Night Shifts Ch. 01

Interesting beginning to the story

It is an interesting beginning to the story. Is her new favorite site the cause of her transformation? Will there be further changes to her and her body?

Good Start, Needs Proofing

Good story but with a few typos and minor errors that would probably have been caught with one more proofreading pass.

The word for the area of raised skin surrounding the nipple is areola or areole. Here is the definition from http://www.thefreedictionary.com/areole:
a·re·o·la (-r-l) also ar·e·ole (âr-l)
n. pl. a·re·o·lae (-l) or a·re·o·las also ar·e·oles (-lz)
A small ring of color around a center portion, as about the nipple of the breast or the part of the iris surrounding the pupil of the eye.

You've Got Me

Now I hope you don't lose me by ending up with her becoming a stereotypical bimbo...

What a shit...