While well written, with few, if any, punctuation errors, it seems too quick to simply "happen." There was very little back-story on his own temerity to dive in and take her. And why was she so keen on him? The separation and empty nest was well versed but there was little description of what more that may have done to her psyche.
Despite that, the quick story does leave one wanting more, with a little anticipation, and I would like to see more.
I agree with the other two, this was too short. What I read was great, just needs to continue with lots more to it. Him moving in they becoming a couple. Maybe him only being 14 or 16 years younger than her, she having him young. Him always was in love with her and never getting married, the possibilities are endless bud.
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A Little More
While well written, with few, if any, punctuation errors, it seems too quick to simply "happen." There was very little back-story on his own temerity to dive in and take her. And why was she so keen on him? The separation and empty nest was well versed but there was little description of what more that may have done to her psyche.
Despite that, the quick story does leave one wanting more, with a little anticipation, and I would like to see more.
Keep it coming.
sinwizard
This story needs a follow-up chapter or two
A sweet story and it's really hot. I wasn't ready for it to be finished,and wanted to read more of their sexual relationship.
Thanks for the read.
Very Good
I agree with the other two, this was too short. What I read was great, just needs to continue with lots more to it. Him moving in they becoming a couple. Maybe him only being 14 or 16 years younger than her, she having him young. Him always was in love with her and never getting married, the possibilities are endless bud.
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