All Comments on 'Sweet Dreams'

just before sleep takes over. TK U MLJ LV NV

What a darling little poem, SINS. You did a great job of capturing a special moment between partners. Thanks for sharing. :)

Hey Bar,

Great poem, punctuated nicely...

made me smile. Oh, and what Dh said too. : )~

Austin

Great climate, nice mood.

Just one line is weak:

"To shut out the light."

for two reasons. 1. Just state things, don't explain (that "to" is the culprit). And 2. the combination of closing eyes and thus shutting the lights out is not interesting. Avoid such obvious combinations, almost repetitive.

Overall, I like your poem. As others said, it's sweet in a very nice way.

So warm and cuddly and loving. Couldn't fail to fall into contented sleep. Well done, Babs.