Let's hope she just keeps going and a friend finds him and releases him. Divorce court here we come.
Ridiculous excuse to fuck someone right in front of him, like that's the end of it. What goes before their marriage has nothing to do with her--none of her business UNLESS they were engaged which isn't mentioned. Even then it's a poor excuse---not a reason--excuse.
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Anonymous07/16/04
What kind of ending is this.
What kind of ending is this? Where is the part where he finally gets loose, beats the fuck out of Ramone, and throws her ass out of the house.
Or else he becomes a wimp cuckold and the story would really suck.
Two wrongs don't make a right, dude. (An axiom which needs a little more exposure on this site o be fair.) I liked the writing. It was very erotic in places and I did get a woody here and there. But, you really need to work on plot and plausibility. Man, talk about lame ass endings!
If he has one ounce of pride or self-worth when he gets loose he'll just shoot the bitch and good old Rrrrramone for good measure. Divorce, he'll pay for financially for the rest of his life but I doubt that with a good attorney after the bit about being tied and tormented comes out in open court any reasonable jury in the world would convict him! Talk about "temporary insanity"!
I swear on all that is good in the world, I would chase down this bitch like Ahab after Mody Dick and then she would really know what "revenge" is.
What a bummer! If she was all so vindictive to her husband, why didn't she beg Ramone to knock her up and threaten her husband that Ramone would testify in court in a lie before the paternity judge that he saw her husband knock her up?
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Anonymous01/10/05
Just bringing Don back to reality
Yo, Don. Ever hear of paternity testing? In the real world there is something called DNA. Some judge is going to listen to Ramone testify that he 'saw' the husband 'knock up' the wife? And use that to rule on paternity? What universe do you inhabit? None that I know of. Your pregnancy fetish has turned into a mania.
Normally I don't like the whole cuckold thing, just seems so contrary to the point of being married at all. But this was really really hot! I love Damon's stories, they're so flat out dirty! Which is the whole point of it, raw, visceral lust. For those who are all upset about it, lighten up, it's just a story. A very dirty, nasty, raw story! Yum!
Keep up the good work, your work inspires me to try writing more myself. :)
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Anonymous11/20/05
Sooner or later.
She is going to have to return and untie hubby. After enough time had passed that bitch would most surly be aching and not from sex. Shortly after that she would be a single woman again and could then continue her liaison with Ramone and find out what it's like to live with a real son of a bitch.
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01/03/06
There was no real rationale...
for what she did - and that was totally over the top! Either he's out of there (violently?) of he has a free ticket to do anything he wants anytime... including returning the favor!
Wow that made me hot! I would love to do that if my husband were crazy enough to cheat on me! Damon's stories suck you right in, every time. they're great.
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Anonymous02/04/08
Writing was good but...
Plot needs work, because how it is written it makes not sense. If you went and said it happened right before the engagement, or it was her sister, or best friend or what not maybe I could see this. All we got though was you cheated before our marriage and now I am going to humiliate you. Great writing though and it was hot.
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Anonymous03/03/08
Been done better before
Tolerable prose but little plot makes this just a stroke story, not an interesting work of fiction. Evidently, the wife decided that she did not wish to remain married to her husband because I cannot imagine on what basis their marriage might continue. A reasonable person would have to ask themselves, "What will she do the next time she has a bad hair day?" Stick a fork in her husband's left ear, perhaps? Or how about when her menstrual cramps are really, really bad? Get a 9mm and shoot him in the balls for thinking about jacking off in the shower? Her character is psychotic, and a reasonable man would put as much distance between them as possible on his way to the attorney's office. We can only hope that he had the foresight to get a pre-nup. In any case, since the marriage is only a few weeks, there will be no alimony and no child support, just a blessed parting of the ways.
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Anonymous08/27/08
practiced plot
revenge up close and personal
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Anonymous03/26/09
NOW HE KNOWS
Nows he knows what a slut she is he can get on with his life and meet someone special.
He had sex with a friend of hers before they were engaged? What a dastardly deed! How dare he not save himself for her!
I assume that since she did not know about it until recently it was private and he did not boast or flaunt it...unlike what she did. This was WAY over the top. She drugs him, ties him up, wears her honeymoon ensemble, and the taunts him as she has sex in front of him - just weeks after the honeymoon?
Thank heavens he is only a few weeks into this marriage and that she has revealed herself to be seriously deranged. This is when she is supposed to love him the most! Imagine what she would do in a few years if she found out about the other girls he had sex with before he met her!
Over the top revenge deserves a like response. Hire her out for a gang bang and then kick her sorry ass all over the place. Ship her to Mexico and sell her off.
Thanks anonymous. I always appreciate feedback. I think your keyboard may be missing the punctuation keys though.
I know you're probably upset the story didn't end with the husband getting revenge, beating her, selling her as a prostitute etc, etc. Maybe one of you ranting lunatics should write a story like that so you can stop bitching about every cheating wife story that you read.
Thanks for reading. A pleasure as always.
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Anonymous07/20/10
YOUR STORY DID NOT INCLUDE HIS REVENGE.....HIS CHEATING WAS NOT CHEATING
AS IT HAPPENED BEFORE HIS MARRIAGE. DUMP DANIELE AND FIND RAMONE
AND SEE IF HE IS MARRIED
GET YOUR MARRIAGE ANNULLED
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Anonymous10/28/10
I think Danielle might be a little nuts because he didn't even cheat on her. But she screws some random guy in front of him and then walks off? Doesn't make much sense.
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Anonymous12/25/10
What a mindless perverted shit story by a feeblemindet "author"
He should go back to his day job cleaning toilets !!!
Afterall, she is a slut. Good thing he found out sooner than later.
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Anonymous09/13/11
slutwife
as a story not bad but as he didn't fuck the other lady while he was married he didn't cheat on his wife. having her leave him like that makes you want to know what happened next
neads a part 2 do find out what he did to them
Here is a quote from your story...."I knew he was emptying his load inside my wife's unprotected pussy.
"Ohhhh," Danielle moaned. "I can feel his hot cum spurting inside me. He's cumming inside your fucking wife asshole!" "
Well which is it? Is he cumming in her butt or pussy?
Plus another story with no real ending.
You just couldn't finish could you. He "cheated" before the were engaged. He had been a "good husband" ever since. You wrote the story of a cheating wife who created an excuse to humiliate the man that cared for her and took care of her. You, sir, should realize that an author's stories come from his/her own mind. Is this how you treat someone who loves you? A finish with further reasoning seem eminently and obviously appropriate!
Beyond credibility. The whole thing just feels...unclean.
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Anonymous11/23/12
Good she has all the training she will need
After the divorce and jail time for drugging and imprisoning him she can walk the streets to make money.
Any man that would take her back is a suicidal WACC. One that one other person could respect. It is not even established that they were committed to being exclusive at that time. No she is a whacked out nut case that needs to rapidly become someone else's problem.
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Anonymous02/02/13
Great
Better than five. Love it.
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Anonymous02/02/13
Pile of crap!
Same old tired plot and really awful narrative--go back to writing on bathroom walls.
Wife got revenge for something she should not have but he is well rid of this bitch. What if this had happened after they had kids. You should have finished it where he got back at her etc. I gave you a good rating because you deserve it for trying but you really did NOT deserve it, I am just a nice guy. I will check on your other stories (if you have any) and if you leave another like this I will never read you again.
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Anonymous06/08/13
F..k You
This guy wasn't going to stand for this and you had us read a lot of pain for him and then she left him. You're a sick SOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
You needed to finish this, he is lucky he found her out early in the game and yes, we noticed, he screwed her GF long before they were married.
I would still find Ramone and give him ruined nuts and I'd find some way to humiliate and destroy the sluts reputation with her friends, family and co-workers!
Obviously, I'm pissed - what a waste you are!!!!!!!!!!!
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Anonymous06/10/13
WAIT A DAMN MINUTE!
That's it? That's your ending? What a pile of crap. DON'T READ THIS STORY IT'S NOT FINISHED! Not only do I think she was wrong in what she did, the way you left it begs the question - Was she leaving temporarily to fuck Ramone, then come back and release him? Or was she leaving him permanently? In which case did she tell someone to release him or did she leave him there to die? IDIOT WRITER!
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Anonymous06/18/13
Didn't bother reading this garbage- thanks to commentators insights.
Someone should put this bitch & the author out the gene pool.
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Anonymous07/16/13
UNFINISHED STORY! DO NOT READ!
Damn I hate authors that don't finish their work.
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Anonymous08/06/13
Brilliant Story - Brilliant Ending!
It's great to read such a well crafted story. I do not understand recent comments complaining that it is unfinished. It has a beautiful ending with just the right note of suspense. Many commentators obviously lack the immagination to write but it is a shame so many also lack the immagination to read! 5 Stars.
The premise is very weak...Hubby has a tryst with a friend or acquaintance of Sweetie BEFORE the engagement. Sweetie finds out after the honeymoon, so Michelle was probably 'worst rival' - so Sweetie decides to 'get even' in kind!
This would NEVER pass muster in any court or even with objective pals, but Sweetie is NOT putting it up to arbitration!
It is a great tale of pulling Hubby's chain and rubbing his nose in a bushel of shit! Emasculation City! Sweetie manages her Bull very adroitly to really punish her new Hubby. It seems clear that she is willing to either lose her Hubby, or convert him into a massive cuckold wimp! No one could possibly undertake such action and expect any outcomes other than those two. The reader is given ample insight into Hubby's internal reactions to know it will be 'sayonara!' as soon as he can escape or is released! The latter is NOT likely to be granted by Sweetie's hands!
HE sleeps with a women BEFORE their engagement and she's upset? Was she expecting him to be a virgin? This just makes no sense. But her revenge is clear. Over the top but clear. And then the story ends. With nothing resolved. It's not really a story if it doesn't have an end.
Any guy with balls would be locating his ball bat or pistol after this bullshit and ending the little games for this whore and her douchbag lover!!!
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Anonymous12/01/13
That's It?
You are kidding me. How can you consider this a complete story? Revenge I can understand but you don't adequately explain what happened or the aftermath of this single page. Hopefully he divorced and left the skank.
English
SLUT!
Let's hope she just keeps going and a friend finds him and releases him. Divorce court here we come.
Ridiculous excuse to fuck someone right in front of him, like that's the end of it. What goes before their marriage has nothing to do with her--none of her business UNLESS they were engaged which isn't mentioned. Even then it's a poor excuse---not a reason--excuse.
What kind of ending is this.
What kind of ending is this? Where is the part where he finally gets loose, beats the fuck out of Ramone, and throws her ass out of the house.
Or else he becomes a wimp cuckold and the story would really suck.
Good Writing. But man, talk about disfunctional!
Two wrongs don't make a right, dude. (An axiom which needs a little more exposure on this site o be fair.) I liked the writing. It was very erotic in places and I did get a woody here and there. But, you really need to work on plot and plausibility. Man, talk about lame ass endings!
If he has one ounce of pride or self-worth when he gets loose he'll just shoot the bitch and good old Rrrrramone for good measure. Divorce, he'll pay for financially for the rest of his life but I doubt that with a good attorney after the bit about being tied and tormented comes out in open court any reasonable jury in the world would convict him! Talk about "temporary insanity"!
I swear on all that is good in the world, I would chase down this bitch like Ahab after Mody Dick and then she would really know what "revenge" is.
Sheeeee-ittttt!
What a bummer! If she was all so vindictive to her husband, why didn't she beg Ramone to knock her up and threaten her husband that Ramone would testify in court in a lie before the paternity judge that he saw her husband knock her up?
Just bringing Don back to reality
Yo, Don. Ever hear of paternity testing? In the real world there is something called DNA. Some judge is going to listen to Ramone testify that he 'saw' the husband 'knock up' the wife? And use that to rule on paternity? What universe do you inhabit? None that I know of. Your pregnancy fetish has turned into a mania.
That was hot!
Normally I don't like the whole cuckold thing, just seems so contrary to the point of being married at all. But this was really really hot! I love Damon's stories, they're so flat out dirty! Which is the whole point of it, raw, visceral lust. For those who are all upset about it, lighten up, it's just a story. A very dirty, nasty, raw story! Yum!
Keep up the good work, your work inspires me to try writing more myself. :)
Sooner or later.
She is going to have to return and untie hubby. After enough time had passed that bitch would most surly be aching and not from sex. Shortly after that she would be a single woman again and could then continue her liaison with Ramone and find out what it's like to live with a real son of a bitch.
There was no real rationale...
for what she did - and that was totally over the top! Either he's out of there (violently?) of he has a free ticket to do anything he wants anytime... including returning the favor!
I'd be inclined to the latter and then walking!
The writing was well done.
well my goodness
Wow that made me hot! I would love to do that if my husband were crazy enough to cheat on me! Damon's stories suck you right in, every time. they're great.
Writing was good but...
Plot needs work, because how it is written it makes not sense. If you went and said it happened right before the engagement, or it was her sister, or best friend or what not maybe I could see this. All we got though was you cheated before our marriage and now I am going to humiliate you. Great writing though and it was hot.
Been done better before
Tolerable prose but little plot makes this just a stroke story, not an interesting work of fiction. Evidently, the wife decided that she did not wish to remain married to her husband because I cannot imagine on what basis their marriage might continue. A reasonable person would have to ask themselves, "What will she do the next time she has a bad hair day?" Stick a fork in her husband's left ear, perhaps? Or how about when her menstrual cramps are really, really bad? Get a 9mm and shoot him in the balls for thinking about jacking off in the shower? Her character is psychotic, and a reasonable man would put as much distance between them as possible on his way to the attorney's office. We can only hope that he had the foresight to get a pre-nup. In any case, since the marriage is only a few weeks, there will be no alimony and no child support, just a blessed parting of the ways.
practiced plot
revenge up close and personal
NOW HE KNOWS
Nows he knows what a slut she is he can get on with his life and meet someone special.
Whoa???!
He had sex with a friend of hers before they were engaged? What a dastardly deed! How dare he not save himself for her!
I assume that since she did not know about it until recently it was private and he did not boast or flaunt it...unlike what she did. This was WAY over the top. She drugs him, ties him up, wears her honeymoon ensemble, and the taunts him as she has sex in front of him - just weeks after the honeymoon?
Thank heavens he is only a few weeks into this marriage and that she has revealed herself to be seriously deranged. This is when she is supposed to love him the most! Imagine what she would do in a few years if she found out about the other girls he had sex with before he met her!
But thanks for sharing.
Dead woman walking
Over the top revenge deserves a like response. Hire her out for a gang bang and then kick her sorry ass all over the place. Ship her to Mexico and sell her off.
There is only one cheater
The Bitch
Thanks
Thanks anonymous. I always appreciate feedback. I think your keyboard may be missing the punctuation keys though.
I know you're probably upset the story didn't end with the husband getting revenge, beating her, selling her as a prostitute etc, etc. Maybe one of you ranting lunatics should write a story like that so you can stop bitching about every cheating wife story that you read.
Thanks for reading. A pleasure as always.
YOUR STORY DID NOT INCLUDE HIS REVENGE.....HIS CHEATING WAS NOT CHEATING
AS IT HAPPENED BEFORE HIS MARRIAGE. DUMP DANIELE AND FIND RAMONE
AND SEE IF HE IS MARRIED
GET YOUR MARRIAGE ANNULLED
I think Danielle might be a little nuts because he didn't even cheat on her. But she screws some random guy in front of him and then walks off? Doesn't make much sense.
What a mindless perverted shit story by a feeblemindet "author"
He should go back to his day job cleaning toilets !!!
1*
Finish It
She went out with her new lover - The Pimp!
Afterall, she is a slut. Good thing he found out sooner than later.
slutwife
as a story not bad but as he didn't fuck the other lady while he was married he didn't cheat on his wife. having her leave him like that makes you want to know what happened next
neads a part 2 do find out what he did to them
Agree with DWornock
Again. What does that tell you about this dreck?
A really stupid story. Copies other LW stories of same ilk.
Not worth the reading. As on other stories, comes from nowhere, goes nowhere.
WAIT TILL I'M RELEASED
and then Dani girl, its my turn, TK U MLJ LV NV
Attention to detail......
Here is a quote from your story...."I knew he was emptying his load inside my wife's unprotected pussy.
"Ohhhh," Danielle moaned. "I can feel his hot cum spurting inside me. He's cumming inside your fucking wife asshole!" "
Well which is it? Is he cumming in her butt or pussy?
Plus another story with no real ending.
Stupid
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Unbelievable 1*
It's a 1 unless there is some type of sequel. Revenge, payback, divorce, something??
Right now it's a stupid story.
Why do you always stop and leave your stories incomplete?
Rating would be 5 if there were a proper ending
just sad
You just couldn't finish could you. He "cheated" before the were engaged. He had been a "good husband" ever since. You wrote the story of a cheating wife who created an excuse to humiliate the man that cared for her and took care of her. You, sir, should realize that an author's stories come from his/her own mind. Is this how you treat someone who loves you? A finish with further reasoning seem eminently and obviously appropriate!
O*
Beyond credibility. The whole thing just feels...unclean.
Good she has all the training she will need
After the divorce and jail time for drugging and imprisoning him she can walk the streets to make money.
Any man that would take her back is a suicidal WACC. One that one other person could respect. It is not even established that they were committed to being exclusive at that time. No she is a whacked out nut case that needs to rapidly become someone else's problem.
Great
Better than five. Love it.
Pile of crap!
Same old tired plot and really awful narrative--go back to writing on bathroom walls.
Fucking Disgusting
And incomplete. This tale needs to continue.
And And And????
So I gave this silly story a "1" since you didn't finish the story. Nothing worse than reading along and then falling of the cliff of "What happened?"
You forgot to end the story
Oh, I suppose it is implied that he dumps the wife; no, I guess she dumped him already. Newlywed? bah.
i see no revenge. what i see is the death of a marriage.
Incomplete, no revenge.
Wife got revenge for something she should not have but he is well rid of this bitch. What if this had happened after they had kids. You should have finished it where he got back at her etc. I gave you a good rating because you deserve it for trying but you really did NOT deserve it, I am just a nice guy. I will check on your other stories (if you have any) and if you leave another like this I will never read you again.
F..k You
This guy wasn't going to stand for this and you had us read a lot of pain for him and then she left him. You're a sick SOB!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
You needed to finish this, he is lucky he found her out early in the game and yes, we noticed, he screwed her GF long before they were married.
I would still find Ramone and give him ruined nuts and I'd find some way to humiliate and destroy the sluts reputation with her friends, family and co-workers!
Obviously, I'm pissed - what a waste you are!!!!!!!!!!!
WAIT A DAMN MINUTE!
That's it? That's your ending? What a pile of crap. DON'T READ THIS STORY IT'S NOT FINISHED! Not only do I think she was wrong in what she did, the way you left it begs the question - Was she leaving temporarily to fuck Ramone, then come back and release him? Or was she leaving him permanently? In which case did she tell someone to release him or did she leave him there to die? IDIOT WRITER!
Didn't bother reading this garbage- thanks to commentators insights.
Someone should put this bitch & the author out the gene pool.
UNFINISHED STORY! DO NOT READ!
Damn I hate authors that don't finish their work.
Brilliant Story - Brilliant Ending!
It's great to read such a well crafted story. I do not understand recent comments complaining that it is unfinished. It has a beautiful ending with just the right note of suspense. Many commentators obviously lack the immagination to write but it is a shame so many also lack the immagination to read! 5 Stars.
Horrible
Damn this tale needs a sequel.
Hmmm....
Good as a Hubby taunt tale
The premise is very weak...Hubby has a tryst with a friend or acquaintance of Sweetie BEFORE the engagement. Sweetie finds out after the honeymoon, so Michelle was probably 'worst rival' - so Sweetie decides to 'get even' in kind!
This would NEVER pass muster in any court or even with objective pals, but Sweetie is NOT putting it up to arbitration!
It is a great tale of pulling Hubby's chain and rubbing his nose in a bushel of shit! Emasculation City! Sweetie manages her Bull very adroitly to really punish her new Hubby. It seems clear that she is willing to either lose her Hubby, or convert him into a massive cuckold wimp! No one could possibly undertake such action and expect any outcomes other than those two. The reader is given ample insight into Hubby's internal reactions to know it will be 'sayonara!' as soon as he can escape or is released! The latter is NOT likely to be granted by Sweetie's hands!
What was this???
HE sleeps with a women BEFORE their engagement and she's upset? Was she expecting him to be a virgin? This just makes no sense. But her revenge is clear. Over the top but clear. And then the story ends. With nothing resolved. It's not really a story if it doesn't have an end.
You are a sick fuck if this turns you on!!!
Any guy with balls would be locating his ball bat or pistol after this bullshit and ending the little games for this whore and her douchbag lover!!!
That's It?
You are kidding me. How can you consider this a complete story? Revenge I can understand but you don't adequately explain what happened or the aftermath of this single page. Hopefully he divorced and left the skank.
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