New to writing, are you? Short, choppy sentences with numerous grammar mistakes are a sure giveaway. Nothing that can't be fixed with hard work and careful editing. I won't comment on the story, since it IS your fantasy, but you really do need to polish your work more before submitting it. Don't give up, though! Two stories in three weeks hints that there is a bunch of sexy stuff still in that head of yours!
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Anonymous01/27/12
Keep Writing!!
I liked it!! Don't pay attention to the comments of others too much, especially if they haven't submitted anything of their own. I am waiting for chapter 2!!
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Anonymous01/27/12
*****
Awesome, just awesome! This can go far!
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Anonymous10/15/12
the mattress story was much better
It would have been way more erotic had he just secretly watched his mom & the construction worker. Many boys fantasized about their mothers or his best buddy's mother.
Aunt Beth had nothing to do with this, so poor choice of title. Also, this is partly in the wrong category, since the son sucks another guy? Gross. Put it in the gay or bi category. Better title might be "Horny Mom and Her Team-Switching Son."
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Anonymous06/01/16
Hes right its a bad name
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Anonymous09/25/16
sucks
looking for an "Aunt Nephew" story, and get some jack ass sucking off a construction worker and fucking around with his mom. Well, glad i wasn't horny or anything bc i am certainly not going to be able to get a hardon after this
English
Welllll......
New to writing, are you? Short, choppy sentences with numerous grammar mistakes are a sure giveaway. Nothing that can't be fixed with hard work and careful editing. I won't comment on the story, since it IS your fantasy, but you really do need to polish your work more before submitting it. Don't give up, though! Two stories in three weeks hints that there is a bunch of sexy stuff still in that head of yours!
Keep Writing!!
I liked it!! Don't pay attention to the comments of others too much, especially if they haven't submitted anything of their own. I am waiting for chapter 2!!
*****
Awesome, just awesome! This can go far!
the mattress story was much better
It would have been way more erotic had he just secretly watched his mom & the construction worker. Many boys fantasized about their mothers or his best buddy's mother.
Ch 2
Pls post chapter 2 ASAP I am waiting
Misnomer
Aunt Beth had nothing to do with this, so poor choice of title. Also, this is partly in the wrong category, since the son sucks another guy? Gross. Put it in the gay or bi category. Better title might be "Horny Mom and Her Team-Switching Son."
Hes right its a bad name
sucks
looking for an "Aunt Nephew" story, and get some jack ass sucking off a construction worker and fucking around with his mom. Well, glad i wasn't horny or anything bc i am certainly not going to be able to get a hardon after this
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