All Comments on 'While She Slept'

pretty well done - keep it up - i will read more when you have it.

I this, I that...sometimes it is good to know other pronouns.

I found no problems with this magically Delicious story. Intoxicating- that is a word.

It was perfect, but it almost seems like you cut parts out.

He laid back to get teased, because it was her game, and the next sentence, she's guiding him in. I would have loved reading about the teasing, too.

amazing read short n sweet.....best part was u returned life's essence....loved it..

Hypnotic!!!