Threads: The Island

only a total asshole

would post a 42 page story on an erotic site why the hell did the idiot webmasters allow it? most readers will not read anything over 4 pages 10 tops and thats pushing it. do yourself and the readers a favor and delete and repost it 4 pages at a time and use a good editor before reposting it probably needs it.

One of my favorites!

I seriously read all 42 pages in two nights. I even caught myself sneaking away to continue the story on my phone. Apart from the grammatical errors, the story was well written and made me feel like it was fantasy and not just fiction. Keep writing and I would love to see more of these characters.

Marvelous

I loved your tale. I was mesmerized from start to finish. Normally this is a jack off site for me. but enjoyed this immensely. Thanks for a great read.

Sequel please.

This was a great story. Please write a sequel.

are you going to leave us hanging or do we get more

Great story would like to hear more for sure about the adventures of Kyle, Patricia, Kate and Kara long with casey and ed dont let it end there please

SO GOOD!

Where is the other stories at? I want more! More please! You're a fantastic writer, and I was so glad there were 42 pages. Made me thankful! Please share the rest of the story with us soon.

Best story i've read in a long time

Well written story, had everything needed for enjoyment. Thanks for a great read couldn't put it down.

Only a few

There are few stories on this site that have me wanting more but this tops the list.
Please continue with their adventures. There are so many directions to go, surely you can find one. Thanks for the great read.

More?

Any chance of a sequel? This story was amazing I hope there is more to it!

Amazing to the very end

Loved it, your a great storyteller!!! Can you please write more about Conner Grant and his devilish ways. He really got under my skin (wink wink nudge nudge ;-D )

Fantastic Island Story

Fantastic, gripping story; even if you took out the sex!
Slightly slow in some places ,which I thought could be 'pruned' a little.
Keep up the good writing and I look forward to the sequel's.

Disappointed

Very good story development, but I felt that there were too many characters to develop in a story of this length....it needed to be longer, but it already was way too long, if you understand my point. I ended up skimming over most of the sex and the "hollywood" names, because I was expecting (hoping for ?) plot twists and character interactions....but neither happened. All the more disappointing because you provided such rich potential...what about Connor getting it on with almost anyone there, like maybe Lakshmi for example ?...you could have described his features, smile, hair, scent, physique, package, whatever as he hooked up with any of those well-described females....what about Patricia getting the sex she really wanted somehow? That would be hot. And of course, the girls, Katie and Kara....I could see myself in them, but they were largely ignored....I raced through this wondering if they might get it on with someone, with each other (why not?) or together with Kyle, which would have been awesome....

Fucking amazeing

The story started slow on the sex side of things but it speed up and has to be the best fucking story on here

Open ended story, looking forward to tying up the loose ends

I really like the multiple story threads that you cultivated.

Brilliant4A6C

Brilliant, The best written story I have read on this website. Congratulations

Jesus....

I read through the whole thing over a night, didn't sleep one bit! Best story EVER! I've never been captivated like this from an amature writer! So fucken' get the next chapter up already!

More

I need more this is awesome

Great story!

Loved the character development and the overall story line. A couple of really minor things that bothered me just because I'm anal retentive like this. You could have used a second set of eyes to edit it. There are a couple of minor mixed up words or names that stuck out to me. Also, I would have like to seen some type of chapters or at least a natural break in several spots to give the reader a moment to stop and reflect on the story to that point. I still gave you five stars though, well done.

its not one of the best. it is the best. i just wished u continued on with it more. looking forward to a sequel and also more stories from you. good work done

very good

had to keep coming back to see what happened next when is the next part .

sadly I don't think there ever will be a next part.

@ Anon

If you check out the comments on the authors blog there has been no update for over a year same as Lit. Some of the posters over there have tried to seek out JammyJimmy in real life and are under the impression he is dead :(

Very well done!

I am jealous of your writing ability.

Loved It!!!!

Great story!! Write more

WOW

This has been an amazing story. I have to admit the idea of 42 pages was daunting at first and i had to split up reading it over a few days but I'm so glad i carried on i cant wait to see if there is a squeal but I shall definitively keep an eye out for it. You truly have a gift

Fantastic story

I had this read in roughly 8 hours, wow that was an incredible piece of literature. Inspires me to write myself.

Bitchin' story

That was a fantastic read hope there is more on it way. Hope he gets with his sisters again.

follow up?

You said its a series..pls post the other parts I've been waitin
From a year!! The best story on this site!!

Anticipating the next

Fantastic read, you have a gift JJ.
Looking forward to any more posts from you.

Great Story!!

It's always refreshing to read a story by someone who has such a great talent. Everything seemed to flow seamlessly, with a few surprises along the way. It was also refreshing to read an actual story instead of one of those wham-bam-thank-you-ma'am types. Fantastic story, and I look forward to reading the sequel to this one. I LOVE IT!!

Top Story

It has been a long time since I have read such interesting & entertaining story.

GREAT TALENT

This is one of the best ever on here. A great story with some erotic parts. Love it!

^_^~!

What an amazing story! Not j ust some quick erotic tale, but a fantastic bit of literature... I could totally see this as an HBO mini-series, heh.

Two things, though. The transition between scenes needs to be a bit more noticable, like using a row of tildes or so mething. Second, not enough incest >:D

almost

Page 1-35 geniusish.

Thereafter, not so much.

Ponder.

And adjust

Wow

Spent all day reading this, didn't regret a single moment. If I have one complaint it's only that the story's latter pages as it winds down to its conclusion feel notably sluggish, which personally detracted from the experience a little. But otherwise? Absolutely amazing.

That should be a book

I don't know where you could sell it though

great

Great story with or without the incest. Turn this into a manuscript and try to get it published. Maybe it can get turn into a movie

Love this story, and I hope it isn't over

This story was amazing. It has enticed and tantalized me for awhile before I finally had the time to finish it. I hope it continues

Very good read

This is probably the longest story I have read about incest and sexual fantasies but it is also the best and should probably be continued and published as a novel you are a very good writer with lots of imagination.

Loved it

A grill story one of the best I read on this site.

Outstanding!!!

Best read in years, has it all, even teases for tomorrows story....

FUCKING LUXURIOUS

Its a pity that when authors write biographies or just stories that they are not allowed to tell about personal activities like sex and what is love as best describe by you Jimmy ...This story was handsome....and girl beautiful.....
At the beginning I did wet my pants deliberately ...I was so turned on....
I had so many emotions from this story I just wanted to fuck somebody.....
Thanks bro...My email address : kizambeezi@yahoo.com.....You can hook me up anytime with your next post......Finally there is no need to be critical of anything ...even if I could .....You are a good turn on writer...

absolutely wonderful

This is by far one of, if not the, best story I've had the pleasure of reading. The layers in the plot and the actual character development are incredible. From simply an artistic perspective this story is absolutely worth the time it takes to read it and I can only offer my deepest appreciation at what has been created for us to read. Thank you for the time and courage it took to write and post this incredible story.

Sequel

There needs to be a sequel with some incest now that they know it. Please!!!

Amazing

Amazing long hot storie, very well done!

Fucking A;)

Wow!!!! This was brilliant. There definitely needs to be a sequel and sooner rather than later

your misuse of

singular, plural, and punctuation was appalling. It is sad to have an otherwise entertaining story so difficult to read because of your repeated errors. btw what do you have against Sir Richard Branson?

awesome! twisted and hot!

Love this, especially the bizarre coincidence sex 3 year prior, and then surprise.
wished I'd gotten more of Katie's desire, but you packed a lot of action in there.
would only hope to see sisters do Kyle with Patricia upon return.

Really excellent story

I rather enjoyed the story overall. It was nice to have the sex, but have an entertaining story surrounding the 'good parts'. My only main criticism would be if you have characters that are American then study up on American lingo. We don't say cheers, or several other U.K. references that you must use on a regular basis. I kept hearing them in my head with British accents because of it, kinda detracted from an otherwise wonderful tale. Would love a sequel as I believe others mentioned with the sisters perhaps sharing each other and Kyle and Patricia. Thanks for the story.

-KC

EXCELLENT!!

Excellent story overall, but you should have considered breaking it down into parts. 42 pages is extremely long to keep some people's attention.

I have regrets

Just discovered this story - it took a long time to read.
Gave it a 5-star rating.
I regret the 5-star rating I gave to other stories. Wow. Clarity of writing, a plot that is well-woven, and extremely well-written dialogue.