All Comments on 'Over a Piece of Pie'

Great story. Loved that Carson was able to be the better man and let go of his anger

Vanessa was a ho. I love pie but never tried picking a girl up with it. I gotta see if it really works

Awesome! well crafted and endearing. The conflict between Carson and Vanessa, and Carson's inner turmoil over how he's falling for Skye just dragged me in. I could just imagine him and Vanessa fucking all over the office like sex-crazed rabbits! I laughed I cried and I cheered! Two very large thumbs up!

Good work, Chiara.

Very good.

I had read your other submission before reading this one. I feel that with a little bit more imagination and craft you could have joined them more effectively. After all that is what real life is like. Ups and downs. Add more charater feelings and it would have been totally magic. Great effort and good luck. :)

from never ever, ever, to forever and ever in less than 24 hours and several pieces of pie.

I loved this story I can relate to it a lot cause this is what sort of happened to me, I meet a women who I fell for hard, then she crushed my heart then years later I met the women of my dreams.

I also would like some of that wondufull pie.