by barista808
Excellent writing style.
Perfect Grammar, punctuation and spelling.
Lacks detail, which is both a positive and negative. Give enough detail to draw the reader in but don't describe individual sensations too deeply unless you feel you can do it justice.
overall I can't complain.
I have to agree with everyone here. This is well written, and yes it does jump rather quick to the hot and spicy father-daughter sex scene, its still very well written.
Definitely could have been fleshed out in the middle. Starts out strong and caring (which I loved), but there just...wasn't any transition. Any hint, even, that either of them had such feelings until they were suddenly in the act. Pity, considering that the writing was also of high quality.
I don't actually disagree at all; my subsequent re-readings of this one left me a bit disappointed. I wrote it on my phone at work. I am planning on either editing this one, or just reworking it entirely. I'm glad there's some constructive criticism, and I'm ecstatic that you took the time to read it!
nice story keep on writing. couldve used a little bit more detail but over all a really good story :-).