All Comments on 'Police Work'

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AnonymousAnonymousover 12 years ago
Arrested development

Plotwise this is fine, but the first half is very rushed and reads more like a synopsis.

Better just to start when she comes home and simply relates the incident. Also the charachters were fairly weak and the dialogue not very convincing. The sex scene was better written but could not save this underwritten story.

tazz317tazz317over 12 years ago
OH THE GAMES PEOPLE CAN PLAY

and variations on cops and robbers. TK U MLJ LV NV

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