Threads: The Island

Original writing

Thanks for this epic tale, good character development, fine narrative and hot sex scenes. The island incest theme works well. You deserve an award. 5 star

do us a favor

stop posting stories over 4 pages unless they are in the novels area. this story should have been 10 chapters not one very few people will read a story 42 pages long we don't have the time . it would be best if you deleted this and reposted it 3-4 pages at a time.

Feedback

To the first Anon - thanks for your kind words, and I'm glad you enjoyed it.
To the second Anon - I thought for a while about if I should split this or not, and I opted not to. I appreciate the points you made about not being over three or four pages, but you can always bookmark the story at the page you're on and come back to it later, if you want to continue reading it. Breaking the story up needs frequent dramatic cliffhangers and openers and I didn't want to re-edit it that way. Authors choice, as it's the readers choice to read it or not. The story is as it is. Thanks for reading however much you did though.
JJ

42 pages?

Thanks but no thanks. I didn't come here to read a Hemingway novel. I doubt many will bother after the first five pages. Good story? I'll never know.....................

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Can't disagree with the critics. When I saw the massive amounts of pages, I quit. Unless one is retired and has nothing to do, this won't work for most people.

awesome

man, i really liked this story! don't listen to the other folks telling you it's too long! it's fucking awesome. imho you should be writing stories for a living and trust me, it would be more than a decent one. and if you're doing it already - request a payrise ;)
I'd love to read more of this stuff. not so much for the sexual part, but for the rest. don't mistake me, your sex scenes are really good, but for me the storypart did it finally. keep up the good work. I'll be watching your publications!

MORE,Mygoodness

Feedback on Threads: The Island

Just want to say thanks for the positive words, folks - really appreciate it, and there's more on the way.
The comments on the length of the story - some people like their tales short and fast, some people like them long and full of twists, with a hundred variations inbetween. I write my stories how I write them. They're not written to appeal to a majority or a niche, or to get votes, or to facillitate an orgasm. I write my stories how I want to write them.
Over the course of today I've been called an "Utter C*nt", a "F*cking Waste of Oxygen" and a few other choice names and phrases because I posted a complete novel in one go, and some people didn't like it.
That's their choice.
How I write my story and how I post it is mine. Please respect that in future when it comes to other authors and their choices too.
JJ

Wow

I have to admit reading 42 pages was not what I thought I would spend time doing today, but I have to say it was worth every moment. I am very impressed at the depth of charachter development, plot, and well it was also hot as hell. Will this be a huge hit on this site, I doubt it. But you have made a fan of me and it is now on my favorite story list. Great work.

Wonderful surprise.

Loved the depth of the story and it's length also. Nice to be able to sit down and read a story at one sitting. Yes, this begs for a sequel, as way too many threads to follow. In my opinion, this is much better in it's long form than individual chapters, as it allows the story to flow without trying to come up with breaks for chapters. Maybe some of the people have a point about it being in novels area, but could be put in loving couples too. Think too many people are reading for stroke material, rather than content. Keep up the good work and I hope you post a sequel soon.

Nice

Fucking brilliant.

I'll be looking for more from you...

Fantastic story.

One of the best. To those who dont like long stories. Read it a little at a time. No problem. As for me. When I get one this good I dont want to wait. Looking forward to more of your work. You just made yourself one of Lits finest. Thanks JJ. Mike in Missouri

Could not stop once I started

I spent all afternoon and half the night reading this from start to finish. Once i started i was hooked. Keep it up and look forward to the triplets reunion after their couple of weeks separation.

Great story!

Looking forward to tour further development of the triplets!!

Quality

I usually go for shorter stories but this story ranks with the best. Well developed storeyline, good intros to the main charactors and if it was a paperback you would not put it down until you read the last line.
Looking forward to future listings - very well done.. anon47

Amazing Story

When i first clicked the story I did not expect to cover it all in one day; however, once I got started I just couldn't stop reading. One of the best stories I have read on this site and I really hope you post a sequel soon. 5 stars for an amazing story and I hope to see much more from you.

fucking amazing

so i love incest stories and although thats what i was looking for, and this only has a mild form of inces,t it was fucking awesome. i think that if you made a sequel and changed the incestual part to something a bit less taboo then you could put it into a book and sell it.

Amazing Story

Like many of the other comments I did not realise the extent of the story. Having said that I spent the day reading it and could not stop. I did not get much accomplished today. It was a great story, I enjoyed the plot with its twist and turns.

this story

PLEASE don't make it a one time sory ... Damn fine job!

Great story. Could not put in down.

LOved the work. I had to stop to eat and came right back to it.

wow

i have never commented but i was memorized by this story, i have a kick ass book im reading and i stayed up and read this all in one go great job

I don't have much to add

to those positive comments before. I read it in one go as well. No, sorry, two goes. I fell asleep after p. 38 but resumed reading as soon as I woke up and had a cup of coffee.
One small - very small - caveat, though. What do you teach those muscles, skins and stomach that they become so 'taught'? I'm sure you mean 'taut'.
Thank you for writing and I can't wait for you to pick up the 'Threads'.

Wow!

This was a good story, should make a General Audiences or at least a PG-13 version for the less XXX crowd. One that would be suitable say for Facebook or something. Just an idea.

Great!

I don't normally comment but great story man. I always love long stories with good character development and a drawn-out storyline. I hope you come up with a sequel to Threads...

Comments

Just wanted to say thanks for all the kind words and feedback. I'm glad so many people are enjoying the story, and for those of you wondering, yes, there's sequels.
Merry Christmas to you all.

JJ

Definite page turner

I just could not put this down. This story has it all. Action, romance, intrigue, humor, and of course sex. There are so many ways to spin the sequels, and I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up the great work.

What can I say that hasnt been already posted?

Killer plot; well written.... I was glued to my seat for the whole 42 pages!

A really gifted writer

Like most looking for more of a short story, got started and could not stop. Really well written, good charater description and story flowed. Actually stayed up till 5:00 AM reading it. Looking forward to reading more from you

Awesome!

I can't wait to read a sequel to this one. Good story, well written, although I found it a bit too slow in the beginning. It might be a good idea to add more whitespace if you are making a jump in time. Absolutelly one of my favourite stories.

I would have paid to read this

Amazing story and eye for details. Would happily have paid to read this.

Well done!! Bravo!! Started to read and could not stop. Looking forward to the next in this series.

Great Story!

Wow! Fantasy...Intrigue...Danger...and a whole lot more! Great story here! Hope you do more with these characters!

WoW

Very well written, while the story theme is not my preference i seen the title and had to read it. Loved the "oh shit" factor. i look forward to seeing the rest of this series.

wonderbar....!_

A find piece you wrote...a very fine one indeed!

good job well done!

I would just like to thank you for a fine story. Ignor those commenters who said that it was too long, had you broke it up into chapters I feel that it may have become disjointed. I personally can't wait for your next submission on this story line. Thank You.

Horrifically Amazing

I have to admit that this story is terrible... I hate stories that end. In reality I loved the epic novel, literally if you keep on going and print it and staple it together it can be a masterpiece, but as usual all good things have to end. Thank you for bringing the characters to life, they were very dynamic, ever changing and learning. Tragedy that Kyle and Patricia didn't get together, but I realize that this is the only way for Kyle to get more than one partner, sad though, if he gets Dom training hey maybe he can get Patricia to be his and still have more that one girl, You never know he is only like a billionaire. Thank you for the opportunity to read art. Keep working hard.

Outstanding

One of the best reads here on the site - well done! - look forward to more

Holy Fuck.

While I think you have this in the wrong section, this is one of the best stories I have read on this site. I would call this a novel with sex in it rather than an erotic story. 5/5 and I'll be watching for more of your work.

Great

Obviously this site has lots of great erotic short stories, but I'm occasionally amazed at the quality of work by some of the amateur writers. You stand out as one of the more gifted ones. Great story development and execution. It reminds be a bit of "The Billionaire" series by another author on this site, but is clearly original enough to avoid being any kind of knock off. Who doesn't like the story of a guy who gets rich and gets women? Love the work and keep it up. Anxiously awaiting a sequel.

Great story

Too bad about the thing with Patricia though spoiled the story for me..... great read though

NYT Best Seller

Hai JJ
You are in a different League & the site is lucky that you posted here.
About people bikering about too long i can tell you that it is because they could not stop reading and it had taken a toll on their schedule.
The way Wes character is built its amazing and you are really better than the so called NY Times Bestseller tag so many people put out there.
I liked it very much and a very big thanks for putting such a master piece Free of cost in this site.
You can really publish this as its an erotic novel.
Good job & finally as you had informed post the completed sets ASAP.

Wondrful

Took me 3 evenings to read the story. Stayed up till midnite one day reading. Hard to stop. Keep up the good work and I await the next installment. 5 stars all the way.

Most Excellent

I am not a critic, I just enjoy good stories, especially mystery stories. Keep up the good work and continue on with further adventures of the triplets. PLEASE!

Threads The Island

Fantastic story! One of the best I have read in a while. Liked it so much I logged in a new account to not commet anonymously. Keep doin what you do 1

Wow

Interesting plot, attention grabing twists, charectors with some depth, and managed to avoid over detailing the sex. (I prefer some things left to my own imagination)

Wonderful job.
Keep up the good work.
Consider a career in writing.

Great story

really enjoyed it and very much looking forward to future chapters.

Thanks

Yes, thanks for such a good job, and 5 stars.
It is so good that with a few changes and enrichments it could easily become the script for a movie - a serious one, not X rated, I mean.
You promised a sequel with the triplets - thanks in advance for your work

simply awesome

You can groom it for a movie

add

You should really add more to this story. It was a really great story and it just ended like that you should add more though and have like he falls for both of them

Great Start

The story was great - I would like to rwad about NY and LA in the next adventure.