You caught me by surprise at the end! They were nice people and the read was fun.
I can see how the style could get tiring but for the dose was fine...
but I needed to set it aside for a while due to other obligations. I am not as happy with the second chapter as I want to be and expect to make some changes before I submit it, if I decide to.
I have a few ideas to add some spice to it but have not had the opportunity to properly think the ideas through to my satisfaction.
If I do not like the the second chapter it will not be released.
PTBzzzz
I had a family situation that took me away from the story and I have not gotten the urge to complete it back.
If I get my head out of mine arse I will try again.
English
So Far SO Good
I like the story but feel there is a OMG or something else coming...
Does he have a WIFE or KIDS or ??? Hummmmmm
Keep us up to date,,, One of the best LW stories that did not have cheating!!! (Or is that coming??) O yes, Sorry this is a romance story...
Do the bad guys come back???
The story line is okay
But I really don't like the I/you narrative.
Great little story
You caught me by surprise at the end! They were nice people and the read was fun.
I can see how the style could get tiring but for the dose was fine...
I have written a good bit of a second chapter
but I needed to set it aside for a while due to other obligations. I am not as happy with the second chapter as I want to be and expect to make some changes before I submit it, if I decide to.
I have a few ideas to add some spice to it but have not had the opportunity to properly think the ideas through to my satisfaction.
If I do not like the the second chapter it will not be released.
PTBzzzz
Interesting twist at the end
I did not see that one coming. I like this story so far. Hope PT can get the time to add the next chapter.
brilliant twist
i had a feeling she was the daughter of both of em cause the ages matched up. bloody brilliant so far though can't wait to read more.
Not happy with the second chapter
I had a family situation that took me away from the story and I have not gotten the urge to complete it back.
If I get my head out of mine arse I will try again.
Even the second time around
Did not see that ending coming. Clever!
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