The Road to Hell

LOVED IT!

Always like the stories from your pen

If you are writing these stories to please yourself ; congrats ! However ...

your stories are presented in black & white. No shades of grey - I get in this world there are hard-working husbands who get f--ed over by grasping wives & this ass- backwards legal system .

You lost me with the kids being swine & trading up in tandem with their mother. If the father has a real connection to his children - when the parents split up there's going to be mega-angst all around.

When a child turns their back on a parent : their either Damien ( The Omen ) spawn or that parent is a asshole. Too bad because there was a great premise to be had here .

Well, as fantisy, no problem

However, children cannot make life decisions for themselves. To blame them for hurtful things they said is wrong. Like a teenager declaring they hate you. Well they do at that moment, but a day later?

Vengeance is fine, but you have a lot of collateral damage. Other commenter is right. The characters are too black and white. More nuance would be good.

Chilley

Classic HUEDOGG

Huedogg2's version of a cheating wife story is classic. I love your no-compromise philosophy. I still enjoy your comments more than your stories, but the revenge fantasy's you write are entertaining as well.
I prefer stories with more emotion and nuance, but yours are fun. I actually think your writing is getting better. Still, it is too abrupt, and too mechanical in style to really flow.
Also, the characters come off as wooden and two-dimensional (at best).
Finally, how could a husband be so clueless that he doesn't know his wife is cheating on him for months (at least), and that his children have grown to accept and prefer this other man (secretly) to the point of having nothing but disdain for their own father? This requires too much suspension of disbelief. Nevertheless, as a fantasy of uncompromising, black-and-white morality, it is fun to read.

Agree w slam

Of course no reasonable thinking person would hold it against your character for not taking back the family that abandons him (which of corse leaves out a big chunk of the people who read this site). Its just more evidence of how fucked up our ideas of what being a man is all about to read something like this and for you to write it. My grandmother used to say theres two sides to every story and then the truth. What kind of colassal failure as a parent he'd have to be to raise children like this. Greedy mercenary jr sociopaths hell I've seen more caring attitudes towards sperm donars.
I know this is fiction, pure fantasy, however its a shame this could have been a good story instead of some over the top chest beating rant.

Racoon1174

Good Intentions are Overrated

Nice to see Joy come back under Billy's roof and for him to make peace with his parents. His father must have felt like a real hypocrite.

Your writing is getting better and as you continue..........I hope to see your revenge getting more subtle which will make it all the more fiendish.

Enjoyed your story.......5*****

Black and White

Obviously, black and white stories aren't realistic -- but that's the point here! It's fantasy writing -- and it feels good to read a story where good prevails, evil pays. I can't get that in real life, that's why I read it here. It's also why I don't care for the awful stories where the good guy is totally screwed over. I get enough of that in the real world, lol. Well done Huedogg2.

Good Read

I kike the reactions. I mean when a wife walks out the way she did, there is no going back. Karma can be a bitch

No forgiveness required

If people turn against you, you have every right to protect yourself. Bill took no destructive actions against his ex and her kids, he simply walked away, EXACTLY as they wanted him to do.

The characters of his kids and his parents are unrealistic. All other signs show that Bill is a really good person. He is successful in business and his new family loves him. The fault does NOT lie with him. It is unlikely that his kids and parents are all so against him but that is how they are presented. The boys end up in prison, that indicates they are not good people. His daughter does turn around and he accepts her back. His parents make something of a turn around as well but not completely, so he deals with them cautiously. Casey is completely unrepentant and receives harsh justice but Bill didn't have anything to do with it. Casey was destroyed by her own actions.

Forgiveness is all well and good but it requires the person that transgressed to be repentant and change their behavior. If they won't, they are not due any forgiveness. People who accept people that continue to behave badly are idiots and enablers.

Unfortunately this scenario is often played out in life.....

Obviously, the only regret would be the children and his parents but they did decide to head down the road on their own. I hear people want ice water there also. Great story.

Good story.

pour that gasoline

I loved the literal burning of the cunt whore bitch! Another great Huedogg story! Casey and her young wastes of space should have been tied to a tree and burned. 5*

Not!

This one I did not like at all. Waiting for your next one. Thanks for sharing.

Loved It!

No need for revenge. Just cut your losses and walk away. Thanks for the story.

Not a bad fantasy

Thanks for sharing

Well done story

but an unbelievably bad villainess. Truly amazing, no redeeming qualities, full of evil... But then this is only through his eyes. Can we believe him?

Furthermore, I do not see how we can let him of the hook with respect to the children. Either he ignored them since they were born, or he contributed to their makeup and his problems with them.

Thought provoking morality play! Thanks.

Good one

The wife alienated the kids. It had probably been happening for years. It also shows how kids turn out with bad supervision and role models. I have a cousin who had custody of his daughter. The mother paid child support. Somehow the twelve year old got the idea that the money was hers and her father was holding out on her. They have a nice house and she had everything she needed except for the latest and greatest phone and other trinkets. She decided to move in with her mother who did not really want her anyway. The child support was reversed. It was less than a week when she discovered that her mother wasn't going to give her any money either and she wanted to move back with dear old dad. Not happening. The way and quickness that she threw away his love for money has forever changed the man. She has not talked to him since he refused. I think the kid has shown her true character at a young age. I think you are getting better Hue, your stories are always to the point.

NO MATTER THE ROAD

theres alway speed bumps and pot holes. TK U MLJ LV NV

A lot of hate in this story

A short and quick story with almost too much bad things going on.

My beleive

Live and let live, if my own family is againts me, just walk away.

Amazing

How many women try to arrange other women being raped? Truly stupendous.

I shouldn't ding you because a lot of other authors use this trope to paint the person as evil as humanly possible. But I don't buy it.

Kids smirking at losing their dad? Really? Moms allowing the kids to flip the bird?

There is a story here. Why did you need to dial up their evil to 11?

Still, keep writing.

Burning the bich, literally?

I guess that's giving your readers what they want.

My view of what a realistic story is--and isn't.

Often critics of a story say it isn't realistic. What they mean is not that the plot isn't realistic. Most times plots aren't. What they mean is the characters in the story aren't real. Take the movie Ground Hog Day. The plot is totally unrealistic. The main character relives February 2nd over and over again. But, given that the movie is a comedy, the characters and the dialogue are real. This story is the opposite. The plot is ordinary--hard working husband is betrayed by wife and the kids. However what 10 year old smirks at his father? What 7 year old flips her dad the bird? What wife would let her kids become close to her lover? You don't think that one of the kids might say something to dear old dad? And finally what court would overturn an adoption decree after 7 years essentially making the kids fatherless?

That's why Ground Hog Day is realistic and this story isn't.

So much hate

But you know what; hate is just a part of life. This guy dealt with evil as best as he could without resorting to violence or betraying himself. Very consistent.

Tremendous

Just when you think the cucks of the world are starting to take over, here comes Billy, the ultimate male who takes the loss of his cheating whore wife, disrespectful kids and brainwashed parents and makes a tremendous life for himself and his new found loving family while exacting revenge on everyone who turned on him. I have to hand it to you Huedogg2, you hate cucks and wimps as much as I do and are a great writer to boot.

All cheating wives should meet the same fate as the whore in this tale. Great work.

Writing is Good

I wanted to give the story 4stars, it is startling and vengeful, and yet very understandable. The starkness of allowing young children to make such decisions is my main problem with this story. A wife is one thing to throw away for such behavior, but never children. Keep writing and the stories coming I am a long time reader on here so will keep watching your offerings, and say thank you very much....

Another one bites the big one

Ok, so I read one of your stories prior to this one. It was just so poor on so many levels I figured you let that one out of the coop before it was really ready- pushed the wrong send button or something. I expected a guy wearing a bad Godzilla suit to jump out at me. After a while and just before I gave up I was actually longing for that to happen just to give me some relief from the awful, awful wrting style. There are many good writers on this site that deserve emulation. Why the heck are you emulating the bad ones? No more of your stories for me. To many good authors out there.

Love your story.... Hate your grammar

I absolutely love love love your story .. I just wish it was a little longer.. I found myself having to re-read certain parts because of either your grammar or spelling but that was the only things that was wrong... I love stories where the wife leaves & turn the children against their dad and when things don't work out she wants to come back.. This is my 5th time reading this particular story... Please wrote more like this... I love the pure hate! The guy didn't even need to have revenge, the best revenge is living life...... I hate when the men go out & get totally blitz over some gutter trash that's not even worth a damage liver.... The kids picked the lovers side fuck them too... I can't believe the parents in this story they actually chose the slut over their own kid yeah fuck'em too.. Please write more

Doctor Billy

If Billy is a CPA before the fateful D-Day, getting two Business School graduate degrees after that would be mostly a waste of effort (and about four years) towards establishing and building his practice!
Too many crucial parts of this tale just jump up out of nowhere when handy. Billy's mouthpiece is clairvoyant enough to tape the seven-year divorced wife and HER lawyer as they discuss highly incriminating issues in a public location (WTF kinda lawyer is THAT?) Besides, I thought LoverBoy got the adoptions 'annulled' so his money would not be compromised.
The kids have been taken to her paramour's bigger (better in houses, I'm sure) abode enough that they are comfortable in moving there (but haven't mentioned this neat place to Billy)? ("Please,, kids, don't mention the heated pool or the stables and horses to Daddy. We'll surprise him later!"). Frankly, most wives like this would not bring their kids anywhere near the paramour EVER ... They would leave the rug-rats with Hubby! (Even if one or more were really LoverBoy's)

PICK YOUR FIGHTS

and your nose, get rid of the itchy boogers. TK U MLJ LV NV

most excellent

gave u a 5. short almost a flash story. once you get married you are not supposed to have to fight for your mate again and again.

First Rate!

Just hope all husbands have this moment of clarity not after but before they marry skunks like this one and not after being discarded as used candom as this guy.
Following being royally fucked he made all the right decisions.
It is understandable that when you are young, you overlook a lot of negative qualities in yr potencial spouse .
The problem lies with our education: we are schooled in math, chemistry, etc. but we are not trained in the most important skill, i.e. how to identify and choose yr life mate.

Second Comment

The best part of this tale is that the wronged husband didn't have to do anything to get his revenge. It happened on its own. Once a cheater, always a cheater. In this case the ex-wife got burned in the end. Literally!

HA

Some things aren't worth fighting over.

And some fights can't be won.

Good story, right on, and write on...

i probably said it before

i probably said it before but dog you are goooood! 5

What a story

When you are faced with a problem such as his first wife did you have little choice.
He did the only option that he had and went on with his life. He did tell of all the hurt and pain that he went through everyday untill he found someone who truely loved him. A wife like the first one would make you hate all women he was just luck to find someone to take the pain of the first marrage away. The second women deserves a lot of credit to deal with the left over pain and distrust that the first wife left behind. Its sad to see kids caught up in a divorce. At least his daughter figured out how wrong that all this in her life was going and asked dad to forgive her. as for his sons he should place the money from his parents into a trust fund for them. A trust fund for there retirement and only then as a monthly check no lump sum because I don't think they will know how to take care of it. They will think they are being punished but it would be the most loving thing that he could do for them.

...CAN NEVER FIGHT FOR SOMEONE/THING IF THEY/IT ARE/IS FIGHTING AGAINST YOU

..... no matter how sugar coated....bad will never be good/ a loss will never be a win....a compromise is always a recipe to allow resentments to fester or time to allow the schemer to regroup.....
...nah the guy reacted right by starting afresh....afresh means cutting all old ties and if any are to be re-admitted then only so on merit....
p.s I'd be hard pressed to forgive parents who would rather I choose a family that chose not to love me over one that chooses to love me

Only Smart Move

Cheaters are deceitful liars. They are more than just bad people, they are mentally ill people. Unfortunately while some people can overcome their illness, most can't. Stay away from them, unless you want to share their misery. Fuck that!

We miss The Big Dogg.

You REALLY need to write more, brother! Still waiting on the "Fuck a Tie, Win at all Costs!" conclusion!

As I learned the hard way -

There is no point in fighting to keep something that is not yours to start with - you just lose teeth to go along with what ever it was you never had.

You fight to preserve or protect something of value that can be saved - there was nothing there that was his or of value -

Harsh yep - wrong - hhmmm nope I don't think so.

He has done nothing wrong...

Casey and her kids got as deserved.Had Billy actually given the warped ideas his parents had a second thought - I would have teared up that story. 4* Well done.

Great story could've been longer.

You high lighted all the things that a despicable character in the first wife was all about. It doesn't get better than this. The progression from the lead character's fall til he became successful was rushed. The Phoenix climbing from the ashes of despair is the whole point in this story. The drama of this evolution is the winning point that needs more focus. Your story was magnificent. Thank you!

I always

enjoy a good BURN THE BITCH story. Ha-Ha- Ha

Short Sharp and BTB

Like it but boy your families are from hell. 5*

The bitch got burnt , literally !
I love it !

Huedogg is one of the best BTB writer on this site

A galaxy of stars

You can't fight for someting

when what you are fighting for is fighting against you too. It is a losing battle. Cut your losses and run.

Good job on the writing.

Fight for what?

He, would have fought for what? She and their children made the choice, so he had only to find a new life and be happy...All the others had to live with the consequences of the wrong choices they had made."

it is hard to criticise someone for making the wrong choice

when they aren't offered options. a choice of one isn't a choice.

TOUGH LOVE CAN BE A BITCH

especially when it turns and bites. TK U MLJ LV NV

Shame on the parents

The parents were sorry excuses. They knew who and what their son was and they threw him out of the house telling him to divorce the second wife ? Insane is what it is. After it is all said and done they stood with the ex when she publicly lied about him being a deadbeat dad? And then want to meet his new children? He should have just told them to fuck off..