All Comments on 'St. Valentine Defeats the Wolf'

Interesting...

Everything was great until the sex scene, then it lost its realism and flow completely. What should have been a slow seduction (over a few days) and a marriage bed was instead totally unrealistic for the characters. Rewrite the end and make this a truly lovely story.

"Fuck my cunt with your hard cock!" In ancient Rome? I'm afraid the dialog, as well as the editing, left much to be desired.

Even without the sex it was good until the sex scene. I agree with Cat, the dialogue for the sex made it completely unrealistic and unenjoyable. Disappointing

I agree with previous commenters that the sex scene needs some work. Suddenly Lavinia is acting like a very experienced woman. I dont have a problem with them throwing themselves at each other they have had a near death experience and hormones are running crazy but she should be a bit less skilled, maybe even worried about being able to please him. Also she doesnt seem to be the sort of woman who would suddenly turn into a potty-mouth out of the blue. 4 stars.

I'm not sure I agree with PrincessJezebel writing the sex talk off as completely wrong, though. Short of writing the dialogue in late Roman street Latin, the nearest we can get is to use modern phrasing that has the same effect and impact. I am sure some couples must have enjoyed dirty talk then, as they do now, and the choice of phrases is entirely appropriate if she was one of those women. The problem is that I don't think she could be. Where would she have learned it from given how boring her previous experiences of sex had been? It's too much of a character change, too fast.