How It Happened Ch. 02

OMG Hurry please!!!!

Need more!! Too short!! Too sweet. So very delicious and addictive!! Hurry please!!!!!!!!!

Wow

Great job! You are a talented writer; you are nailing the pacing. Keep it up!

Need more to happen, but great job to this point

Nothing but praise here--just be sure to get another installment soon where Mike really "nails" Khrystie. ;)

It was okay, Delete this as a "pt 2" and make it another page on the first submission.

It's a good story, but it's being stretched out too much

I like the subtle and erotic work up of them playing around with each other before they have sex, and it seems that they are really hot for each other, and even love each other more than they really should, so I hope that they finally consummate their sexual union soon.

Thanks for the good read.

THE MOTHER:

she's on - husband 7???!!!!!!! what will happen when she does
learn about what's going on... hahahahahahahaha... no more
- husband 7... she'll only want one thing... hahahahahahaha

Pacing is fine

Don't let people rush your groove.

Better than the first part.

It's been over 7 months since you wrote this. I hope this isn't the end. I think you have a gift for writting, and I would like to see more.

Deserve more.

Both your readers and also your characters deserve more.
Puleese.

Don't quit now, not bad for a first attempt.

Much better that many other's first attempts, maybe a little draggy in places but that is better than a wham, bam, thank you ma'am. Keep writing.