Loved the end. Shame its only one page though. Keep it up.
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Anonymous01/26/12
very hot
I could have done without the use of the word cunt, it seems too vulgar. However I loved the ending, wish there had been more to read. Would love to know what happens next. This could very well be a great novel with many couples visiting the chocolate shop.
Love, love, love this story! There are a few technical things that do detract a bit...but overall I loved it. I am a fan of shorter stories, so that was a plus for me. Especially since I was pretty worked up by that point ;)
English
Nicely done
Loved the end. Shame its only one page though. Keep it up.
very hot
I could have done without the use of the word cunt, it seems too vulgar. However I loved the ending, wish there had been more to read. Would love to know what happens next. This could very well be a great novel with many couples visiting the chocolate shop.
Bravo!
Magnificently hot.
Indeed!
Love, love, love this story! There are a few technical things that do detract a bit...but overall I loved it. I am a fan of shorter stories, so that was a plus for me. Especially since I was pretty worked up by that point ;)
Great idea and very well executed. 5 stars.
i liked the dough part but not the ass part! ( ' ' , )
so good i wanted more!!! that was the best "sex" i've ever read! haha!
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