Persoanlly, a smashing story! The only real critisism is there's just not enough! I would suggest maybe just adding more detail to what you already have, as what you do have, is a very erotic frame work. Great on its own, but bulk it out some more to really give it the edge!
English
Dirty, but how dirty?
Persoanlly, a smashing story! The only real critisism is there's just not enough! I would suggest maybe just adding more detail to what you already have, as what you do have, is a very erotic frame work. Great on its own, but bulk it out some more to really give it the edge!
Regards,
The Doughboy
praise
very very good :-)
everyone wants more!
love your stories only just discovered them they get me so horny but i am always left wanting more!! that frustrates me.x
Great job :)
Great job here!! I enjoyed this story immensely
So wet
fucking hot. got me off soooo good
I like the way you think!
Good job, I like the way you think!
excellent
loved it,horny as hell
Nice...
... but I have to agree with Doughboy, more detail.
Need more!!
a great story, very hot. needs much followup.
Click here to leave your own comment on this submission! or
Back to Dirty Girl or
More submissions by damonX.