All Comments on 'January Three'

I have enjoyed your poetry. I loved this one because it had an element of String Theory attached to it. I do have one question, in line 11, are you certain about the word "proceeded?" It somehow feels wrong...anyway, I think you could have ended the poem with the line that blew me away---

"Does anyone really know what time it is?"

Now that is a profound question and it earned a spot on my favorites list. Really good work, just needs some tightening up.

I'd love to read more poetry from you along this line of thought.

~ maria

you are certainly correct, preceded not proceeded ... --- gotta talk to my editor!

J

But I agree with the previous comment - the "Does anyone really know what time it is" line hits hard, and should be showcased somehow. Enjoyed this.

they need a compass. TK U MLJ LV NV