I found, but they only added to the depth of the story.

I look forward to the next installment.