Omg i loved it as a story. Not as some wierd jack off clip. I honestly think u should publish it and add to it like a story of thwm in LA! SEQUAL! If thats how u spell that... Anyway i thought it was amazing and hope u publish it. :) favorite short story by far. U write really well :)
As was said before, it was such a good story that I just kept reading it. Didn't even use it as "fodder" more than once or twice (although there were scenes that were great for it).
Well written, hope it continues.
by
Anonymous10/28/12
awesome
I could not sleep either till I finished!! Dude u should getting published by someone.
by
Anonymous10/31/12
Excellent
Well crafted story - with erotic undertones. Could stand main stream publishing. To be continued?
by
Anonymous11/01/12
Very well composed, and with an open end like it has it makes one asking for continuation,or you are going to leave the end to our imaginations?!!
by
Anonymous11/04/12
Recently just read this story it was an excellent story, I was really captured by the words I couldn't put it down masterfully crafted I definitely agree with a comment earlier it could definitely adapted to main stream.
Not going to lie, I was extremely disappointed that Kyle and Katie didn't give in to their desires and sleep together at some point after finding out. Kara sneaking in and fucking him was OK but lost a lot of its punch due to the fact that he didn't know what was going on, and the fact that she was the trashier and more unappealing of the two sisters. I thought the whole time that the story was progressing towards Kyle and Katie having sex at some point and was eagerly anticipating it. When I got to the end and saw that it wasn't going to happen I was disappointed - I would almost say that I felt "cheated," but that's not fair since its your story and should operate independently of anyone else's expectations.
by
Anonymous11/05/12
Sequel please!
Props on a superb story! I started reading it and was late to a meeting because I "couldn't put it down." Like others I'm left wondering if you'll continue the story? It's very open ended and I'd love to see how the siblings respond to each other after the 2 weeks of "thinking about it." Whatever you decide....great story!
by
Anonymous11/07/12
Loved it!!! Want more from Kyle, Kara & Katie!!
The best story ever!! Couldn't put it down - I cancelled my whole day just to read it!! Want to hear what happened to them, want to know more!!
by
Anonymous11/07/12
something needed to be sorted out
I already expressed my appreciation to this story in a public comment, however I feel there something needs to be sorted out, which who exactly went to kyle’s room Kara or Sara both admitted that they were the one who seduced him, and Kyle suspected Sara from the way she hoped off of him, while there was no trace of her in the cd, but she admitted that she went to his bed and seduced him.
by
Anonymous11/07/12
Loved it!!
Keep up the great work! Looking forward to the next part of the story
by
Anonymous11/12/12
Awesome job!!!
Let me just say that this was one of those stories that I had to put down to deal with things very quickly, and then rush back to! I was captivated since page one! I want to read more of your work!
by
Anonymous11/12/12
Great story
I had to finish it in one setting. Great character development. I wondered how I
would have handled the situation.
I read this story and it was like I was almost there. That's how you know you're a good writer when the reader feels apart of the story. I really hope you continue this series.
by
Anonymous11/19/12
Kara seduced Kyle
Mr. Anonymous who wandered who seduced Kyle, it was Kara. He saw the tape and knows it's her. The story is actually quite clear about that, if you re-read the section pertaining to it. It's in the last few pages.
This story is absolutely amazing though. Fantastic work, JammyJimmy!
This is well crafted fiction, with some steamy sex included. Excellent writing, a command of the mechanics and structures of English, good character development, gripping plot, good descriptions of setting and mood.
I would love to see more of this work. Please continue your efforts.
by
Anonymous11/21/12
Wonderful book
I read the series almost straight through and it took me 7 hours. The twists and turns, little incest, strange romance with Patricia and the detective complexities. I really enjoyed reading it. Your story telling reminds of the combination author s of Dan Brown, and Nora Roberts. This truly was a wonderful story and one I was honored to read. Keep going - writing and I will check back to see what else you have written.
by
Anonymous11/22/12
A Long Short Story That Is Totally Worth IT
This is a long short story. That is not always a good recommendation, but in this case it is. JammyJimmy has created totally believable characters who are involved in a story of inherited wealth that is mostly used to change lives for the better. The incestuous relationships are a key to the story, yet not the center of the story by any means. The characters' back stories are just as well-thought-out as are the various points of view. And I found myself wondering about Kyle, Katie and Kara and their relationships going forward from the end of the story. In other words, I cared about them in a way that is not always the case with stories that I read, even in erotic fiction.
I'm truly impressed that you placed an elaborate part for each of them to play in the story. It's among the top on my list, that I'm most positively sure of. I can only hope that you find it within yourself to continue this story line. I'd be astounded to find find out what happens along their journeys and how they progress through the two weeks, meeting key players and other important guest to significantly boost their "status". Besides, we have to see if the sisters feelings begin to waiver or if they feel they same and stay in they're "sexually frustrated" stupor.lol ;)
The characters' back stories are just as well-thought-out as the continuing story. Kyle should declare himself and the Island as a separate nation with its own laws and maybe more useful marriage laws.
I'm a little afraid of Patricia tho', she wants Kyle to herself but really needs to share him with his sisters who he truly loves.
More soon please.
by
Anonymous11/27/12
It was a superb read.
This story went way beyond what I would have expected to find here or at least from my experience.
In all truth, this whole story belongs in an actual adult fiction book. Fully expanded and continued forward with. I really, really want to read more about Kyle, his sisters and their growth and development as siblings and as owners of a remarkable organization. I would gladly read more such work from the excellent author.
Wonderful and the erotic parts fit in nicely and belong their, as if they grew from the natural progression.
was i the only one hoping Ed would die a horrible death? I lost a lot of respect for kyle because this fucking asshole with no redeeming qualities was his close friend. I at least thought that Kyle would mature at some point and realize that Ed was a horrible person that he shouldn't be friends with, but nope, the whole time it was like "Oh, that wacky Ed! That's just what he's like, gotta love him!" When, in fact, no, Ed was a misogynistic stupid asshole with no redeeming qualities and all the reasonable adults who interacted with him should have told him off and disowned him. A few times Kyle mentioned that "Well, he's actually a good guy underneath" but we weren't actually shown anything to support that and he just acted like a stupid asshole the whole story.
by
Anonymous12/02/12
umm
great story loved aside from the lack of incest...
by
Anonymous12/03/12
Wow, that was very nearly a short novel in itself! Kudos for the back story, inventing the Island, details on security, scheduling, etc. I hope you have written more about these triplets, with good, juicy parts!
This still remains my best loved story. . a few have knocked on the door, but after reading 2-5 a day for a yr now , you remain best read. I only wish you would bring a few chapters to pull it all together and how he and his sisters and all are coming to a happy ever after .
Amazing story, easily one of the best written on Literotica. But really shouldn't be categorized as Incest.
I would suggest Erotic Couplings
by
Anonymous12/11/12
WOW!
One Word : WOW.
by
Anonymous12/13/12
At a glance...
This is 42 pages and has over 600 comments with one of the highest ratings, from a member with only two submissions???
Naturally I was curious to see if this was indeed a hidden gem so I skimmed a few paragraphs:
"her body taught (sic) and firm, her breasts pert and round"
"Her right hand slid down over her taught (sic), flat stomach"
I'm sorry but I can't commit to reading something that's meant to be erotic if I'm going to laugh every other paragraph at humorously misspelled words. Homophones are a death trap for some. It's taut not taught.
Maybe you've got the next "Threads of Gray" here or perhaps it's just a ripoff of Pedersen's story with all the video surveillance and a silo "island" fortress but I will never know. It's too ambitious a length to go without proper editing which means good spell checking at the least.
Sorry, I'll pass on this one until it gets re-edited.
I loved this. You've put a lot of love, effort, and research into writing this and it shows. It reads very plausibly, at least in the context of the overarching story. The pacing and character development throughout were also both very good, and although I would have preferred longer sex scenes, yours did suit the tempo with which you write.
I do have to agree with two of the commentators below - this shouldn't really be classified as incest, since the incestuous aspects were mainly used just to add initial tension and provide leverage for the conflict with Edwin. Now if you followed up with a sequel to further explore the relationship dynamic between the triplets... *hint hint*
There are a couple of spelling errors and typos here and there, but not really enough to detract from the story. Still, it could use a once over to sort those few errors out.
Overall a great read; looking forward to more from you!
by
Anonymous12/22/12
Awesome
Story is awesome...really interesting and thrilling.....good work author..waiting for part 2
by
Anonymous12/23/12
keep it going
if this was a book on tape, i would listen to it again and again as I delivered mail. (perverted letter carrier). can't wait for the next saga of Kyle and Patricia. Awesome writing and story!!
by
Anonymous12/24/12
Great story. Would give is more stars.
The greatest.
Looking for more.
by
Anonymous12/24/12
WOW!!!
When I saw 42 pages I almost sat this aside. I am glad I did not!
I await Threads of the sisters, Kyle, their friends and their new relationships, and of course a return to the island. .
And even if they are 42 pages each, I hope all will remember how well this was written.
by
Anonymous12/27/12
AMAZING!
Looking forward to more!
by
Anonymous12/27/12
Great Story
I hope there is more coming, it was great reading this story would love to see more added to the saga...
by
Anonymous12/31/12
Excellent Craftsmanship!!
What a well rendered and tendered story! Cudos for your Threads, throughout, keeping the engagement with both plot and content. I am VERY glad I read this. It is inspiring. Thank you, and PLEASE add more to the saga.
by
Anonymous12/31/12
Had Everything
Great read ,kept me coming back for more .Looking foward to your story.
by
Anonymous01/01/13
Great read.
Such a good story, just a shame its over. I want more.
Hopefully you'll add more to it soon.
by
Anonymous01/01/13
WANT MORE
that was absolutely wonderful and hot.Hope that you would add more to the story.We don't want it to end here,trust me.
by
Anonymous01/01/13
one helluva read
held my interest all the way through,great read,more please, cracking story,
by
Anonymous01/02/13
A Diamond In The Rough
As a heavy reader, I am always on the lookout for an author that can draw me into a story. I like the story that you look up from an hour after you promised to just read a quick chapter, and you find yourself much more tired and stiff than you expected.
This is a story that grips you as such. It feels very organic; the characters feel alive and real. I'm not saying there are no cheap moments, but I am saying that I didn't care because I was too busy thinking about what might happen next.
I regularly check the author's profile for new submissions; I recommend you do the same :)
Absolutely the best story on this site. you must be very proud of the response this story has received and rightly so as it is amazing.You are truly a very talented writer and have great perception. I am truly blessed to have read this and cant wait for the sequels to be put up for my reading pleasure. again well done.
by
Anonymous01/06/13
Like more of ths same!
Loved this story! I also would love to see some continuation(s). How do Kyle and his sister grow into their various businesses and mature to the leaders of own "divisions".
And of course, how their love lives unfold. Maybe having further get-togethers with only his sisters, but also three-somes, four-somes or moresomes with them. Kyle might realize that because the Island is, essentially, its own country, that any law concerning "incest", for example, could be modified or completely stricken from the law books.
I, for one, would to see the characters continue to develop & evolve. A lot of fun could had and some humorous situations evovle wtih a continuation of this tale.
To think Ive been on this website for a long time, always skipped this story when i saw how many pages there were than one day i told myself i had to sit down and read it, i was hoping for more incest action but after reading 3 pages i sat down a full Friday night reading half the story, been a long time sense i wanted to read a "book" and skip everything else i could be doing. Fantastic story!
by
Anonymous01/07/13
Outstanding story
Without a doubt one of the best stories I have read and like all good stories wished it was not the last page.
Like others have asked, have you plans to continue this story, I hope so.
Thank you, for a great read.
Cossie
by
Anonymous01/07/13
More please
That was GREAT! Everything about it, some sex, not too overpowering,story line was superb. Please do more
English
PUBLISH!
Omg i loved it as a story. Not as some wierd jack off clip. I honestly think u should publish it and add to it like a story of thwm in LA! SEQUAL! If thats how u spell that... Anyway i thought it was amazing and hope u publish it. :) favorite short story by far. U write really well :)
haven't slept
too good to stop reading
Kept reading
As was said before, it was such a good story that I just kept reading it. Didn't even use it as "fodder" more than once or twice (although there were scenes that were great for it).
Well written, hope it continues.
awesome
I could not sleep either till I finished!! Dude u should getting published by someone.
Excellent
Well crafted story - with erotic undertones. Could stand main stream publishing. To be continued?
Very well composed, and with an open end like it has it makes one asking for continuation,or you are going to leave the end to our imaginations?!!
Recently just read this story it was an excellent story, I was really captured by the words I couldn't put it down masterfully crafted I definitely agree with a comment earlier it could definitely adapted to main stream.
Great stuff, but....
Not going to lie, I was extremely disappointed that Kyle and Katie didn't give in to their desires and sleep together at some point after finding out. Kara sneaking in and fucking him was OK but lost a lot of its punch due to the fact that he didn't know what was going on, and the fact that she was the trashier and more unappealing of the two sisters. I thought the whole time that the story was progressing towards Kyle and Katie having sex at some point and was eagerly anticipating it. When I got to the end and saw that it wasn't going to happen I was disappointed - I would almost say that I felt "cheated," but that's not fair since its your story and should operate independently of anyone else's expectations.
Sequel please!
Props on a superb story! I started reading it and was late to a meeting because I "couldn't put it down." Like others I'm left wondering if you'll continue the story? It's very open ended and I'd love to see how the siblings respond to each other after the 2 weeks of "thinking about it." Whatever you decide....great story!
Loved it!!! Want more from Kyle, Kara & Katie!!
The best story ever!! Couldn't put it down - I cancelled my whole day just to read it!! Want to hear what happened to them, want to know more!!
something needed to be sorted out
I already expressed my appreciation to this story in a public comment, however I feel there something needs to be sorted out, which who exactly went to kyle’s room Kara or Sara both admitted that they were the one who seduced him, and Kyle suspected Sara from the way she hoped off of him, while there was no trace of her in the cd, but she admitted that she went to his bed and seduced him.
Loved it!!
Keep up the great work! Looking forward to the next part of the story
Awesome job!!!
Let me just say that this was one of those stories that I had to put down to deal with things very quickly, and then rush back to! I was captivated since page one! I want to read more of your work!
Great story
I had to finish it in one setting. Great character development. I wondered how I
would have handled the situation.
Awesome!
I read this story and it was like I was almost there. That's how you know you're a good writer when the reader feels apart of the story. I really hope you continue this series.
Kara seduced Kyle
Mr. Anonymous who wandered who seduced Kyle, it was Kara. He saw the tape and knows it's her. The story is actually quite clear about that, if you re-read the section pertaining to it. It's in the last few pages.
This story is absolutely amazing though. Fantastic work, JammyJimmy!
Best writing I've seen on the Literotica site
This is well crafted fiction, with some steamy sex included. Excellent writing, a command of the mechanics and structures of English, good character development, gripping plot, good descriptions of setting and mood.
I would love to see more of this work. Please continue your efforts.
Wonderful book
I read the series almost straight through and it took me 7 hours. The twists and turns, little incest, strange romance with Patricia and the detective complexities. I really enjoyed reading it. Your story telling reminds of the combination author s of Dan Brown, and Nora Roberts. This truly was a wonderful story and one I was honored to read. Keep going - writing and I will check back to see what else you have written.
A Long Short Story That Is Totally Worth IT
This is a long short story. That is not always a good recommendation, but in this case it is. JammyJimmy has created totally believable characters who are involved in a story of inherited wealth that is mostly used to change lives for the better. The incestuous relationships are a key to the story, yet not the center of the story by any means. The characters' back stories are just as well-thought-out as are the various points of view. And I found myself wondering about Kyle, Katie and Kara and their relationships going forward from the end of the story. In other words, I cared about them in a way that is not always the case with stories that I read, even in erotic fiction.
Quite the phenomenal threaded long story.
I'm truly impressed that you placed an elaborate part for each of them to play in the story. It's among the top on my list, that I'm most positively sure of. I can only hope that you find it within yourself to continue this story line. I'd be astounded to find find out what happens along their journeys and how they progress through the two weeks, meeting key players and other important guest to significantly boost their "status". Besides, we have to see if the sisters feelings begin to waiver or if they feel they same and stay in they're "sexually frustrated" stupor.lol ;)
Fuckin clean n Gr8
Luv it soOo much
Let's Hear More From the Kingdom of Kyle!
The characters' back stories are just as well-thought-out as the continuing story. Kyle should declare himself and the Island as a separate nation with its own laws and maybe more useful marriage laws.
I'm a little afraid of Patricia tho', she wants Kyle to herself but really needs to share him with his sisters who he truly loves.
More soon please.
It was a superb read.
This story went way beyond what I would have expected to find here or at least from my experience.
In all truth, this whole story belongs in an actual adult fiction book. Fully expanded and continued forward with. I really, really want to read more about Kyle, his sisters and their growth and development as siblings and as owners of a remarkable organization. I would gladly read more such work from the excellent author.
Wonderful and the erotic parts fit in nicely and belong their, as if they grew from the natural progression.
Ed fucking sucks
was i the only one hoping Ed would die a horrible death? I lost a lot of respect for kyle because this fucking asshole with no redeeming qualities was his close friend. I at least thought that Kyle would mature at some point and realize that Ed was a horrible person that he shouldn't be friends with, but nope, the whole time it was like "Oh, that wacky Ed! That's just what he's like, gotta love him!" When, in fact, no, Ed was a misogynistic stupid asshole with no redeeming qualities and all the reasonable adults who interacted with him should have told him off and disowned him. A few times Kyle mentioned that "Well, he's actually a good guy underneath" but we weren't actually shown anything to support that and he just acted like a stupid asshole the whole story.
umm
great story loved aside from the lack of incest...
Wow, that was very nearly a short novel in itself! Kudos for the back story, inventing the Island, details on security, scheduling, etc. I hope you have written more about these triplets, with good, juicy parts!
been a yr now. I've hoped for more to come,,,,
This still remains my best loved story. . a few have knocked on the door, but after reading 2-5 a day for a yr now , you remain best read. I only wish you would bring a few chapters to pull it all together and how he and his sisters and all are coming to a happy ever after .
Part 2 please
I have read this part several times and it really very good.
I hope 1 day soon we can enjoy part 2.
Too many loose ends to end it just here.
Amazing story, but miscategorized
Amazing story, easily one of the best written on Literotica. But really shouldn't be categorized as Incest.
I would suggest Erotic Couplings
WOW!
One Word : WOW.
At a glance...
This is 42 pages and has over 600 comments with one of the highest ratings, from a member with only two submissions???
Naturally I was curious to see if this was indeed a hidden gem so I skimmed a few paragraphs:
"her body taught (sic) and firm, her breasts pert and round"
"Her right hand slid down over her taught (sic), flat stomach"
I'm sorry but I can't commit to reading something that's meant to be erotic if I'm going to laugh every other paragraph at humorously misspelled words. Homophones are a death trap for some. It's taut not taught.
Maybe you've got the next "Threads of Gray" here or perhaps it's just a ripoff of Pedersen's story with all the video surveillance and a silo "island" fortress but I will never know. It's too ambitious a length to go without proper editing which means good spell checking at the least.
Sorry, I'll pass on this one until it gets re-edited.
Great story
I couldn't stop reading. I loved it, hopefully there is a part 2 coming soon. I would love o know happens.
Great story!
I loved this. You've put a lot of love, effort, and research into writing this and it shows. It reads very plausibly, at least in the context of the overarching story. The pacing and character development throughout were also both very good, and although I would have preferred longer sex scenes, yours did suit the tempo with which you write.
I do have to agree with two of the commentators below - this shouldn't really be classified as incest, since the incestuous aspects were mainly used just to add initial tension and provide leverage for the conflict with Edwin. Now if you followed up with a sequel to further explore the relationship dynamic between the triplets... *hint hint*
There are a couple of spelling errors and typos here and there, but not really enough to detract from the story. Still, it could use a once over to sort those few errors out.
Overall a great read; looking forward to more from you!
Awesome
Story is awesome...really interesting and thrilling.....good work author..waiting for part 2
keep it going
if this was a book on tape, i would listen to it again and again as I delivered mail. (perverted letter carrier). can't wait for the next saga of Kyle and Patricia. Awesome writing and story!!
Great story. Would give is more stars.
The greatest.
Looking for more.
WOW!!!
When I saw 42 pages I almost sat this aside. I am glad I did not!
I await Threads of the sisters, Kyle, their friends and their new relationships, and of course a return to the island. .
And even if they are 42 pages each, I hope all will remember how well this was written.
AMAZING!
Looking forward to more!
Great Story
I hope there is more coming, it was great reading this story would love to see more added to the saga...
Excellent Craftsmanship!!
What a well rendered and tendered story! Cudos for your Threads, throughout, keeping the engagement with both plot and content. I am VERY glad I read this. It is inspiring. Thank you, and PLEASE add more to the saga.
Had Everything
Great read ,kept me coming back for more .Looking foward to your story.
Great read.
Such a good story, just a shame its over. I want more.
Hopefully you'll add more to it soon.
WANT MORE
that was absolutely wonderful and hot.Hope that you would add more to the story.We don't want it to end here,trust me.
one helluva read
held my interest all the way through,great read,more please, cracking story,
A Diamond In The Rough
As a heavy reader, I am always on the lookout for an author that can draw me into a story. I like the story that you look up from an hour after you promised to just read a quick chapter, and you find yourself much more tired and stiff than you expected.
This is a story that grips you as such. It feels very organic; the characters feel alive and real. I'm not saying there are no cheap moments, but I am saying that I didn't care because I was too busy thinking about what might happen next.
I regularly check the author's profile for new submissions; I recommend you do the same :)
OUTSTANDING WORK
Absolutely the best story on this site. you must be very proud of the response this story has received and rightly so as it is amazing.You are truly a very talented writer and have great perception. I am truly blessed to have read this and cant wait for the sequels to be put up for my reading pleasure. again well done.
Like more of ths same!
Loved this story! I also would love to see some continuation(s). How do Kyle and his sister grow into their various businesses and mature to the leaders of own "divisions".
And of course, how their love lives unfold. Maybe having further get-togethers with only his sisters, but also three-somes, four-somes or moresomes with them. Kyle might realize that because the Island is, essentially, its own country, that any law concerning "incest", for example, could be modified or completely stricken from the law books.
I, for one, would to see the characters continue to develop & evolve. A lot of fun could had and some humorous situations evovle wtih a continuation of this tale.
Absolutely Amazing
To think Ive been on this website for a long time, always skipped this story when i saw how many pages there were than one day i told myself i had to sit down and read it, i was hoping for more incest action but after reading 3 pages i sat down a full Friday night reading half the story, been a long time sense i wanted to read a "book" and skip everything else i could be doing. Fantastic story!
Outstanding story
Without a doubt one of the best stories I have read and like all good stories wished it was not the last page.
Like others have asked, have you plans to continue this story, I hope so.
Thank you, for a great read.
Cossie
More please
That was GREAT! Everything about it, some sex, not too overpowering,story line was superb. Please do more
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Threads: The Island or
More submissions by JammyJimmy.