by woodmanone
Reading this, I felt like I was watching something I did not understand. I was not a part of it, yet it seemed I should be. I was just cold and left out, unmoved.
I know that doesn't tell you anything, but I felt I should have been pulled into the story and I wasn't.
WMO, I look forward to reading your stories when they come up because they are so well written. But the plot of this one just left me, er cold.
A very different side of you wooodman. I could feel his pain and sadness at loosing his loved one. It was very well written and to the point. Keep up the great work and thanks for sharing with us
....but I cleaned up,ate, and drove to the bar and cemetery......got a couple of offers of
comfort but turned them down.
Another good read Woodman. So sad. Why wow, because it struck so close to home. At least here it would be fast. Forcast high today is -21C (-6F). And from The Gladiator "but not yet". Thanks for the read. Jim
So well done that any description I could give it would not be adequate.
Man you sure the consument writer. This story was unbelieveably strong.
So clever and so heartwarming...I am so glad I fell for it hook line and sinker. Thank you woodmanone.
One can feel the guys emotion, a tremendous short story, short but enough, more would be superfluous
One can only hope that he found warmth in the hereafter. It was so powerful, this old war dog got tears. Sometimes stories don't need a rating, but I gave it a "5" just to put in my two cents. KISS (Keep It Simple Stupid) is something I don't tell myself often enough.
A broken heart is a real tragedy for one to bear. Some just give up. Raise your glass to those who survive and pray for those who don't.
But DAMN man - if you are thinking of her so much - think of whether or not she would be so selfish as to want you to do this??
Doubtful - take that bitter pill and heal -
here, or the other side. TK U MLJ LV NV
Tragic just plain tragic. I have read that mourning for a departed love one frequently leads to suicide by the surviving partner, or to PTSD.
Platitudes. They don't convey yet most use them endlessly.
A toast to him. Luck.
I could feel the loneliness, the emptiness, and the heartbreak. The despair and desire.
How you are able to convey so much feeling in so few words....masterful.
And I second betrayedbylove's comment. A toast and a prayer.
5 stars and favorited, most definitely.
so well written you could feel his emptiness.
You seem to have captured the emotion exactly right. The story sent a shiver down my spine. My first wife died over 37 years ago and if I let the memories surface I can still feel it like it was yesterday. A good story but painful at the same time.
No credit to the Randy Rogers Band for their song lyrics? "In My Arms Instead"
Thanks for the story.
Hillcountrycowboy
Sometimes love cuts deeply. The one we love, invest ourselves into, make a central part of our lives and share our hearts, hopes, dreams, fears, faults and souls with, become as the very breath in our lungs, the blood in our veins. When we lose that person we lose more than a spouse, we lose a very real part of ourselves and for some, for some it's just not worth carrying on without them.
RIP, Amanda Julianne Robertson.
Thank You, Woodmanone.
I can see something like this happening, and in real life actually does.
This story was like a poignant reminder of our own mortality. I can see why you would have recommended it. It's short, but still impactful.
If you're open to constructive criticism, the only thing I found distracting was not being able to figure out when he was thinking or when the story was being narrated. I think in the future it would be best to pick one, or otherwise italicize the thoughts.
Cheers,
Nora
I totally understand. That was me after my wife of 44yrs passed. Good thing that I don't drink. I was just as hopeless. I probably would have gotten ripped and died in a snowstorm. Thank you Woodmanone for such deep story. I believe that you touched many hearts and caused many wet eyes with this tale.
47years asleep in my arms at home. With a slight smile on her face;and no more pain.
Very sad, yet the smile on his face at the end, he went home. ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️
If only it was that easy to escape this mortal coil...
Still, thank you for the read.