by Etaski
I wish I could go back in time and have my 5 mins back. Ugh ugh ugh. Couldn't be much worse.
This story was just lacking. Seeing as how the author has some other pretty good ones in other genres, maybe erotic horror is not this authors cup of tea...or maybe this story was just a dud.
Cool, thanks for your comments, you three. I love the fact that the reactions ran the gamut here.
I always appreciate a kind word; thanks, Sideway52. (And I'm glad you found it creepy.)
Gorkon, I'd love to hear why it's a "meh" for you, and what you feel it's lacking. I'll probably pm you. :)
And dear Anon: Too late! Those 5 minutes are mine! All mine! Muah-ha-ha-haaaaa! ^.^
And yes, actually, it could be much worse. In many ways.
But, hey, silver lining: At least you got past the 2nd-person delivery to get to the creepiness. :) Nice job.
I like the second person in this and the first person in Sisterhood. Most stories here are 3rd person so it is a nice change of pace. Also, I absolutely love your work, thanks. :)
The perspective in this one makes it hard to stomache, as scenes that involve force and non consent aren't a flavor I personally enjoy. However, your writing is descriptive and engaging even when I hate what I'm reading, I can't help but enjoy your narration.
I think I need a hug after this head trip.
You're a brilliant writer Etaski.